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Krani

@Krani

Dazzler

+ 9

Posted: 12 years ago

#41

I am not someone who likes to read many sad fics, because I tend to get too attached to the characters and I am unable to bear the tragedy that occurs.

However, I read this fic for two reasons:

1. Due to the horrifying incident that occurred in Delhi, which has finally reveals that this country is beyond redemption.

2. You are a good writer, and I wanted to see how you would take the incident and how it would affect your writing.

This OS was wonderfully written, with enough emotion to get any reader choked up while reading. You did a wonderful job Rae.

For a reader who doesn't normally read dark/sad things, I gave this a go, and I was not disappointed.

You showed the child to be killed in an accident - however the theme that remains common amongst all children who are victims of abuse, accidents, trauma, etc - their childhood is stolen from them. It scars them, and it has an effect on their close-ones.

I am glad you dedicated it to the children who, unfortunately, had their childhood ripped away from them. Nothing can ever excuse that, ever.

To take away the innocence of a child is the worst thing anyone can do. Ever.

I am disgusted with what has happened, and I feel helpless because I don't see things changing anytime soon.

I just hope that there are people who are still willing to fight back, and you are a writer, and you have decided to contribute in your own way - by writing.

Thank you for this OS,

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Isha

@gilmore

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#42

i am living outside india but when i read such news i cant descripe how i am feeling and i am sure not only me but all people who cant understands how these people can do such a crime

no human can understand these but i really hope that not only but also all get through these time get support and make themselve confident and should leave the past behind them and life

Justice is most important what we are not getting in india fast but it should be done and for that we have to do something

and thanku for u OS because its true we have to move on but the pain will be always there

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CheshireBilli

@CheshireBilli

Dazzler

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#43

Warn me Rae!

This was such a heartbreaking but absolutely beautiful bit of writing!

I can't even IMAGINE what it must be like to lose an infant child! I hope ad pray that no mother or father ever has to go through something as traumatic and incredibly painful. Yet so many do!

Even if I can't comprehend the depth of her grief, I can quite understand WHY Sama felt like time had stopped for her and seemed frozen. How does anyone move on from something like this?

The little private world of the Raizadas and how they'd shuttered themselves in, to present a strong facade to everyone else somehow haunted me more than overt displays of grief.

Time does heal but the passage of that time seems like eternity.

Arnav's interaction with his children was beautiful. As a father, he feels their grief as strongly as they feel it. In fact, his and Khushi's grief is magnified. They mourn not only the loss of a grandchild but also their children's loss, their abject helplessness in the face of a cruel fate. He is an incredible father, husband and man. I loved how Arnav and Khushi complete one another.

I shed quite a few tears while reading this, I'm not embarrassed to admit.

Now I'm terrified to ask for access to Mora Angana and Finally! I both love and hate stories that turn me into a blubbering mess like this.

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710617

Suspended

Posted: 12 years ago

#44

It's a very nice story... When I re read it I felt... The emotions for Arnav as Ayan's dad is pitched properly...but he was also the dead child grand father...they feel the loss even more..arshi not considering their loss of a 3 year grandchild...is not put right..somebody who has played in their arms...

I understand the emotion and dedication for which u have written the story...it's heartfelt,.

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AparnaRenu

@AparnaRenu

Voyager

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#45

This was gut-wrenching, Rae... I was crying by the time I reached "khana khila doon, beta?"

Could see Arnav , a slightly older version, standing there, trying to be strong for the family as always...

Outstanding!!!

And thanks a ton for the PM...

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PSharada

@PSharada

Stunner

+ 10

Posted: 12 years ago

#46

I don't know what to write now - It was just overwhelming to read this and then the Delhi child rape case was also playing on my mind since the past 2-3 days. I myself am a mother to 2 young girls and whenever something like this happens, I am shaken/shocked and don't know how I will protect my girls. After the Delhi rape victim died in Singapore I actually went into a shell - I couldn't enjoy anything for around 2 weeks - Such a beautiful girl, full of life and about to step into a new career and maybe have her own family down the lane snuffed out and dying that young - left me with so much fear for the safety of my girls. I seriously contemplated going back to US - My husband and myself were working in networking company in US when we took transfer to come back to India so that our kids can enjoy the family and understand the culture of India but for the first time I felt so helpless that I didn't want to stay here. But still hoping that people change, we continued staying here but everyday I just pray nothing happens to my girls and also to the other girls here. But the incidents like the Delhi case, shake me up. I just hope no parent has to go through what the parents of the 5yr old girl are going through now. I don't know what else to write. Just hope the parents teach kids the meaning of dignity and no one should drop down to being an animal and the court of India grants the most harshest punishment to the guy who did this horrible crime.

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avantika_2012

@avantika_2012

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#47

I found the link on Nafisa's scrapbook and your scraps there had sort of prepared me for what I was going to find here. But the atmosphere you created with your words gave me goosebumps and made me cry and cry so hard. I don't know how I read the latter half through my tears. Even before it was apparent as to what happened, I had started crying. I still have a lump in my throat. The part where Arnav smiles thinking that there's still hope, brought a fresh wave of tears for me!

All of us, at some point or the other, have dealt with a sort of helplessness (I'm not talking about this particular circumstance only). It makes you angry or breaks you or makes you curse your destiny but there's barely anything that you can do to make it go. You can only hope that maybe a time will come that will make things better.

You gave us 'Just a TV Star' and barely two days later, you come up with this! I don't even think that I'm anyone to comment on your writing abilities. But I must admit, that I do regard you highly!

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wonderblake

@wonderblake

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#48

That was so heart wrenching.

A master piece absolutely.

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RapChick101

@RapChick101

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#49

Beautiful. <3

Grief of any sort, just hurts so much that one can't let go of it in one go.

Each blow, life gives you, you emerge out stronger from it.

Stronger, but not with the same persona any more.

About the tragic sexual assaults.

They have left me shocked. Actually. Till now I read it from Bangalore , where I live but this time I am in Delhi and trust me I don't even wish to express the scare that I am feeliing. I am so disgusted that I was there , sitting in Delhi and doing absolutely nothing to stop this nonsense. I feel sickened that people could go on holding candels but not making any effort when the traumatic victims needed to be hepled out.

-Adya

Edited by AttractiveAdya - 12 years ago

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meem17

@meem17

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#50

It was too beautiful ...words cant express what it made me feel
I hope all those children who have gone un timely from our world
Have a blessed afterlife full of happiness. ...