BIN TERE- RaHi OS[Updated pg 1...12]Updated chapter 19 Pg 12 - Page 2

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Posted: 11 years ago
#11
Awww..
It was so sweet!
Loved it
Keep writing!
Update soon!
Lots of love
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Posted: 11 years ago
#12

Aishwarya dear

This was the best phase of TBP

And you descried it so beautifully

The Vista Competition

Avi-Panchi relationship, Panchi's heart break, her Delhi visit and RV's realization of His moti's worth in his life

Everything is so close to my heart

And you just brought all the memories back

You describe every moment so magically

Bin tere-our RaHi song

Now I am desperately waiting for next part

So plz continue soon

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Posted: 11 years ago
#13
Aishwarya...this is getting better n better...love the way u've got the momentum going dear... not a weak moment in the os
Miss vista...that could have affected rahi in a big way but rather ended on a whimper all thanks to the cvs...u seemed to have dealt with rv's emotions during this new friends phase rather well...where on the one hand he detests them yet is happy in moti's happiness...
Then ruku being an all unimportant part of his life which seems space crunched due to moti is wow...loved it...that's what it really was...
Hating avi n being wary of him to be not good enough for his delicate aoap bubble is awe... n then the best part is when he misses moti...he is miserable yet cant voice his thoughts...my rv... loved that little exchange of looks between him n kd...m sure kd knew of his position

Loving the way u are bringing rv's feelings out...Brilliant...u just might have dedicated one line to different situations but that is seemingly enough... n that's a great thing.

The sombre mood continues... n rv's longing for moti now seems etched on the wall...

It is sacchi a very good read dear...thanks a ton...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Aww Tysm for rewriting RaHi memories..the Delhi track<3 we got so many beautiful moments! Bechara Nonu, i just loved him there & also Piddi&KD who played a very imp role..i actually got imotional while reading this chap.. badly missing them:( Thanks again for writing it so beautifully..write more:)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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you are amazing Aish!
loved the way you described it,the miss vista one they both got distant she was with Avi and He was with Ruku,and the way u described the part when she left ahhh
it was perfect!
Ranveer was alone he needed her he wanted to be with her!
it was fab Aish
loved it!👏👏👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Part 4
People this a very long one but I think you might like it. Because this is what I was hoping to see but never mind.


She came back. She was different. No smile on her cheeks. Her eyes were dramatic. She looked frail.

RV was happy to see her. He hugged her, feeling no warmth that he always felt. She was not the same. He knew he had to get her back. He was not going to lose her for some Avi, that sad excuse of being a human . Her sadness made him determined to spend some more timed with her.

He followed her wherever she went. He knew people were talking about him but he never responded to anything. Back in class RV tried his level best to get her into a conversation but she just kept quite. Occasionally making a sound like huh', and "na", RV wanted to hold her face so that she'd look up at him.

The lecturer was lecturing them about Titanic.

"phew" , he thought. Now that's what Panchi likes. Maybe she'd enjoy this. But to his horror, she never looked up on the screen.

Not even once.

He dragged her to the base camp. She kept protesting but he paid no heed to her words.

He helped her to a big rock. The same rock which had a very small cavity. A cavity that resembled a small grotto. RV and Panchi would spend hours together here as kids. Sharing their problems. Crying on each other's shoulders. It was usually RV who'd be upset, missing his family on occasions like his Birthday, his parents anniversary. Panchi was just to keep quiet and give him all the space he needed to talk.

RV would be relieved after that. As if someone shifted a big boulder from his chest that was obstructing his breathing.

It was Panchi's turn now to get over with her grief.

She kept her eyes away from RV. Apparently admiring the waves that crashed on the rocks. But RV noticed that she was glassy eyed. Her eyes were staring at the same spot.

"Moti", I said for something to have to do "Main na meditation class join kar leta agar mujhe itna chu chap baithna hota toh! ", he said irritated by the silence.

"Toh main kya gaane gaon tumhare entertainment ke liye" said Panchi angrily holding an invisible mic in front of her.

"Moti !" RV said fixing her with her eyes. "Out with it!" I smiled purposely dimpling his cheeks. He knew this would shake her resolution of not letting the world know about her grieves.

She surveyed him with her eyes... He wished he could act the vampire of her favorite series Daylight no Twilight... Yes... Edward. The freak who could read minds. He wished he could read her mind.

