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Originally posted by: ssktlk

Shirley, is an EMA on the cards? Imagining MB as your ashu, can't imagine that, but so eager for it😉 . This is a very interesting angle which we haven't seen before and would love to see it go forward. Please update soon ,hard to wait.

Originally posted by: aardhan

Chapter 2 Review

Shirley, the chapter is fantastic as far as the dialogs and emotions are considered. But even if I understand Nidhi's mental state as much as I do, I did find some things quite forced. It did not seem natural to me, just my POV. 😃

Thank you Aarti.. I am glad you liked the dialogues and emotions I portrayed. For the rest, well as I'm entitled to my POV, so r u. But let me tell one thing very frankly, I don't regret a single word I have written so far.. in fact I have full conviction about everything that I have penned in this OS. And Aarti, I am extremely sorry if my other words sound brusque or harsh in any way.. hurting u or any of my readers is the last thing I ever intend.. so please don't take it that way..

I think we are both sensible and mature enough to speak frankly without worrying too much about if will hurt the other person or not.. I enjoy such healthy and frank debates so pl. continue this.

Well, it was shocking and inappropriate to see her forcibly pull such a senior doctor into the room. 😲 Owning to the fact that after 5 long years she has finally got her confirmation and she knows there was no other way Ashutosh would ever talk to her, I can see her point. But after that those photos, her confession that she has followed him everywhere just to get a glimpse of him and hear his voice, all that borders on obsession and even stalking, this part seemed a bit too much to me...

Even with all those questions and doubts 5 years back, I think what she felt was frustration, devastation, hopelessness and despair, but in my POV it is hard to believe she would actually stalk him in this manner! And to have done it for 5 years! She is older and bolder now, but that was not always so. I also concede that since she has never revealed herself till now, it is technically not stalking, but in her mind that was what she was doing...

So, when she knows for certain her love was not one-sided and felt it was time he knew the truth! Again that is why I can discount her pulling him into the room, because seeing and hearing him all evening she had probably guessed that unless and until she pushed him into a corner she would not be able to have to have that all important conversation, one that was already 5 years late!

And by hook or crook she has shown the photos, let him know the depth of her love and shocked him into confessing his. The next moment the tears, crying her heart out, this part is beautiful and its natural. Its as if a big burden has been lifted off her. For five long years she had closed herself off after that rejection wondering if she was capable of trusting her instincts, her judgment because the first major decision she took about her life, had ended in disaster, in a rejection. But now she finally knew that Ashutosh had rejected her out of fear, it was a knee-jerk reaction by him thinking that would save both of them from censure, it was because he loved her too and not because he did not love her... hence those tears, more like a relief. Its as if finally she knows what she had seen and understood from his demeanor and in his eyes was indeed correct. And what's more, she also knows now that like her he has not forgotten that love!

Frankly Aarti, I don't really know, how I am supposed to respond to the above 4 paras. As far as my understanding goes, it seems to me, that you have posed some interesting questions here and then replied to them yourself.. So, there is nothing more I can add. I have to let my future chapters speak. I think it is a very interesting analysis, and believe me I thoroughly enjoyed reading it,

But what I felt forced was her falling on him and crying... What would have been natural was her just crying her heart out, a break down after bottling it up for 5 years, crying for her love, that she had finally got but it was 5 years late, for the life they could have had, had he not shunned it. At this point he should have been the one, shocked to witness the depth of her distress, to come forward and hug her, wipe her tears,almost as if he cannot help himself, cannot hold back after just learning that even she had loved him all along and it was not just a crush.

It was an emotionally weak moment for him too, not just for her! After all she is the woman he still loved and to see her literally falling apart, that should have been his reaction! But a few moments later moved back, as if suddenly recalling that she was married now. But then when he rushes and hugs her, she does not push him away, as if cherishing that embrace, almost a dream come true, till he himself moves away from her. To me that would have been more natural a reaction, again its purely my POV. 😊

Again Aarti, as you very rightly said, this is just a POV, isn't it? I mean, I know that a lot of people feel she should not have fallen into his arms breaking down, I don't see anything wrong at all. I agree you think the hug should have been done differently as you have explained so nice. That could definitely have been done.. but I don't thing there is anything wrong with the way I portrayed. Scenes can be portrayed differently by different writers, right? And I think there is NO SINGLE CORRECT WAY, if you know what I mean. Once again, I request not to take it negatively.

The rest of the emotionally charged convo, his confession about when and where he started developing feelings for her, his own disgust at that, his attempts to salvage some sanity in that situation, her accusation that he had forced her into a life of suffering... all that is excellent! Very powerful, one can feel its intensity just reading it. Awesome! So, who calls him - Mallika?

Originally posted by: Pardeshi.Mithu

Oh Yes Shirley ji pakaa. ... nahi toh ek kaam karti hoon ill tell her to have a look at this page of ur thread 😃 Vaise bhi she has to scrutinize bhi na ki mera kounsa comment sahi hain kounsa galat and then tell me what is right and what is wrong! uska kaam bhi asaan ho jaayega 😃

Originally posted by: Suvika.

AWESOME...BOTH OF THEM MARRIED!!

OH OH..ME FIRST 😆

Originally posted by: Pardeshi.Mithu

Kya ho raha hain??????? Mujhe na chakkar aa rahe hain 🤢 Ye Nidhi kya kar rahi hain!!!!

Mithee, Agar aap ko padhke chakkar aa rahe hain, toh socho, mera likhte waqt mera kya haal hota hoga..😆😆😆

Jokes apart, this is the most challenging writing I have done in fiction. I am enjoying every bit of it and writing each word with complete conviction.

