OS: Yesterday and Tomorrow--Repentance-Completed. - Page 15

OMG sooo goood!! I genuinely had goosebumps, you should work as a new CV for Rangrasiya lol. Keep those updates coming dude :)

OMG...just came across your OS. I don;t usually read these things and new to this stuff but I just simply had to comment after reading yours!  Its brilliant and you are an amazing writer!!! Wonderful job with conveying the emotional conflicts of the characters, the angst, the anguish and love. Truly impressed with your writing skills :) Love it!!!

Edited by desisoapie - 10 years ago

Very steamy and sensual and then it hits you! Rudra's lust is his lust to always be right and that is all that matters. Nice creativity, using the sexual desire as a symbol of what his real desire is. That is my take anyway, not sure if I am reading it the way you intended. As usual the piece is riveting. You have a gift. ⭐️

Quite intense update 

really nyc update . i found it a bit dark .

Amazingly dark and despairing right from the begining.The atmosphere is claustrophobic and clawing .Your use of descriptive language manages not only to set the scene but also to convey the brooding menacing aura that surrounds that room.The piece starts off erotic but then turns into something so nightmarish that we are repulsed by it and our own initial titilation.Just as Rudra is repulsed by his own actions towards Paro so we too feel the revulsion of the whole situation.It takes a strong heart to read this and Iam sure a stronger heart to write this excellent powerful piece of imagery.There are parts which are so lyrical to make it almost poetic and Iassume that was the intention since it is a dream and so the reaction required from the audience is that of being lulled into the web and then wham hit you with the hideous truth.I cant praise you enough.It is a pleasure to read your writing and come away with an emotional experience.

I love the way you made RUDRA suffer mentally HE deserve it
In shows the male leads always get their ways so easily even after doing terrible acts which I've always felt wrong So I love your redemption tracks be it RR OR IPKKND :-)

Wow ! Such an intense update ! I was in the end a bit releaved to read that it was a nightmare .

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Edited by napstermonster - 10 years ago

Have you considered trying a blog to house your works? I really like it, and reading and formatting is a much more pleasant experience.