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Reshma

@Reshh16

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Posted: 10 years ago

1. Please allot marks to every entry that is put up here as the writers would love the feedback. Explain the reason for allotting your marks for it will help them become better writers. Post your votes after giving your marks. You marks should be of the pattern

THEME 1:

Entry 1: x/10

Entry 2: y/10 and etc..

Same thing to be followed for the 2nd theme for all poems.

2. Please comment on the poems in the main contest thread. You can quote the poem that you want to comment about and give your precious comments there.

3. Participants are not allowed to vote for their own entries. If done, their entry would be disqualified.

4. Last date for voting is November 9, 2013, 07 PM IST.( Im giving so long a time because of my upcoming exams)

5. Please do not violate the above rules and hope you enjoy reading the poems..😊

Edited by Raaz_sweet - 10 years ago

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Reshma

@Reshh16

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Posted: 10 years ago

Cid has been entertaining so long to us
and we r learning so much by watching cid just
just by watching cid we learn and adopt in life
teaches us how to spent each and every moment of a beautiful life!

Being a cidian, glad moment of life
being a cidian, moves us to run in healthy path
and we r bleased to move our life towards bright light
which always catch our brain, teaches to save people life!!

Life is always beautiful when it comes toward success
being a cidian pot the meaning of precious life, we get success after hardness
day and night work and work
gives the fruitful meaning of the life when get success after the hardness!!!

Being a cidian, we always try to learn more
cid always teaches us new and new
through every episodes it teaches more and more
but it depends on us how much we learn more or less!!!!

"soch ke age jurum ke piche"
cid always come up bringing this ultimate goals
being a cidian we must try to achieve this same goal
otherwise no meaning of cidian, until and unless we donot achieve this goals!!!!!

Aisa bhi kabhi ho sakta hain, Socha naa Tha...

Ek TV show se main iss kadar jud sakti hoon, Socha naa Tha...

Kabhi chauk jaati hoon soch kar main yeh baatien

Kaise jud gaye CID se mere jeevan ke anokhe naatien

Jaane kaise jud gaya ek bhavuk bandh inn kirdaaron se

Kuch toh khas hain iss TV show ke kalakaron mein

16 saal ho gaye hain, yeh naata hain bada gehra

Har kidaar lagta hain mano kisi apne ka chehara

Yeh anokha bandh hai par kar naa paau kisi par zaahir

Jo kiya toh chubte hain logon ke mazak rupi teer

Jab pata chala iss forum ka tab aaya man ko Chain

Har lamha jeeya yaha banker sacchi CIDian

Yahan mile aise saathi jinke mere jaise hi the jazbaat

Baat paayi main sab se mere dil mein thi jo baat

Khusiyaan baati, Gum bhi baate, baata jeevan ke adhayay

Mere liye maine rakhne lagi innki bahumulya ray

Inn saathiyon se aise bandh jud jayenge, sachmuch Socha naa Tha...

Ek TV show se itna kuch paa jaaungi, sachmuch Socha naa Tha...

1998 was the year that it all began,

What was previously perceived as impossible, BP Singh proclaimed "Yes We Can".

It has been the hottest commodity on Indian Television for 16 long years,

By being head and shoulders above all and sundry, CID has earned the respect of its peers.

Since its grand inception, it has tended to rustle a fair few important feathers,

A chasm of envy for some, and a chasm of glittering happiness for all others.

It has awed the audience and mesmerized us into silent veneration.

Its brilliance is a norm, a rare failure an aberration.

An hour of poignant emotions and sublime drama,

Immaculate in conception, clinical in execution.

All we do is hope that this beautiful show earns all the plaudits it deserves,

In this world of cynicism and sadism, CID is the one thing that embellishes our happiness reserves.

The dashing duo are the undisputed pillars of this scintillating show,

Their ethereal performances transcending all boundaries, to them we bow.

Fabulous flair embroidered with the finest gossamer silk, they have carved themselves a niche,

A Detailed panoply of all their works would create the most sumptuous pastiche.