She looked away from him and sighed.

"You know what?" she said slowly., as if each word caused her a great deal of pain, " I really was in a beautiful relationship".

"WHAT???", RV wanted to yell but thought better of it. "But he lied to you!", RV said dreading what would come next.

"I know! ", she said playing with her fingers. "Maybe I wasn't good enough for him", she finished dramatically.

RV laughed, "You were not good enough for him? You? Are you kidding me?" he said turning fully towards her so that he could get a good view of her face.

"I'd smooch Banga if it was not the other way round", RV said hoping for some sign of humor on her face.

"You know Kiya was right", She said ignoring RV's snide remarks "I don't deserve to fall in love with anyone. Or maybe I don't want to fall in love with anyone anymore. ", she said closing her eyes.

RV kept looking at her. He stomach had tight knots. He never knew what to think.

"Panchi, you know what, I don't think that's quite true you know!", he said now taking her shoulders in a firm grip. "Just because someone hurts you once, doesn't mean all people are born Satan." he said hoping that she'd open her eyes. Her eyelashes were wet. Yet no tear spilled from those eyes.

Her breathing was uneven.

"I am sure someone's made for..." but Rv couldn't finish

"Shut up!", Panchi said with gritted teeth

"What?", said a shocked RV

"Shut up! Shut up! Shut up!", She screamed this time.She open her eyes. Her eyes were blood shot. No wonder she had kept them closed. She look furious.

"I am done with this crappy speech of yours", She said groping for stones around her and throwing them wildly in any direction. RV just kept quite. His vocal cord was jammed. He had never seen Panchi so restless.

She was positively bawling now

"You'll always get someone ", she said now trying her best to grind a stone. "Someone really charming is waiting for you ", she spat with tears just rolling on her cheeks.

"You know what? I am a bitch!". She screamed

RV gasped

"I am not good enough for anyone. Not you , not Avi, not anyone!", She cried . She wiped her tears to welcome a fresh downpour of new ones.

"I don't deserve anyone. I hurt people just like that", She said clicking her fingers

"I hurt you , I hurt..."

"Whoa whoa whoa! When did you hurt me?" , RV was positive she had never done that.

She blinked to clear the tears obscuring her vision

" I disappointed you", she said calming down a little. Her voice was hoarse after the shouting match with the wind.

"Huh?", RV said trying to make some sense out of her words.

"Never mind! Nonu.", she got up ready to leave when RV took her arm and forced her to sit back. She looked at him hoping that she'd not have brought the topic to light.

"I was never a good friend ", she said rubbing her tears on the back of her sleeve. "I made life miserable for you. Making you ditch each and every girlfriend you made. I never cared about your feelings...

I knew you liked Ayesha. But it was all my fault that you are not with her anymore.", She looked at RV who was staring at her incredulously.

"I know now what it feels like to undergo these stupid breakups", she said, her voice cracking.

"I am sorry Nonu. I really am!" She concluded now looking at him.

RV had never seen anything so pitiful.

He pulled her into a hug. "You know what? I owe you my life for all the break ups I had because of you", RV said his chin resting on Panchi's head.

"I would have been doomed with Ayesha you know. I think, now that you have raised the topic... Ayesha was an old hag with a beard. I was definitely not going to carry on with that relationship. How could you tell whose the man in the couple. Fat chance you'd have picked me!".

Panchi laughed.

"You know! Now that's more like it". RV said pulling her cheeks

"Avi did not deserve you! Get that straight", RV said firmly and from the heart. He always wanted to tell her this but he could not muster the strength.

Panchi pecked him on the cheek. The spot burned. RV hoped that his ears were not flaming red.

"Thanks!", she said massaging her left palm as it had red spots due to her aggressive exercise. RV pitied the stone.

"For what?", RV asked buying more tme.

"For being there with me when I needed you the most", She said taking his hand in hers.

RV smiled. He had longed to see this side of her.

"What are friends for?", he said hugging her. This time he knew she was back. The warmth spreading in him was eccentric. Was he imagining things or not he did not know. But his heart was racing. Her hug seemed like a cocoon ,an embrace that always made him fell protected, loved and nurtured.

Something hot trickled down his face.

This feeling was weird.

Very weird!!

