Funny Poem on LNMDJ - PriDa story(update on Pg 3)

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Posted: 14 years ago
Hi everyone

After watching the Ya Rabba song and the whole episode I was so worked up that I had to find some outlet. I never considered myself as someone who could write poetry and by the time I was done I had filled 3 pages.  So I decided to break it up into parts. The first part is the introduction and the story so far. If this is not panned by the critics, I have separate section coming up on each of the three couples - PriDa, Savni and Varni and finally the conclusion

I will present this in parts
To save myself the brickbats

I plead for your patience while you read this long poem.

The PriDa story: updated on page 3



Here is the first part


Introduction

This is a tale of 3 brothers

This is a tale of 3 sisters

Bound by destiny to be together

In a love that would last forever

Against all odds they will unite

First for each other they must fight.



Part - I : The beginning of LNMDJ

 

In the land of LNMDJ, once upon a time

There lived a grand dame named Ila

She had 3 precious angel girls

Damini, Avni and Roshni was their name. 😳

 

In the land of LNMDJ, once upon a time

There lived a couple named Balraj and Suman

They had 3 precious angel boys

Prithvi, Sameer and Varun was their name.😳

 

The sisters were happy

The brothers were merry

If everything had remained so hunky-dory

We would never have had this story.

 

Then came a tragic twist in the tale 😲

The boys' father died after being sent to jail

The boys believed their father had been framed

By the girls' mother with her intent to defame

The boys' mother could not this shock take

The tragedy did a veggie out of her make πŸ˜‰

They vowed revenge by any means foul or fair

To avenge their father's loss and their mother's despair.

 

Taking the word of a corrupt policeman to heart

In the boys' minds did the thirst of revenge start

The 3 happy angel boys were transformed

And the band of maqsadeers was thus formed

A plan they hatched to make Dame Ila pay

Who they were they would not say

They would as her guest and employees stay

To take everything from her, much to her dismay.

 

They would use her daughters as pawns

Get to her using her beautiful swans

Prithvi set some standards though

No harm must come to the girls

And they must be treated just so

Limits must be maintained at all times

Unfortunately to Sameer these were just lines.

 

Varun was a lot smarter πŸ˜ƒ

Or maybe he just liked Roshni a little better πŸ˜‰

He would help his brothers with their mission

But to hurt Roshni was not an option.πŸ‘

 

Alas little were they to know

The curveball that fate would throw πŸ˜‰

To make them fall in love so deep

It would make them lose their sleep πŸ˜†

A love they would have to avow.

To it they would have to bow. πŸ˜‰


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Infinitedreams thumbnail
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Posted: 14 years ago
Lovely Jhanvi, begining to end the story so far, you portrayed each word in ur poemπŸ‘. Thanks for sharing. Looking forward to the next week, the truth will out, but it seems the way we thought it wouldnt be like that. There is something interesting to gonna happened, but i am sure, girls will not gonna reveal this truth to Ela at all.
 
 
 
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Posted: 14 years ago
@ Muniza

Thank you for your kind words.
You think the girls find out. Wow. 😲. I have to change my poem yaar.
Edited by liv2laugh - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Hey Jhanavi,

loved your poem....πŸ‘

-- Mru
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Posted: 14 years ago
Wow nice one jhanvi!


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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: liv2laugh

@ Muniza

Thank you for your kind words.
You think the girls find out. Wow. 😲. I have to change my poem yaar.

 
No no dont change, i am just predicting, so let see what will happen?
 
 
Muniza
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Posted: 14 years ago

jhan!!!....lovely poem....man how did u get the freaking rhyme-scheme!

is this the entire poem u were talking abt.....(3 pages one!)?
 
nice job yaar....even i tried my hand at poems...but i suck at it!
 
Edited by rachel.fds - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Jhaaaannnnnnn!!!πŸ€—πŸ€—πŸ€— this was the sweetest ...most wonderful thing ever!!!!

aawwwwwww i loved how you used only simple words and made it so so so very powerful.....powerful of all those emotions, those memories...those feelings that we have attached to each and every character of this show....from beginning to now......from the best of past...to the dire present.......but your words have an aroma of hope....hope that life will be better again.....happy times are ahead.....it's just that we have to get through the worst times for now....but hey we've got each other, right?




Loved it!!!!πŸ‘
Edited by krupur1103 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
nice one jhanvi.very simple words and lovely.
@Unfortunately to Sameer these were just lines.
πŸ˜†πŸ˜† very true
πŸ˜†
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Posted: 14 years ago
jannnn!...this was soo nice...i liked the way youve written it....and you've never written anything b4?..brilliantπŸ‘...your puttting it up in parts?...no problemo i'm waiting to read the others too!