And Shirley ji agar hume kisi ke saath rishte main suffocation sa feel ho raha hain toh kya karna chahiye??????? U know ek ghutan see hone lagti hain tab kya????

Wat suffocation u talking about here Mithee? If you are referring to NiHan marital life, there is no suffocation at all. It's more like a lack of love - that X factor is missing. But Mithee I ask you, kya ye zaroori hai ke har shaadi ka base love ho? sometimes, friendship is a good base too, many times it is a better base than love.

Iske aage bhi bahut kuch likhna chahti hoon, but that would give away my story,, plus you are way too smart.. you will understand by reading between the lines.

Hey! mere comment ko galat way main mat lena... it was just a reaction after reading such a chapter! 😆

But u know somewhere I feel ki Nidhi ka vo sab baithkar sochna jaayaz tha!!! The way she started thinking ki ab sab thik ho jaayega, vo Rohan ko samjha degi and She'll start a new life with Ashutosh it was genuine... (Baawara mann dekhne chala ek sapna!) I can completely understand Nidhi here...

@bold - Oh Mithee, thank you so so much.. I can't even tell you how good that statement felt. I feel like giving u a big big hug

U are right, jab aisa kuch hota hai jaisa ke is situation me hua, toh we start misinterpreting the happenings acc. to wat we want. we conveniently settle everything in our own minds without knowing or realizing the feasibility n the reality around us.

Chalo, chand log toh hai who are actually understanding Nidhi here instead of judging her with very narrow ideas of right n wrong...

I am wondering, hum sab itne righteous kab se ho gaye. But then I guess I should not forget that we are the same people who applaud the fact that Sita ne agni pariksha di thi, while no one asked Ram to do that...

And Baba can actually feel Ashu and Nidhi's restlessness 😭 Pinjre main band panchi ki tarah! Kya kare pata nahi... kaise baahar nikle pata nahi... jo hua usse kaise badle pata nahi 😭 But hatts of to U that u could express all these emotions of Ashni so beautifully in this chapter 👏,,,,,,👏,,,,,,,,👏,,,,,,,,👏,,,,,,,👏,,,,,,,👏,,,,,,,,👏 Ur an excellent writer

Exactly you got it ryt.. yehi haalat hai dono ki..

@Bold - THANK YOU SO MUCH MITHEE. I take a deep bow..

Par Amma Ashutosh ki shaadi kyu karaai?????? 😭 😭 Main yaha hoon abhi tak kunwaari 😭 😭 I hate u Shirley ji 😭 😆

Arre main kya karti yaar?😕😆😆😆 aap toh queue me se hath gayi, Poonam got busy wid her studies, and next was Mallika - mujhe bhi uspe daya aa gayi.. bechari 17 (12 + 5) saal se wait kar rahi thi🤣

And aap ke marital status ke baare me kaafi confusion sa hai.. kabhi kunwaari, kabhi married to mr, khan 😕😆

Chalo thanks for the update and it was ekdum paisa vasool 😎 😎

You are most welcome Mithee. And paisa?😕 Kitna kharcha kiya ji is update pe?😆😆

Originally posted by: shobsrocks

really ashu married mallika...

SHOCKED very much sshirley...

I am thrilled that my reader is shocked..😛

as u told very challenging one now im agreed tat

hmm.. I know.. but, sometimes I feel that y did I have to take up such a topic,, but, I m enjoying this more than any of my previous writings..😳😃

but my god i cant imagine mallu with ashu

Originally posted by: vidyasabde

omg...what a revelation !...both married and one kid too...is this quadrangle ever going to be solved?...so many people are involved.

Quadrangle indeed.. and that too a very tangled one.. 😆

@bold- yes, therein lies my challenge.😳

Nidhi's dejected "Aakhir 12 sal 12 seconds par bhari pad gaye" said it all. In the serial both fight against odds in very silent manner...but never succumb to any type of pressure.There they knew if they marry some one else it will be injustice or even cheating to the person...they preferred to live with the "khai" than fill it with new relations.

Well, many people are not given that choice to live in that 'khai' as you call it. Nidhi here did not have a choice. She postponed her mrg by 2 years on the pretext of MD, but there was no way she could refuse to marry, without straining relations with her family, esp. DB.

Here the uptake is different...wonder how this Ashni are going to come out of it .

thank you. Now, even I wonder how many of you would actually like or even understand my ending, but no problem, I m gearing up for brickbats.

intersting progress Shirly...this was one quick update .

Thank you so much...

thanks.

You are welcome

Originally posted by: bc123456

So no EMA , Shirley what a tangled web u weave , first Ndhis obsession with him despite being married , now Ashutosh's is married to Mallika , wow , and has a kid to boot 😲

So , probably this meeting will sort out their obsession for each other and the will go back as happier individuals to their respective partners , with the adage " that's its better to have loved and lost then never loved at all" 😭

Ok.. I don't know what to say to all this, without giving away my story.. but yes, I must applaud you for your excellence and depth in analyzing my story so well. 👏👏

Young. Lady u made us have so many discussions , and counter discussions , and now u must be amused at how serious we all got

Actually, yes I am highly amused. But not for the reason you think On the contrary, I am glad my OS spurned such animated, interesting and in depth analysis. You have no idea how much my respect for you Dr. Babs has multiplied, due to the way you put across your point during the discussions.

You know, the answers you gave to others here, was exactly wat I would have said. And, yes, I am so thankful to you. I did not have to step in at all.. (I am not saying this because you kind of gave me the benefit of doubt and even defended my story, but because you analysed so so well)

I am amused because I saw the way certain people think.. and frankly yes, I have been laughing v. hard at some comments by some so-called sensible people. I am sure, even you must be laughing at those comments..😉

But very interesting twist and beautifully written 😉😆

Thank you so much.