ACP pradyuman brings forth exuberance and panache,

Shreya, the avid learner, is as sweet as white chocolate ganache.

Purvi, the wondrous beauty, is an embodiment of life's joyous essence,

Delighting us, week in week out, with her quintessential effervescence.

Not to forget, the impeccable Sachin and Freddy, the innocent charmer,

Rajat's hardline brazenness and Pankaj's funny frolics induce an excited murmur.

They are irreplaceable cogs of the gracefully lilting CID wheel,

They instill in us renewed vigour and an imploring zeal.

It is an amazing feeling being a CIDian,

Undaunted spirit, unquenchable thirst and a disciplined flamboyance.

All make up this phenomenon, a matter of immense pride for one and all,

A show, which the most exalted pantheons do call.

We are irrevocably in love with CID,

It is not a fleeting dalliance.

A panacea for all strife,

A genuine lagniappe in the ocean of life.😃

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Reshma

@Reshh16

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Posted: 10 years ago

CID ke do honhaar officers Abhi aur Daya

Jab saath mein karte hain khoonioyon ki khoj

bina palak jhapke nihaarti hoon dono ko
yeh khushi mein badalte hain har dil ka bojh.

Chaar saal pehle swatantrata diwas ki raat

aisa ek bhayaanak pal aaya

Bomb blast mein ghaayal hua Abhi
Par Daya ke chehre par koi dukh nahi aaya.

Hairaan hue is drushya ko dekhkar CID ke fans

ki kya yahi hai Abhi ka woh dost Daya
jo humesha karta tha Abhi ki jaan ki raksha
ya yahi hai CID team mein ghusa hua behrupiya.

ACP se Abhi ke khilaaf karne laga shikaayat

bar mein sharaab peekar naachne laga

Aadhi raat ko forensic lab se data churaya
ACP aur Salunkhe ke sawaalon ka jawaab nahi de paaya.

CID team ko mili ek tasveer

jisse unhe yakeen hua ki yahi hai woh behrupiya
khoj nikaala us behrupiye ko ek truck company mein
Par usne poore CID team par goli chala diya.

Swatantra diwas ke samaroh par

ACP ne Abhi ko stage par bulaya
Tab aya Daya haath mein gun liye
Aur doosre darwaze se asli Abhi aaya.

Sachchayi aa gayi sabke saamne

ki behrupiya Rocky ban gaya tha Abhijeet

CID team mein shaamil hua tha kai dino se
aur sirf Daya dekh paaya uski asleeyat.

Rocky ne ACP ko maarne ki dhamki di

Daya ne uske koshish ko kar diya nakaamyab

usi hathapayi mein Rocky ki gun chal gayi
Aur khoon se lathpath ho gayi Daya ki chaati.

Dukh mein doob gaye CID ke officers

Fans ke aankhon se aansoon nikal aaye

Saara desh khushiyan mana raha tha

par CID fans ke dilon par dukh ka sannata tha.

I remember the day when it happened

And to this day it shakes my nerves

What would have happened that day

If fate took a sharp curve?

Behrupia the episode was titled

And I assumed it an episode of disguise

To find out who Rocky was

And all clues trying to misguide

Suspicious glances , torn up paper lay

With every caution the plan was spread

Who would it be of the three?