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Loved it Aishwarya... the best chapter so far... BRILLIANT in one word... Wanted to see this on the show but anyway
M just not sure whether u read comments at all or not so not going to a detailed analysis... but m LOVING it totally... thanks for this briiliant take on Rahi..
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: sneha02

Loved it Aishwarya... the best chapter so far... BRILLIANT in one word... Wanted to see this on the show but anyway

M just not sure whether u read comments at all or not so not going to a detailed analysis... but m LOVING it totally... thanks for this briiliant take on Rahi..


Of course! I do read each and every comment.😊
It motivates me to write even better.😊
Thank you so much for appreciating my work. 😳

Regards
Aishwarya
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Posted: 11 years ago
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part 5

This part we know.. but the best part of the os so far is cmng up in part 6!


"I am fine Nonu", She lied as his car skidded to a halt in front of her gate. " Sure you are Moti", he said giving her a wink. He was positive that he saw color rush to her cheeks.

"You know what? You should be with Rukmini", she said firmly.

"Who?" he asked absent mindedly.

"Your girl friend", Panchi said in an alarm.

"Oh!" he said as it suddenly dawned upon him that he had a girlfriend. "Sure I'll be with her. Main toh hamesha uske saath hi hota hoon. But you have to make up for the 10 days you weren't there. Pata hai maine kitna miss kiya tujhe? Radha ke saath toh mein baad mein chala jaaonga".

"Who's Radha?" Panchi asked

"Meri girlfriend aur kaun" he said struggling to get free of the seat belt.

"You mean Rukmini?" Panchi said looking astound.

He looked up at her as if she was talking about a Martian.

She broke into laughter. Her voice ringing in his ears as if it was melody. He wanted to stay there forever listening to her bubble like laughter.

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He walked quickly to his one of the favorite pictures. Piddi's camp. He had chosen this frame after hours of searching in the mall. It had to be perfect. That's because the picture that it held so gloriously marked the beginning of a story, a beautiful story for which he was thankful to god and to the "writer of this story" , PIDDHI.

Panchi and RV were lost into the woods because Piddi had seen a ghost. They left the camp with Piddi and Rukmini. Rukmini had come only to keep a watch on Panchi. But Panchi, Panchi had come to rescue a buddy, something that always endeared Panchi to RV. RV kept close to Panchi and he thanked himself for that.

Piddi created a diversion. That led him and Rukmini together. RV knew he'd have fancied a ghosts company than Ruku Baby's but nevertheless he wanted to be alive and he knew she could bully the ghost.

RV and Panchi were stranded in the jungle all alone. All alone ;-). They walked like forever into the jungle. RV barely noticed how much time they'd spend together. He was not complaining. He was with someone he wanted o be. He wished this time would never get over.

They were led to an astrologers hut after hours of walking. Panchi and RV were on the threshold when the witch cackled a high cold laugh. RV had goose bumps on him and was holding on to Panchi so that his knees wouldn't give away.

"Can we stay here for a night?", Panchi asked a little firmly. "We'd leave at the crack of dawn we promise". The astrologer nodded.

Panchi looked up at RV. RV apparently at the loss of words stared back a Panchi.

He realized why.

"Can you please provide us with some food too please." RV said "Edible food please or else Panchi will eat me up", RV said and repented as soon as he said them. Panchi stomped hard on his foot. RV eyes were watering.

"Yeh tumhe kaise kha sakti hai? Tumhe toh iska saath nibhana ha!" the astrologer said, her eyes penetrating alternately into both the remaining pair of eyes.

RV felt a wave of shock run from his veins numbing his mind!

What??He thought to himself.

Panchi and him together. No Never. Of course she was an eternal part of his life ... but "him and Panchi together" not going to happen!

But then who ?

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Posted: 11 years ago
#20

Part 6

This was the best part of the camp for me. I twisted it a little. Hope you enjoy it!!

RV thought the astrologer resembled an oversized owl, but she offered them food which made her less hideous. She even brought them a drink. It tasted like burnt wood. RV spat the drink. But Panchi emptied the drink in 3 big swigs. RV swore loudly in his mind.

This girl was really hungry.

The astrologer left for some last minute work to be done. RV watched her go. He then looked at Panchi.

Her head was lolling on one shoulder. She was swaying on the spot.

"Moti you ok??"

She looked up. Her eyes were unfocussed. Her lips curled into a pout.

RV realized with a shudder. Panchi was drunk.

