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Posted: 12 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: smithasrk

Nice start. do continue😊



i will continue soon and thanks dear
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Posted: 12 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: swasthi

Welcome to the forum.

 
Your version of how the show should go makes an interesting read. Just what will Kokila and Ahem say to nani?
 
Update soon.



yeah i want to see something like my ff
hope we will see that soon
thanks a lot dear.. u liked it
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: SNS_fan101

great FF.. continue soon!!!!!!



offcourse dear i will
thank you so much...dear
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Posted: 12 years ago
#35
Lovely start. Really liked the way story going. Well done.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#36

PART-2



In the morning:

Everyone gathers for the breakfast at MM. Gopi was lost and sad. Last night was good for her because nani is creating a mess, she has to sleep in guest house. Ahem was irritated and thinking why his mom not telling truth to nani. Nani was observing gopi, ahem and jigar. The trio was uncomfortable with each other. 

Nani: gopi vahu today i want you to take lunch for jigar at office.
ahem start coughing and everyone is shocked.. gopi was about to go when nani stops her and kokila gives water to ahem.. gopi was worried.

Suddenly the door bell rings, Mani goes to open the door. the post man was there she received the letter. Mani gives to jigar. Jigar opens it and read. he was shocked to read that letter. Jigar was having tears in his eyes. Nani sees him. 

Nani: jigar Dikra what happened?
jigar was silent and goes from there. hetal and kokila is worried about him. ahem follows jigar.

scene shifts:

rashi was sitting in a bus, conductor comes there and ask for a ticket. rashi doesn't know where this bus is going on.

rashi: bhaiya can you please tell me where this bus is going?
conductor sees her and rashi sees conductor.
conductor: ben this bus is going to Ahmadabad.
rashi: okay please give me the ticket of Ahmadabad.
conductor gives her ticket and goes from there, rashi thinks and the track goes.

Saasein kho gai hai kiski aahon mein
Mein kho gai hoon jane kiski baahon mein 
{flashback: jigar sees rashi and rashi smiles, when jigar takes her out for ice cream}
Manzilon se rahe dhondte chali
Aur kho gai hai manzil kahin rahon mein 
{jigar gets angry and take her out from house, rashi was crying and the letter}
Kahin to kahin to hai nasha
Teri meri har mulakat mein 
{ jigar turns and sees the letter, he reads and  closes his eyes, tear drop from his eyes}
Hoton se hoton ko
Chumti o rehete hai hum har baat pe
Kehti hain fiza jahan
Teri zaameen aasman
Jahan hai tu
Meri hasi meri khushi 
Meri jaan...
{ jigar remember rashi is playing with snow and throws to jigar and jigar runs behind rashi tocatch her. here rashi is having tears in her eyes and the bus is going on. The two images split}

scene shifts:
kokila is coming down from stairs and suddenly she feels dizzy and falls from stairs and gopi sees this and shouts and rushes to her. kokila fells down and
she was covered with blood... gopi puts her head in her lap. gopi try to make kokila conscious. 

Meanwhile hetal and jigar comes running. they are shocked to see kokila in this question. Jigar picks up kokila and take her to hospital.
hetal: gopi Dikra call ahem and stay at home with your Nani.
gopi was in tears, she really wants to come with them, but she has to stop there. hetal goes fromthere. gopi runs to telephone. she makes call to ahem with shaking hands. she dials his number.ahem was busy while reading a file, he picks up the call.

ahem: hello 
gopi starts crying..ahem can feel ...
ahem: gopi is this you?
gopi was crying badly
ahem: what happened gopi? say something gopi..
gopi { shivering}: ahem ji maa ji
ahem: mom what gopi tell me 
gopi {tears rolls down}: ahem ji maa ji falls down from stairs and she has been hospitalized...

ahem was shocked and he sits on his chair...a tear drop from his eyes..
so friends here i end i am sorry its a short update...enjoy tc
















Edited by cool.pratha - 12 years ago
Posted: 12 years ago
#37

i love how the story is progressing...u are a really great writer...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#38
hi very nice story i really loved it u r very good writer
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Posted: 12 years ago
#39
Fab update ,pls update soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#40
love the way story is going.great job