The very thought of it made my head spin instead

And then it was revealed ,the wicked man

Laughed in malice with a throw of a head

And Daya in the Battle field followed By Abhi the true one

And within minutes the bullet sped

They nor us knew who was killed

Nor did we know what lay ahead

Daya emerged we thought victorious

Abhi and ACP smiled , relieved of dread

But then he swiveled,in an unsteady way

His body bloodied by the bullet , and the pain

We saw in his closing eyes

Daya toh Gaya we heard, and then the villian was slain

We saw the pain in ACP's eyes, heart torn

The guilt in Abhi's eyes, for he was the aim

Daya collapsed in a heap lifeless

And a cry of anguish was all that came

The reality of the scene as it stood

The momentary and illusionary victory of the wicked

The heavy gasps of Daya, raised our heartbeats

His failing health and his lifelessness on the bed

They stood still in yawning shock as a bullet tore through him
He lost his senses and the shooter rose with an evil glint
The shooter was soon shot dead by the officer's dearest companion
But the wounded man was struggling for every single breath
While the ambulance was still stuck amidst an ignorant traffic
The tear-jerking eyes knew they were never so feeble before
The doctor said he can't survive long
The broken team went in pretending to be strong
But he could see their real faces behind the weak mask, lying on his bed
Alas he didn't know what it meant for them to lose him
The team screamed aloud as his breathing got heavier
Preparing injections, electric shocks, all useless!
He recalled his best moments as a brave and devoted officer
While the team's helplessness was purely expressed
Soon a killing silence, stole their beloved one away
Their eyes blinded by emptiness inside
They couldn't live he had died
Suddenly an officer spotted his toe moving, yes he was alive!
Happiness was boundless, but they had to resume their duties with a heavy heart.
Soon they received a call and rushed in the hospital to find their brave heart smiling
He wanted to join them, but was restricted to take rest.
Yet when the officers were in the bureau
He walked in with his lovely smile
"Inspector Daya reporting sir"
And brought in the lost aura
Smiling faces, happiness, completeness everywhere
What he faced was the worst of all
But, still he rose!





A day of Aug.'09- 'twas but a nightmare for the team.
Whose the enemy within?Little could anyone deem.
But Sr.Insp.Daya,he defied all odds-saved his friend,
Risked his own life and put enemy's plans to an end.
When all the clouds of trouble did seem to leave,
Shocked and aghast-they could not believe.
There he lay,shot and wounded.
They wished,'if we could but undo it'.
Tears rolled down their eyes.
Never had they thought such a situation could rise.
Freddy,Abhijeet,ACP-they all wished,with a true heart
That their dear fellow,from them,never does depart.
He did battle death, and emerged victorious.
Their eyes sparkled with glee and a victory glorious.
And thus it was-the sun shone bright and clear.
Full of happiness did the whole team appear.
He entered the bureau with a humble and heroic gait.
So much elated were Abhijeet & ACP,one cannot in words state.
Affably,he spoke,"Inspector Daya reporting sir".
Full of felicity and pride for him they were.
Seeing Daya back, joyous was their mood.
They felt within the team a vigour renewed.
Zealous,ready to solve case,with ever so profound dedication.
The evident zeal made 'em smile-the bond reflected in the conversation.
Indelible,a moment so memorable it is.
Cherishable,a moment of infinite bliss.
Together they'll fight for truth,for justice,forever.
With a bond as strong as can be,they stand united as ever.



How does it feel to finally have a refreshing shower of rain
After a demonic inferno, that ravages like a mark of Cain?
For this moment I speak of followed an episode most dire
Not many here can easily forget the rage of that hellfire

Four years ago it came, give or take a month or two
A tale of betrayal, suspicion and most wrathful ire
A faceless impostor, red herrings, the question, "It is who?"
It was but a set-up to that devilish moment of hellfire

It came like a raging hurricane, oh how it shook us all
A river of blood and fatal injury to he who stood up tall
Daya sir had been shot; Abhijeet sir dispatched that evil liar
But even as they rushed him away, down came that hellfire

The terrible news was an utter shock, like some horrific dream
The wound had been deadly; our bodies and hearts flared like a pyre
For our beloved senior, we sobbed along with the team
As his eyes closed and body went still, we were consumed by hellfire

Amid rumours most hateful and vile, we spent a terrible week
The sight of his successful recovery, desperately we did seek
But then from a sea of grief, risen as though from a mire
Came a most welcome miracle, out of that raging hellfire

Relief flooded our hearts as we then saw his body stir
Safe and sound he was, going strong, the hero we all admire
What a sight was their reunion, the team with Daya sir
For nothing can break our bond, not even this hellfire

The sight of his triumphant return, his majestic gait and stride
Was simply unforgettable, our hearts flew with joy and pride
Pros and cons and all, watching that moment we never tire
For it embodies our bond with them, that case of raging hellfire

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visrom

@visrom

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Posted: 10 years ago

I think this thread is only for rating/voting...I'll move all posts to the other thread. Please discuss there.