She babbled about her and him together in a relationship. She laughed about it. "Tu aur mein gf aur bf", she babbled blowing a big raspberry. "Aunty kin a satak gayi hai!!" She said laughing even louder.

RV felt a sharp pang of pain. It bothered him to know that it didn't matter to her anymore.

"Nah" RV thought to himself, She's just...drunk" he thought consoling himself. "But people spit the truth when they are drunk?" he contradicted himself.

"Nonu mujhse pyaar nahi karta", Panchi said staggering and holding up her fists to show a sign of protest to what the astrologer said. "Nonu loves Ruku Baby".

RV tried to silence her but ...

Reality dawned on him. Not even for once he thought about Rukmini. Why should he?. Was it that important. He was more worried about getting him and his best friend alive from the forest.

Panchi's babble died. She was snoring delicately. RV looked at her. The pain was mounting in his chest. "Why does she think I do not love her?? " He wondered. "Not that love but just love her like a buddy".

His own words weren't helping him pull his anxiety down.

He pulled a thin rug over her. She mumbled in her sleep something that sounded like "Not god enuf for him.."

He looked at her one more time just to make sure she was asleep. He walked to his straw bed that was made for him on the floor. He laid his back on the hard pillow. He wanted to wipe his thoughts, thoughts that shouted and echoed in his mind. He closed his eyes shut when a voice called him.

"Nonu", Moti screamed loudly. She woke up. Pushed her rug away and staggered towards him. She just slept beside him saying " Don't leave me Nonu!", She cried and then ... he could hear her buzzing snore again!

He put an arm around her to support her head. She groaned once and fell back into her dreamland

He looked at her and smiled. She was innocent, her face devoid of all the bad things of the earth. She was the best thing that happened to him. She was the best and RV would make sure that she'd get the best in her life.

A better life to be frank. He'd get the best life partner for her.

This thought couldn't float in his mind for long and the chest in his pain made him cough. A vivid image shot before his eyes.

Panchi, the bride, wearing red attire holding a big garland was walking shyly towards the aisle. RV was watching her through the center of the hall, the mantras and chants reverberating loudly in RV's head. She was happy, her smile reached her eyes. She was walking with her teary eyed mother and a gang of giggling girls. She was getting married...

RV closed his eyes tight shut. He opened them and blinked feverishly to remove the last traces of that vision.

No! He breathed faster. No, this can't happen. I mean who on earth she was going to marry? All he could imagine was a faceless prat whom he wanted to throttle. But then why was she so happy?

He knew that at one point in his life that Panchi liked him. But why was that important now? She moved on and evidently had a boyfriend. Never mind she broke up with him.

But being in a relationship was far more different than taking the vows of marriage. That meant she'd commit to someone for life. She'd only think about him. Her husband! Her life would revolve only around him.

But then, What about RV? Would she just forget him? Just like that!

NO

The pain in RV's chest was unbearable.

This will happen someday, and it's not just with her but even RV would have to move on with someone else.

RV thought he had a brain freeze. Another vivid image shot before his eyes

RV the groom, was standing in the middle of the stage waiting for his bride. His heart beating faster.

He heard the crowd ooh!" at the sight of the bride. Her face was foggy, probably because of the light that was thrown on RV's face by the videographer. He wanted to kick the videographer for that!

RV tried to focus his eyes on the bride, her flowing red attire sweeping the soft grass. Her anklets making a soft jingling with every tentative step she took. "Shubh Mangala Saavdhaan", The priests chanted, their nasal voices echoed off the trees.

RV's was taking sharp breaths.

Who was she?

She was close to the stage... if only he could see her face. He craned his neck feeling stupid about his actions. Her face was becoming clearer,

More clear...

and

She finally came into the light...

PANCHI.

RV smiled. His stomach did a somersault. His heart was ready to leap from his chest.

Idiot. He said still unable to hold his feelings "In the last vision the person she was supposed to marry and the person I wanted to kill so desperately was... ME!!" he thought, the feeling of a dandelion flowing in the wind came into his mind. The pain had eased. He was flying just like the dandelion.

He smiled feeling warm in the cheeks. He filled Panchi's bridal look in his eyes and shut them. He wished he had not done that.

He was back from his revere in the astrologer's hut. He was still smiling.

He liked it.

He liked it very much.

Edited by aishwarya2905 - 11 years ago

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