MG FF - Piya Tose Naina Lage Re ON HOLD TILL 19/6

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<p align="center"><font size="7">Piya Tose Naina Lage Re...
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<font size="4"><font color="#000000">I </font><font color="#000000">am new to India Forums and am starting a new FF on Maan/Geet in Avatars you may have never have had heard of before in any other story...</font></font>
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<font size="4">(Chhote Nawab Sahib) Maan Singh Khurana - The Prince of Agra... Out of the family he does not develop any hatred to those in the lower caste but infact is helpful towards them.</font>

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<font size="4">(Bade Nawaab Sahib) Yashwardan Singh Khurana - The father of Maan. He is still enclosed in old tradition of the caste system.</font>

<font size="4">(Badi Rani Saheba) Anjali Singh Khurana - The mother of Maan. Who is just like Maan, caring towards all but she cannot express it infront of her family as she knows their traditional means.</font>

<font size="4">Chhoti Rani Sahiba) Anvesha Singh Khurana - The younger sister of Maan who is very warm towards Geet and treats her like her sister. </font>

<font size="4">Geetanjali Sharma - The worker in the house... She is regarded as Parayi as her mother and father disowned her at an early age. Unknowingly Maan has fallen for Geet due to her simplicity and lovely nature. She is hated by many in the house as she is considered not the family's standard.</font>

<font size="4">(Nawab Sahib) Uday Singh Khurana - The deceased Chachaji of Maan and Anvesha... the day he knew the truth of Geetanjali he was killed and was not able to inform his family of who she really was.</font>

<font size="4">(Rani Saheba) Meera Singh Khurana - The (widow) Chachi of Maan who hates Geet.</font>

<font size="4">(Chhote Nawab Sahib) Vikranth Singh Khurana - The son of Meera and the younger brother of Maan.</font>

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INDEX

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CHARACTER LIST AND PROLOGUEPAGE 1 
 
PART 1 - PAGE 2
 
PART 2 - PAGE 3

PART 3 - PAGE 7

PART 4 - PAGE 10

PART 5 - PAGE 13

IMPORTANT NOTE FOR THOSE WHO WANT PMs - PAGE 15
 
PART 6 - PAGE 17
 
PART 7 PAGE 21
 
PART 8 - PAGE 25

PART 9 - PAGE 30 
 
PART 10 TEASER - PAGE 34

PART 10 - PAGE 36
 
PART 11 - PAGE 41

PART 12 TEASER - PAGE 45

PART 12 A - PAGE 47

PART 12 B - PAGE 50
 
PART 13 - PAGE 55

PART 14 - PAGE 59

PART 15 - PAGE 67
 

Edited by halemakhan - 11 years ago
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Awesome start dear... Loved it...
Plzz PM me wenever u update...
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PROLOGUE

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 MY FF PARTS ARE INITIALLY ON FACEBOOK ON GEET BEGINING OF A NEW ERA PAGE

Kahin do dil, jo mil jaate, bhigarta kya zamaane ka?

Agar hum saath mein bi hoi to kaise ye rukhawat? Zamana nahi maan sakta kya hamare pyaar ko... Kyu?

The Great Maan Singh Khurana ek unchi jaat ka beta aur mein... mein ek neeje jaat ki parayi ladki... jiske maa-baap ne paraya kar diya... Waja issliye ke main ek ladki hu...

Ek din mujhe meri zindagi mil gai... par koi hamare rishte ke liye manzoor nahi hai...

Maan Singh Khurana ke papa Yashwardan Singh Khurana jo mujhe dekhna nahi pasand karte, mere saaya nahi parne dete apne aas-paas... wo kaise humare rishte ke liye maane??

Maan ki Maa, Anjali Singh Khurana, hi hai jo mujhe pasand karte hai... Wohi hai jo hamare pyaar ko samajh paate hai...

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Piya Tose Naina Lage Re

Pehli nazar mein mujhe uss se pyaar hogaya ta... Ek pal mein mene usse apna bana liya ta... Par ye bewaja reethi rewaaj hume saath mein nahi hone dethe...