Please post all doubts/clarifications on

Invoke Your Creativity~ CID Forum Poem Contest '13(Discussion thread)

thread only.

This thread is only for voting!!!

Edited by visrom - 10 years ago

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unknown

@sheroo9000

IF-Sizzlerz

Posted: 10 years ago

Theme 1:

Entry 1 : 8/10

Entry 2 : 9/10

Entry 3 : 7/10

Theme 2:

Entry 1 : 9/10

Entry 2 : 7.5/10

Entry 3 : 7/10

Entry 4 : 8.5/10

Entry 5 : 8/10

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mano86

@mano86

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Posted: 10 years ago

Theme 1:

Entry 1 : 7/10

Entry 2 : 10/10

Entry 3 : 8/10

Theme 2:

Entry 1 : 10/10

Entry 2 : 8.5/10

Entry 3 : 8/10

Entry 4 : 9.5/10

Entry 5 : 7/10

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visrom

@visrom

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Posted: 10 years ago

Theme 1:

1 - 6/10
Wish you had gone a bit more deep into the subject.
For eg in stanza 1 it is a general feeling, what is it that CId adds to life is not mentioned. I didn't understand the meaning of 'pot' in this line - 'being a cidian pot the meaning'.

2 - 8/10
Lovely poem, fits the theme well and also mentions our forum which is an important aspect of being a CIDian.

3 - 6/10
This poem is lovely as a standalone poem, but it mentions about CID, not about being a CIDian. Hence cutting marks.

Theme 2:

I cannot comment on any of these poems in theme 2. All are about behrupiya and they all are awesome...we can see that every poem here has been written straight from the heart. Giving marks to these poems is unfair, still I'll give..

1 - 9.5/10
2 - 9.5/10
3 - 10/10 (this the most 😭 of all, hence half mark extra)
4 - 9.5/10
5 - 9.5/10.

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Jackles

@Jackles

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Posted: 10 years ago

Theme 1:

Entry 1: 6/10...

Agreed with Vis di. Being a Cidian you should have extended your emotions. In my point of view, all the stanza's contained same story, their should be variety of thoughts...

Entry 2: 9/10...

2nd stanza was great. Good choice of words. Your poem followed the title perfectly👏

Entry 3: 6/10...

Sorry but this poem didnt followed the title...You sketched the show on screen but demand was to give your personal views...

Theme 2:

Entry 1: 9/10

Heart touching and well attempted👏

Entry 2: 9.5/10

Awesome. Very sentimental. It filled the environment with tears yet rejoice due to a perfect scetch of Behrupia😉

Entry 3: 10/10

What should i say. No words to explain. Literally cried while reading it. A tear jerker😭. Work of a professional. Well done👏👏👏

Entry 4: 10/10

Again. Excellent and Superb are just not enough for gratitude. Keep it up👍🏼

Entry 5: 9/10

Nice words😉. 3rd stanza was exquisite...Especially, ''It came like a raging hurricane''...Wow👏

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swagatamghosh94

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Posted: 10 years ago

Theme 1

Entry 1 : 7/10

Entry 2 : 8/10

Entry 3 : 8/10

Theme 2

Entry 1 : 8/10

Entry 2 : 8/10

Entry 3 : 8/10

Entry 4 : 8/10

Entry 5 : 10/10 - Loved this one. Absolutely flawless and eloquent. The best of the lot.

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padma

@padma_ss

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Posted: 10 years ago

#10

Theme 1

/Entry 1: 7/10

Entry 2: 8/10

Entry 3: 7/10

Theme 2

Entry 1: 9.5/10

Entry 2: 9.5/10

Entry 3: 10/10

Entry 4: 9.5/10

Entry 5: 9.5/10

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