SS: Unraveled. *COMPLETE* 22/4/14 - Page 15

Ankita

@_SenbonZakura_

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Posted: 10 years ago

I am so late!

:'(

Resing for now. Will comment when I reach office.

Awww!! You made me all mushy mushy!

You know, this name is perfect. Unraveled. Nothing else will actually make him realize he loves her unless she is gone.

And Paro... Haaye. She was gonna come back anyway. Such boundless unconditional love she has for him. And to sate my soul, Rudra loves her as much, if not more.

Beautifully written yaar Niyo! And what is this about leaving IF? What is happening?

And I am terribly upset that I am two pages late!

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niyoti

@niyoti

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: peppygeek
The unspoken words created such a beautiful impact. I was pleasantly surprised by Rudra's demeanor. He didn't coerce Paro but left himself open for rejection. Extra love for such swift updates!

I think underneath all the bluster is a very tender person. And I'm sure when he realizes he's in love with her, he won't coerce her, he can't imagine hurting her. He already has his instincts honed towards her well being and when he comes to terms with his love for her, I think it may get magnified.

Thank you so much for reading and the lovely feedback 😳

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zanayaforever

@zanayaforever

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Posted: 10 years ago

AWESOME niyo 👏 👏
Luved his pledge at the end...

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niyoti

@niyoti

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: _SenbonZakura_

Awww!! You made me all mushy mushy!

You know, this name is perfect. Unraveled. Nothing else will actually make him realize he loves her unless she is gone.

And Paro... Haaye. She was gonna come back anyway. Such boundless unconditional love she has for him. And to sate my soul, Rudra loves her as much, if not more.

Beautifully written yaar Niyo! And what is this about leaving IF? What is happening?

And I am terribly upset that I am two pages late!

So glad you liked it Anky😳

Though i wasn't very sure how last part would turn out. I'm still not completely happy with it. But i wanted to put it up and not delay it. I would hate leaving it incomplete.

I won't be as active as i was before on IF.😔

I'm so glad you made it regardless of page number.🤗

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niyoti

@niyoti

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Suni
Loooved the last para - the rain on the parched desert. 👏Uff, the vows he made. Love that she was preparing to come back the same evening - they can't stay away from each other. 😊Lovely ending to a beautiful story.

Thank you suni 😳

I was using the desert and rain metaphor for Rudra and Paro. So glad you liked it 😳

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rati123

@rati123

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Posted: 10 years ago

You write so beautifully, it is a treat !! Please also update Moments in Between. Desperately waiting for that.

Also do you have an index of all your work ? Would love to read it.

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761540

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Posted: 10 years ago

Amazing , u write so well ..

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niyoti

@niyoti

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: aruni50218
Yay!!! Beautiful end to that beautiful story...!

Originally posted by: zanayaforever
AWESOME niyo 👏 👏
Luved his pledge at the end...

Originally posted by: custodian75
Lovely end to the story. Both needed to communicate their love to each other.

Thank you guys!😳

Originally posted by: Aish002
aww...such a lovely end to a wonderful story on PaRud...the rain falling on desert was very symbolic...Paro is going to fill Rudra's life with her love...something for which he has been yearning for all his life..well done...👏

Thank you so much! I'm glad you got the desert-rain metaphor😃

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TheMogambo

@TheMogambo

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Posted: 10 years ago

Niyo...me too in ur club...*hi-fi*

Rudra needs to miss Paro...and that separation is gonna make him spill those 3 precious words...

This was a true delight to read...enjoyed it thoroughly...

Waiting...for more...😊

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lourel24

@lourel24

IF-Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

it was beautiful.Rudra won't realize his love until he goes through the turmoil of having lost her.u portrayed it very well.I found it so 🥱 when paro confessed she was going to return anyway.

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