Thank you so much for this wonderful OS! <333
Beautifully written!TP is my favourite show at the moment!I'm looking forward to read more from you on this forum! π
Thank you so much for this wonderful OS! <333
Beautifully written!TP is my favourite show at the moment!I'm looking forward to read more from you on this forum! π
Originally posted by: ...Maham...
This was beautiful. I loved the idea of Anshuman falling in love with Paakhi being much like sinking in quicksand. The way you used Titanic as a backdrop of his feelings towards the end was brilliant. I did have problem with the language at some points because you switch too frequently between tenses.. it was a tad bit unsettling but otherwise this made for a very nice read. You have understood the characters and their relationship very, very well and that was perhaps the best part. Some bits were beautifully written. :))
Keep writing!- Maham.
Originally posted by: Samanalyse
This is absolutely WONDERFUL! πππ
Your narration was so vivid, so complex, so encompassing of all the confusing and paradoxical moments that pass over Anshuman that I was left completely satisfied at the end, even though your protagonist is left in a moment of willful oblivion.You have beautifully captured the painful ambiguity in Anshuman's mind at this point in the story! I hope this couple continue to inspire you because you have such a nuanced understanding of the characters!
Originally posted by: Javeria3991
Awesome one shots.
I love the way you pen down Anshuman feeling for Pakhi.No matter how much he deny he can't ignore Pakhi anymore, no matter how much he say no to his heart but his heart is stolen by Pakhi. He feel lively and enjoy moments of his life in his home, around his son and especially in his family which Pakhi completes it. Even the thoughts of her make her smile, she is the biggest deal which he earn and the biggest secret and reality of life at which he is failing to decode and understand.
Originally posted by: AbandonedRiddle
Thank you so much Maham for this helpful comment.Like I said, I haven't written in almost 2 years now, so things get a little rustyπ³. But I corrected a few errors related to the tenses after reading your comment, which I honestly had overlooked in my excitement and nervousness earlier.I am glad you liked the analogy of Anshuman falling in love with the quicksand bit, it was something that just came to me.Titanic was actually not even a part of my original idea, when it was coming to me but when I got started on Word, it just wrote itself.I am pleased the most because I am glad that my readers can see AnKhi in my writing. I hate F' where the author destroys or completely changes characters just to fan and fuel any schoolgirl fantasies, so I try to stay as much within character as possible. So thank you, I am glad you can see them and their relationship here.Once again thank you so much for your helpful comment.
Loved the OS!!
Liked how you put all the things like pleats, Pakhi getting wet and the titanic bit
Hope we get to read more from you
Originally posted by: ...Maham...
I totally get the rusty bit. I'm trying to get back to writing myself. I hope I did not sound too critical, that really wasn't the intention. As for the titanic bit.. Stories do write themselves don't they? :) I always feel it comes out better that way. I agree about the characters.. its actually hard to write some and you did a very impressive job in capturing the complexity of Anshuman's character. Will look forward to more from you. :))
His aggression is not physical, he doesnt have this push-shove-fall-in-my-arms-have -an-eyelock love story with Paakhi which is now out there aplenty and is distasteful for me.
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