A Mistake Worthmaking Pg38 - Page 2

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haajoo thumbnail
Posted: 14 years ago
#11
really nice
i lyk how u dint make heer all traditional nd stuff, it luks gd
do continue soon

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 SWEET GURL THANKS FOR LIKING THIS CHANGE MODERN HEER AND ONE MORE THING YOU ARE GONNA SEE THAT WHICH YOU HAVE NOT SEEN IN KIS DESH ABOUT PREM AND HEER I HOPE YOU LIKE MY UPCUMING UPDATES I WONT TEASE YOU I WILL TRY TO UPDATE ATER ONE WEEK BUT THIS TIME  I WILL TRY TO UPDATE ON WEEKEND
 

absloutely wonderfull i really like prem and heer s character and especially heer becaue she is not shy and traditional which sounds great.

and i cant wait for the next update please do continue soon thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!
i forgot sonia7 thakyou sweety you loved it thaks i means thanks to all of you who loved it. i have wrote the names those who told me to PM when i update. i will definitely pm POOJI,SWEETAS,PREMPADMASUJAL,HAPPY-PRETTY etc
 
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Posted: 14 years ago
#12
very nice...............do continue
haajoo thumbnail
Posted: 14 years ago
#13
I WILL UPDATE SOON PLEASE READ N TELL ME HOWS IT DID U LIKE THE WAY I WRITE
XSilentPrayersX thumbnail
Posted: 14 years ago
#14
Hy Rab.........

That was tooooooooooooo Good
Loved it..................
eternity thumbnail
Posted: 14 years ago
#15
HEY UPDATE SOON LOVED YOUR FF WOH WHAT A CO INCIDENCE WE HAVE THE WHOLE SAME NAME HUH CHECKED YOUR PROFILE PM ME PLEASE WHEN U UPDATE
eternity thumbnail
Posted: 14 years ago
#16
LOVED YOUR FF PLEASE UPDATE SOON THIS PREM N HEER N PREET N MEHER ARE ALL HILLARIOUS LOVED IT
haajoo thumbnail
Posted: 14 years ago
#17
Hey guys back with the update

                                          

So we ended at


when Heer runs away n after Prem stops scolding MEET he leads into Heer's room.
As soon as he entered Heer's room Heer fixed her eyes on him.

Heer; Dir go and change what r u looking at go


Prem:Okeh m going


Heer:Take the towel wid u



Prem;are u going sumwhere



Heer:Noh m not. I am in the room

Prem;So when i ll need I will take it


Heer:;But..........
 
Prem: You work for me miss so i m the boss

On the otherside Meher n Preet share a hi5


Meher tum ne dekha tha un dono lka chehra they both looked ashamed.

N they'll be more if we show them the video nahin hum ye video unhein MMS kartey hain


Oh ho meray sath reh kar akal aa gayi hai


Preet



Laddoo I mean Mauta badaa Laddoo



Preet tum pit jao gay



Kaam mein karta hun per pit tum jaati ho.


When did this happen kay kaam tum ne kiya aur pit mein gayyi



Acha choro na.


Let's eat sumthing

Laddoo her wakt khao gi na to. Choro jaatey hein


Prem:SHouted from washroom:Heer give me the towel please



She opened the door n made him take the towel but he seemed with sumthing more. He clasped her up. She closed her eyes n tried to move back with her each step backwards Prem took a step forwards. she could feel his warm breathe 
Sir please let me go.
Please



Looks like someone doesn't wanna see my face.(He moved his hand over her eyes ) Open your eyes.
open up.


She opened her eyes but turned back.


Meri shakal itni buri nahin hai.
Now if u don't turn around then youll be responsible. She turned around n then looked up


One second where did u get the clothes you had left them out.


When you were staring at sumthing called CHAND called MOON called'''''..



Okeh got it.



They went out Heer meri shirt kay buttons okeh Can't you do yourself. Prem moved his arms onto her back n gripped her. He moved his face to her forehead n kissed her n then moved his lips from there to her neck. But then she refused very sweetly. She moved his lips away with her finger Prem caught her finger in between his lips.

Prem I have to tie your last button so

As soon as Prem let her finger go free she remembered that in morning when Tannu came out of Prem's room she was eating a chocolate with a lot of other chocolates in her hands n when she asked her who gave it she told him Prem's name. So when she was tieng his shirt buttons she asked him Tum subah kar kya rahay thay jo tum nay Tannu ko itnay saarey chocolates diye.

Nothing I was eating chocolates so i gave a few to her.


UH....AAAH you were doing something that you dint want me or anyone else to see. What were you doing?



Nothing special ( He moved so that his front faced Heer's Back n then he lightly pull her hair at a side n remained kissing her shoulder till she spoke )


Ek second Jab aap neechay aaye to u said you were searching some files


Haw Prem tum sir you were with that girl late in morning are you sick 


Arrey Heer
I was not



So how do u know k mein kis baarey mein baat kar rahi hun


. Heer woh


You lied to me

No


Yes


you did
Edited by hajoo00 - 13 years ago
eternity thumbnail
Posted: 14 years ago
#18
Oh god just loved this one this HEER ARGUES VERY WELL N AGAIN IT WAS SUPERB LOVED IT UPDATE SOON 
Book_Kash thumbnail
Posted: 14 years ago
#19
awww update soon hot romance
do pm me whn updt
haajoo thumbnail
Posted: 14 years ago
#20
IS THIS MUCH LONG UPDATE ENOUGH FOR YOU GUYS