Chandni ki Roshni usske chehre par simat gai ti uss raat ko jab mene usse pehli nazar mein dekha... jaise wo iss duniya ki khaas ladki jo ke sirf mere liye bani hai...

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That night...

"Rani Saheba wo... main..."

"Woh Woh... Mein Mein kya laga kar rakha hai?! Seedhe seedhe ye sab saaf karo... Don't look at me with those dirty eyes!"

She cleaned up the verandha disheartened... The electricity chose the best time to go and the rain plummeted down at high speed... Making her drenched highly... Her eyes became blurry with her tears...

One was watching from behind the pillar at the innocent angel's emotional plight... he could not understand the hatred his family felt towards her... She is not bad... but infact she is beautiful!

He slowly walked towards her and placed his hand delicately on her shoulder... She turned around in fright and gazed straight into his deep intense eyes and lost herself in them...

She had never gazed up in this household but could not help but stare deep into his melting eyes...

Hum Ghabra Kar Aankhen Jhuka Lete Hain'Kaun Milaaye in Aankho se Aankhein,Suna Hai Aap Aankho se Apna Bana Lete Hain'

(credit to sam di from facebook 😃)

He had never seen anyone as beautiful as her in his entire life... Her deep almond eyes spoke intensity of sadness...

She could not help it but enter his embrace as tightly as possible... he suprisingly held himself back but her hold did not weaken...

"Please, help me!"

He was surprised at how beautiful her voice was.

Itni pyari ladki ki, itni pyari awaaz? He thought to himself blushingly...

"Bas AAP roye math" she automatically loosened the hug and had the urge to stare into his eyes again...

He wiped her tears... "Chhote Nawab Sahib, yeh aap kya kar re hai... agar kisi ne hume dekh liya to?? Humari toh kher hi nahi hai ji..."

He stood there looking at her worried face and cupped her face lovingly... "Ji AAP... she cut him off immediately "Aap mujhe aise math bulaye... hume acha nahi lagta"

"Ji hum aapko izzat kar te hai... issliye aise bulare hai"

She looked at him dearingly... he had a smirk implanted on his face which irritated her.

"Chhote Nawab Sahib, aap humara mazaak udar re ho?? Hume nahi pasand... Agar aap ko nahi pata, humara dusra naam SHAIRNI hota ta" She emphasized the Shairni to scare him... "Acha? To Miss SHAIRNI... aapke aankon mein aasu kyu?"

She dropped her mouth to the Miss SHAIRNI but felt sad as he mentioned her tears...

She lightly smacked his chest and walked off but he pulled her back making her fall against his well-toned chest...

"Mujhe maara? Aapne Chhote Nawab Sahib ko?" he asked in a serious tone.

She immediately felt guilty and placed her hand on his chest and caressed it lovingly almost absorbing his 'pain'... 😆

"Aap ne ghalti to ki hai, to saza..." He said huskily in her ear which made her shudder...

"Sazaa? Kaisi sazaa??" She inquired frightenedly...

He automatically pinned her to the nearby pillar and took her trembling lips with his dominant ones... She popped her eyes at what he was doing... She mumbled in his mouth to leave her but he went in more increasing his passionate kiss more and more... He devoured her lips into his mouth... He did not want to let go until his mother called out his name... 😳

"Chhote Nawab MAAN, aap jaldi se neeche aa jaye... humne aapse baat karni hai... hai aur aap Geetanjali ko bulana humne usse kaam karwana hai"

"Maa" "Bari Rani Saheba!" They said in unison...

"Oh! so your name is Geetanjali..." he said huskily.

She blushed a dark crimson colour and ran from there to see what his mother needed.

"To Miss SHAIRNI... I mean Miss Geetanjali..." He whispered to himself and smirked at her actions.

She involuntarily ran behind the pillar panting heavily and holding her lips... She could not believe he kissed her...

"Sach mein DUSHT DHANAV hai!" she mumbled to herself..

"DUSHT DHANAV?!" he inquired with a serious tone and she tried to run away but he clasped her wrist tightly...

"Aap ka naam Chhote Nawab Sahib nahi, Chhote Dusht Dhanav hona chaiye" she bit her tongue in what she said and ran off leaving her Ruby Studded Kangan in his palm and her melodious payal on the floor...

