|ReWrite|[RaHi]{ff.chap6/pg12} - Page 10

Originally posted by: NaughtyRa

Loads of kisses stuff here lovely ;)
Go darling you are rocking
Tha last para you explained rvs pain flawless

Originally posted by: --Akshu--

Wow u really should have written RaHi story really Ab likh rahi hun na 😆

I am so glad you are writing this firstly cuz when they are gone this makes me feel they are still there and also reading another version of the story its great Well, I am glad it serves dual purpose! (linguistic mere sar pe savaar 😳

Eyes I loved the first para it was beautifully described thankies!

I frankly forgot s2 RaHi story as the parts come up I go like shit this was there lol
But I loved it people talking and she over-hearing them trying her level best to stop those tears Lol, even I don't remember all the choronological events 😆 kuch kuch yaad aate hain tou I keep putting them in. But since I will divert from the canonical story soon so it probably doesn't matter much :P

He staring at her and realizing he should have been there it atleast called and check upon her but he himself was caught up,he has done this and he regrets later I should have done this *sigh* he is making so many mistakes..he is often taken for granted. But here, no one is a through and through hero..everyone has flaws and soon enough, their flaws will be out in the open..

I loved the part where their eyes meet and it's just the eye-lock between them I love such moments Even their silent eyes speak volumes :*
And the convo I could feel it Panchi saying all of that and he is just listening He does that a lot..the listening. Kabhi bol pada tou..

The best part for me was when she said tum kaise bann Gaye ho,treating me like main koi manipulative insaan hoon ahhh I loved this And more than anything the thing that it wasn't said by her with hurt in her eyes etc it was a fact she knows where to say in what way and she walked off
Perfect I actually remember having this scene in my head when this scene was aired in the show..of course, didn't remember all the details but the gist of it was what I wrote in the chapter. Seems like it was destiny that I had to start this FF..

And the last part nothing else could hurt him ATM then the things what she just said
This is perfect Maisy m proud of you :p Aaahh!! Thank you!! :*

What else to say this is fab thank u is not enough

Let's see how rahi's first kiss will be <3 Achi hi hogi..I hope. Defo not a "mistake"

Can't wait for the next one
Muah :*

Originally posted by: Let-It-Go

This is a Beauty ! I have no words to actually describe how apt everything looks and how easily u have edited ur vision in the actual scenes. U are a class writer !

Originally posted by: Mystique.Kishi

Mais, since for me this is the actual story of Rahi in season 2, I am going to ignore the fact that some people out there showed something else. I am going to comment like a viewer and a reader. *gulp* that is truly saying a lot...tryna pressurize me kya, Ahmed??
You know what makes a good writer??? The ability to paint a whole life size canvas with a scenario and in such vivid detail, that the reader can almost imagine it happening in front of her eyes. What makes a maestro is when they do it using such few words. You are the latter.
aawiiee...tareef. Won't turn all humble but I can't help the modesty when it comes to my tareef..*blushes*
Firstly Panchi and her muddy water fiasco. You know when I was in standard six, I went up to the stage for a singing competition with a friend of mine. And while we were singing the mike started making that annoying high pitched noise that gets on one's nerves. And each time we tried to sing , it would make the noise again. The auditorium burst out in giggles and finally a teacher asked us to stop and take our seats. I very well remember the feeling after that day. For a week, I hated to roam the corridors of my school. But till date, I never could put it in words this brilliantly.
This has happened to me as well..not in school but in a wedding function. I was very young. Me and my friend went up the stage for an impromptu dance, and it was all coming out so good in the first few seconds. Then the audio screwed up and we just stood there, blankly till one cousin of mine shooed us away and played another song for someone else to perform. It was mortifying. Being someone who never fit in, overweight and always conscious of how others looked at me..it had taken some courage to go up the stage for something like dancing. Can't quite ever forget it..

Eyes full of pity and amusement, sympathy and disdain, silent acknowledgement and complete strangeness; there was so much she could read in all the eyes.

How people, even friends have more often than not completely disregarded her presence. How she was always the one who never made a difference in the crowd . You captured it so beautifully in the first few lines.
It's one aspect about her which hits me closest to home.
Try as I might, I cannot bring myself to sympathize with your man. Atleast here. Ranveer still can't see. He is still making up excuses for himself . He knows deep down that he is wrong but refuses to admit it to himself. And the day he will start acknowledging his faults will be the day I will go easy on him. I will love him when he finally learns to put Panchi before himself and stop taking her from granted. The drifting apart is done. There is no mending it now.
Right now, at this point, he can't really be sympathized with. He is making mistakes upon mistakes, whether he wants to or not. And it's alright. It's base human nature. But one thing is certain, someday it will all come bursting out. That's what Ranveer is. He stands tall and bears it all. He does react in that moment but 90% of the stuff, he takes it in and locks it away. But at some point, it bursts out. And in that moment he is at his most brutal honest self. This guy doesn't get enough credit for this layers. I hope I can do justice to them. I hope to make him a guy who one can't help but love despite all his flaws, the way I have always loved him.

And I absolutely loved Panchi and her silent reproach to Ranveer here. I loved it in the show and I loved it here as well. One does not fume in anger when he or she is tired. She is tired now. Tired of him being an ass and then passing it off as nothing. Tired of coming last and finally, tired of him expecting her to take him back despite it all. And her response was so apt. It spoke volumes.I love the smile. I would love to imagine it as a wry smile , a smile that says "Why are you here now, Ranveer?' And call me a sadist but I loved the fact that he was hurt. He should be. It is about time he tastes his own medicine. It is about time it settles in that thick skull of his, that it is not her who is dependent on him , who needs him. It is him who needs her.Make him grovel,Mais. Please make him grovel.I know you love him but pleeesss, just a bit.
Yes, she is a bit tired. The girl needs a little pick-me-up and she sure isn't getting that from Ranveer. Lol, we are all a little sadist when it comes Ranveer..we just love to see him get a little taste of his own medicine and rightfully so..bande ne screw up hi itna kiya hai! But I will say this again, this is one piece of fiction where everyone will screw up. Massively. Big time. As for dependency, they both need each other. It's mutual. It's more evident from his side and has been kind of painted in a negative light from her side but the need really is 50-50. Wo baat mein reveal hoga.
As for groveling..we'll see when we get there 😆