Collab FF: IPK 2.0-Doing it Right#2-note, pg143 - Page 10

loved the update!!  payal finally met her aakashji😉 mami s funny... nk bhangra and dishum😆 huh oh!! khushi is no less than asr!!! two cud defo play the game😉

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Edited by EXPELLIARMUS - 11 years ago

Now that was "The Slap" of the decade !!! ⭐️ 

Absolutely wonderful!
I, seriously, didn't know that such talented writers are here in the forum.

So Akash and Payal's love story has begun with high on dhamaka from Maami with her usual 'Pyaar Bhari baatein' 😆

Maami's dialogues were awesome and it so reminded me of the original Bond Manorama 😎

OMG! Khushi slapped Arnav 😲 Like really!? 😲

I always loved their fights. I find it so cute( I know 'cute' is not the word but I really do find it!!) 😆 😳

And Kya ending hai!! 👏
Such a powerful statement!
Edited by Mini17 - 11 years ago

Originally posted by: EXPELLIARMUS

Oh my God.

Akash and Payal had a trip-fall-catch,  and a whole jug of water?! 😆

ASR manhandles her, and Khushi shoves him right back, and then the slap!

Loved that you explained the transition from the passion in the previous chapters, to outright animosity! Tag line of the show, indeed!

There are so many things that were very well done here, the Akash-Payal interaction is one of them, and Khushi's comebacks are another.

You deserve applause for writing in Mami lingo, that was awesome!

And Bhangra! 😆

And I loved that dialogue about Arnav descending to new depths after catching her when she fell.

Great job, and I can't wait to see where Invisiblesmile-ji takes this!

Originally posted by: desilover101

omg youve read the new chapter, where is it i cant seem to find it :(

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👏
Khushi's feisty side gets me excited. You revived the characters so beautifully, they were almost tangible.
I loved how both the couples were dealt with simultaneously and the scenes kept interchanging. Very TV drama-esque!

"Kaash uss raat ko hum aap ke baahon main gire naa hotein. Kyunki hum ko bachaate bachaate aap khud itna gir gaye."

^Khushi's final, cut-throat statement was epic. Moon tod jawaab mil gaya Great Singh Raizada ko! 👍🏼


How Khushi knows NK, we are yet to find out!
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Anissa, wonderful Update. I absolutely love Payal and Akash's revival here. They are brilliantly brought out of their shells. And I am glad to see a Payal who knows how to speak in front of Manorama's sing-song of praises.😆 I should also mention, the especial language of Mami has been maintained so thoroughly by you. I won't even dare to attempt it.

Arnav and Khushi - are just both superfluous people, who need a good poke from each other to let out some air. I am really glad that Khushi didn't allow Arnav to manhandle her. Like I said before, the slap did over throw me. I expected him to shout or do something. But I guess the last part of the udpate took care of that also. ASR awaken's almost violently. However, Khushi, has a stark response for him also. Her last line about him falling...epic! A perfect slap without even being a slap and it's echo can be heard miles away. Khushi took the image of ASR and threw it back on his face KKG style.

Nk - Nk - Nk & bhangra🤣 I just loved that part of this update. He is just awesome.

You rocked this update, Anissa. I hope *fingers crossed* I can maintain the course of this story.

Edited by InvisibleSmile - 11 years ago