amazing update👏feling sad for pankhudi.hope she accepts arth love i know it is difficult.but she can try after suffering betrayal i know she will take time to trust people but seeing pankhudi nature i know she wont give up.pls cont soon
I quietly listened to
everything she had to say. I couldn't believe how someone can be such a
bas***d! She was blind for God sake! How could he do something with someone
like her? I loved how you illuminate his innocence of the world through her experience. His negative experiences of human emotions seem to pale when compared to hers but more so he feels that she doesn't deserve them, that she has suffered enough. It brings out his naivety in regards this world for in truth most who have seem much of it come to know one thing, pain, hurt and suffering is not prejudiced in any way and will affect anyone and everyone. Young, old, tall, short, rich wealthy, the blessed the arrogant and yes even those who have suffered much at its hands already. The truth is the manner we deal with these negative emotions is what differentiates us, ranks us in this world NOT those aspects that I listed.
She is so innocent…like the dew drops on a rose. She was more fragile than the petals of a rose. Although she is very strong and can handle everything, yet she was lonely. Surely there must be someone made for her.
Then that affinity, the reason destiny brought him here. Already there is a vast difference between her Arth and the soon to be this Arth of hers. He wishes not just love for her, but commitment, someone who would live out her days with her. Beautifully done.
Someone who would accept her the way she is….someone who would love her unconditionally…someone who would hold her in his arms and love her to eternity.
This was just endearing. The more he falls for her, the more we fall for him. Finely done.
As soon as I visualized someone holding her in his arms, my blood boiled. The image was revolting. I felt panic…possession…pain. And then I realized something.
😆😆😆Then that twist, just very imaginatively done. I did not see it coming, so it was like a surprise. The good kind. Excellently composed.
I was falling for her, if I hadn't already.
I was lost in my thoughts….trying to figure out how and when this had happened. And then, her voice broke my trance.
To quote Darcy, "i was in the middle before I knew I had begun." To quote myself, "the seed was planted long before he knew, and grew, and grew and grew!
"Itna sab kuch sunne ke baad bhi aap yahin hain? Aapko kuch nahi kehna hai?"
She still doubted me? I felt hurt. How could she doubt me after all this? And then, I just realized how much she mattered to me…how much her opinion of me mattered to me.
Brick by brick a house becomes a home, just like word by word a heart is pulled into another's soul, just like moment by moment we begin to feel less alone.
I loved your composition, the manner you slowly unfold a tale so that nothing seems rushed or preposterous but natural like the fall of summer rain, unexpected but not unwanted nor unusual either. Just finely done.
"Kehna hai na."
She winced. It was as if she was prepared to take the blow yet she was nervous.
Even though it must have pinched him, there was happiness in there somewhere too, she cared for his reaction. Nicely done.
"Toh kahiye na. Kya kehna chahte hain aap? And ghabraiye mat…agar aap abhi humein chod kar bhi chale jaayein, toh bhi hum aapko dosh nahi denge. Galti humari hi thi…aur vaise bhi hum aapko sahara dene aaye the…toh hum aap se sahare ki ummeed kabhi bhi nahi karenge."
Was she serious? I think we, both him and us knew her well enough to know that she was serious and not so too. Umeed toh hai lekin khwaish jaise, as caging as a breeze could ever be. She laid out her soul wherein we would find her desires, her wishes, but she never begs him, never asks him but leaves open her heart just like that door to her house, so that if he wishes he can make her his home.
I braced myself for the impact I was going to make on her. I had to say this out. I couldn't hold it any longer. It was now or never.
"Pankhudi…marry me?"
She looked damn shocked. Her eyes dilated and then she turned to stone. She had shut off all her emotions. I could see that in those eyes. And then she said something which broke my heart.
"Nahi." OK, so that was unexpected. 😕 However I always trust writers, especially one as gifted as yourself and so insightful too. This is your piece and so far you have never disappointed, I know that there is something more you wish to say, and that you will tell it well. Looking forward to it. With much love, Sabah
Originally posted by: ...Mahak...
Thanks :)
I am glad that the part was met with your expectations :)
I replied to you above itself :)
- Mahak
Originally posted by: PrithviSanyo1
awesome,brilliant update
loved it
Originally posted by: mjhtnupurmayank
I was gonna scold u for such a small update wen I read the line "I am writing my FF 'Arrange Marriage' for Pooja. So, I didn't get time to write more. This was the last thing written on it." N isliye I cooled down somewat..!! Lol... :P
Well, Nice update... Really Short but good...! I'm infact thinking about wats gonna happen further...!So, Do continue soon...Wil b waiting...Pooja
Originally posted by: crazymayurian
really interesting
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