"Miss SHAIRNI, abhi mazaa chukaata hu" he mumbled with a devilish grin implanted on his face...

Jaane kya ho ab aage re...

 

So guys how's the epilogue of Piya Tose Naina Lage Re?? Bohot pyaari story hai honestly! This Prologue is the thoughts of Chhote Nawab Sahib Maan Singh Khurana (or should I say Chhote Dhusht Dhanav hehee) and Geetanjali (or should I say Miss SHAIRNI)... Maan ko pehli nazar mein Geet se pyaar hogaya issliye kiss kargaya Geet ko sharth ke naam par 😳 ðŸ˜†

Stay tuned for more romantic updates in Piya Tose Naina Lage Re... 😉

Edited by halemakhan - 12 years ago
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PART 1
There it was. In his palm. Her beautifully carved ruby-studded Kangan and her melodious payal which without her sounded inharmonious.

How could his family despise this phenominal creation named Geetanjali... His Miss SHAIRNI, who won his heart in the matter of seconds... And that kiss...! That kiss only englightened him of his feelings towards her... Wo to hogaye hai deewane apni Miss SHAIRNI ke... he kissed her payal and kangan which made him fall for her even more...

Why does society have a problem with Geetanjali... just because she is 'parayi?' Not necessarily lower in caste, after all she is made for the Great Chhote Nawab Sahib Maan Singh Khurana! Jo bhi Maan Singh Khurana ke liye bani hoi, wo iss duniya ke nahi mere liye bohot anmol hai... Aaj tak jo bhi rishta aaya hai humare liye, ek unchi samaaj ki ghar walo ka hota hai, par kisi ek ladki ki sanskaar humari Geetanjali jaise nahi ti... Humari Geetanjali ek bholi bhaali aur seedhi ladki hai... Shaayad issliye hum usse ek nazar mein chaahne lage... aur upar wala jaane kab hume usse pyaar hogaya... I wonder what my Miss SHAIRNI will be doing? Humare baare soch ri hoyi gi... He grinned foolishly to himself... Why would she thinking about you Maan? Do you even know she feels the same or nevertheless thinks about you?

Sirf humne usse chumma hai koi paap nahi kiya... He thought to himself... Zamana badal ra hai.. Reeti-Rewaaj bi, aur iss rewaj ko zarur badalna chhaiye!! Aur ye hum badle ge iss ghar mein! Geetanjali sirf Chhote Nawab Sahib Maan Singh Khurana ki hai!

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Geet ye kya hogaya tumare aur Chhote Nawab ke beech mein..?! Waise ye to bade sharaarati nikle hai Geet... inno ne wo sab kardiya jo humari kismath mein kabhi manzoor nahi ta... Hume usse kehne aur sochne mein sharam aa rayi hai... She blushed a deeper crimson than during her kiss (suprisingly?)

Waise yeh to achi baat to nahi hai... Chhote Nawab Sahib hume shaayad chhane lage hai..! Par yeh nahi samaj te ke samaajh kya kahi gi... Ek Parayi aur ek Nawab? Nahi Nahi aise nahi hoi ga... It must only be a mere attraction! Wo khudh hume bhool jayi ge aur phir sab kuch teek ho jaiye ga...

Par wo aanke... Wo aanke to kuch aur bol ri ti... Ek attraction se bi bara wo ta Geet... ye na hum jhutla nahi sakte nah woh... She sighs and hugs herself tightly thinking about his intoxicating eyes... Hayye mann karta hai ke hum aapne Chhote Dusht Dhanav ke aanke mein aanke daal kar unnhe dekhti rahu...

GEET! she exclaimed her own name to her herself... wo kabse humare te.! Ye hum sach mein paagal hogay hai! Geetanjali hum sach mein ek din pure ke pure paagal ho jai ge... She muttered under her breath...

Geet, you should work na? Warna wo nakchadi Rani Sahebi aa jayi gi aur humare lene ke dene par jai ge... She continued working involuntarily lost in her thoughts until Rani Saheba Meera came along holding her plaited her in her hand and swinging it back and forth...

"Oye! Maha Rani! Udhar kyu tairi hai... humare paas avo" She said in the rudest tone possible... "Yeh tere baap ka ghar hai? Jo kaam adhura chodti hai tu?! Abhi sikhaana pade ga tume... iss Mehal ki vidhi! (rules)"

She dragged her to the store room which was beside the main bedrooms in the house (Bade Nawab Sahib & Badi Rani Saheba, Chhote Nawab Sahib and Chhoti Rani Saheba)... The store room was misty and humid where it was impossible to breathe properly.

Geet was drenched in the sweat of fear... she did not know what will happen as she is in the hands of the ruthless Rani Saheba Meera... Tears clouded her innocent eyes and fell vigourously down her face... Rani Saheba clasped the whip which was on the Store room shelf and started beating her with all the force in her body... Geet screamed loudly with pain and her milky-white skin became red or even blue due to the depth of her wounds... Her clothes ripped to the sharpness of the whip and her face starting flaming with the pain inflicted on her...

"Samaj gi humari baat? Ya abhi nahi samaji? Aur sikaavu tumhe ke iss ghar ke vidhi kya hai?! Kabhi koi kaam adhura karne se pehle ye soch lo ke hum tumara kya haal kare ge!" She exlaimed with all the fury in her voice.

Her voice echoed in the store room which triggered one person's sleep to be disturbed... Chhote Nawab Sahib..

"Yeh awaaz kahan se aari hai..? It sounds like someone is screaming with pain! Par kaun ho sakta hai... aur itni raat gher?"He spoke to himself whilst getting out his bedroom and walking down the corridors of Khurana Mehal...

He heard continuous cries and screams... For the first time Maan felt uneasy with the unharmonious sounds being given off... For he himself has never seen anyone cry nor new what it felt like to cry...

He found the origin of the sound and opened to the door to his horror to see his 'lady-love' fully beaten and crying almost like repenting her foolish actions... If she had not have dreamt about Maan during her work, none of this would have happened...

Geetanjali? A wave of shock hit Maan as he saw her scattered on the floor as a corpse would have been... His eyes became enraged with inevitable fury and ran towards Geet and lifted her up so he could see her masoom face...She rejected his touch which felt like a 1000 needles piercing in Maan's heart.

"Geetanjali, hum hai... Chhote Nawab Sahib! Kuch to boliye? Hume daar lag ra hai aap ko iss halath mein dekhte huwe!" She did not reply but her eyes closed...

"Geetanjali, dekhiye hum hai! Uthiye! Ab aap ko kuch nahi hoye ga... Upar wale ki kasm!!... Geetanjali! Geetanjali!! Kuch boliye?!" He cupped her face dearingly whilst being in her embrace and kiss her face everywhere to hopefully gain a response... "To humari Miss SHAIRNI humse naraaz hai?" he patted her face slowly to just realise she became breathless and fainted in his arms.

A surge of panick ran through Maan and tears involuntarily fell through his eyes... For the first time he cried and that for someone else!

He carried her to his room and placed her on his vast bed and slowly caressed her bruises which made her whince in pain... He immediately applied ointment on her visible bruises and blew them everytime she notted her eyebrows. He blew out the candles surrounding his bed and applied the ointment on her upper body, not once looking at her as he wants to gain her trust and love not her hatred...

He placed his shirt on her covering her ripped clothes. He slowly pecked her delicate forhead and placed the blanket on her and made his way to sleep on the sofa bed to avoid further confusion in the morning...

PRECAP (1): Baarish!!!

PRECAP (2): Roop tera mastana... Pyaar mera  deewana, Bhool koi humse na ho jayi!

 

Dekhte jaow! Aage hota kya hai 😉 ðŸ˜‰

Chhote Dusht Dhanav aur Miss SHAIRNI ki kahani ka hai ye shuruwaat!
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awsm start.im loving it...
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awww thank you 😃
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Originally posted by: babymaneet

awsm start.im loving it...

 
 
Thank you very much 😃
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Thank you dear 😃
 
 
Thanks for everyone's motivating comments
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Updating...

It will be late night according to UK BST (British Summer Time)...

Edited by halemakhan - 12 years ago