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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hello guys. This is my first ever OS. Its on my fav couple RAHI. This might come as a bit shock for Geet and Neha as i had said that i wont write. But since the idea was stuck in my mind so i decided to pen it down.

All the buddies are sitting in canteen and thinking about JJs words. After sometime KD goes away saying he has some work related to his debate competition. Piddi and Sheeba also move away...
KIYA: Panchi chalo. aj ghar sath chalte hain.
Panchi gets up. She wants to say something but before that Ranveer holds her hand and stops her from moving.
RANVEER: Kiya, Panchi ko ghar main chod dunga. waise bhi KD tumhara intezaar kar raha hoga.
KIYA: Ahem Ahem. Koi nahi. Main samajh gayi. Kyun Panchi tum mujhe love bird bula rahi thi aur tum kya ho Pyaar ki Panchi.(Panchi just blushes). Anyways main tum dono ko aur disturb nahi karungi. Bye..
Panchi; Bye Kiya.
Ranveer: Thanx Kiya. Bye...
Panchi sits down.
Ranveer: bol moti kya khayegi?
Panchi: kuch nahi. Chalo kahi aur chalte hain. Yaha kitne sare log hain.
Ranveer leans forward
RV: (with a playful smirk): Tera irada kya hain?
Panchi: Tum nahi sudhroge na?
RV: Nope. Chal chalte hain.
They come out of the college. Panchi extends her hand in front of RV.
Panchi: Car keys..
RV: What? tu drive karegi?
Panchi: Now come on fast give me the keys.
Panchi drives the car. Inside the car...
RV: Hum kaha ja rahe hain.
Panchi: Patience my love, patience.
Panchi stops the car. RV realizes its a beach. Only a few people are present...
They go and sit at the beach. Panchi rests her shoulders on RVs chest.
Panchi: This sunset is so beautiful. Isnt it Ranveer?
But RV is looking only at his Panchi.
RV: It indeed id the most beautiful sight ever.
Panchi turns and realizes about whom RV is talking. she blushes.
Panchi: RV mujhe tum se kuch kehna hain.
RV: (Sensing something serious): Bol Panchi. Koi problem hai kya?
Panchi: nahi koi problen nahi hai. woh mujhe kehna tha ki..
RV: Bol na...
Panchi: I am really sorry ki maine hamara first valentine spoil kar diya...</font>
RV: Tujhe aisa kyun lagta hain? Aisa kuch nahi hain. Tere sath spend kiya hua har moment mere liye special hain..
Panchi: Nahi nonu. mujhe bolne do. Tumne mere liya itna sab kuch plan kiya. I am really sorry. But I Really love you. Isliye I have a gift for you. Close your eyes.
Ranveer closes his eyes and murmers" main eyes close karne kahu toh main silly hu"
Panchi turns around and moves her hair from her neck. She got herself tatood at her neck. It is written, "RANVEER".
Panchi: Open your eyes.
RV is shocked and overwhelmed with emotions. Tears are glistening in his eyes.
RV; Tune mere liye itna pain saha.. I Love You. You are the best part of my life infact you are my life.
Panchi: This is just to tell you that I LOVE YOU, I HAVE ALWAYS LOVED YOU and I WILL ALWAYS LOVE YOU no matter what.
RV: I LOVE YOU TOO..
He pulls her into a passionate hug. And they enjoy their heaven in each others arms forever...

THE END..

P.S. This is my first OS so pls bear with me. +ve and -ve both comments are welcome.

Edited by anjali1805 - 11 years ago

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Posted: 11 years ago
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OMG
It was just amazing!
You should keep writing!
It was written beautifully!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Anjali my sweetheart🤗..Wow U just made my day..I so love you u for this OS😳...And are u sure it is your first work😲.?..u write so well babes👏...Ranveer and Panchi..The perfect soul-mates and you portrayed their moment so well🤗..Finally u penned down your imagination and I am so glad that u did...Love you so much..So Panchi tattooed Ranveer name...how romantic is that..Love RV's reaction...My RaHi...God bless them..And u plz do write more yaar...will be waiting for ur work now😳...take care


PS: All the very best for ur exams👍🏼...jaldi se exams do uske baad we want more stories from you😳


Lots of Love

Geet

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wow yaar Anjali...👏
Nt just Neha or Geet bt even I'm shocked & overwhelmed... 😃
Really NICE...
Gr8 job... 👏
Is dis really ur 1st work ??? 😕
Well hats off den...
Lovd it...
Muahh...
Write MORE... 😊

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Anjali babe... thank u.. what a pleasant surprise.. unexpected tha completely... n so ten times more sweet n delightful too... Wowww...
me loved the idea that day itself n now when u have developed the concept into a full fledged os I am so so mesmerised.. what perfect rahi yaa.. u have presented the emotions n panchi's thoughts behind the tattoo so well.. I so expect all of it from rahi... that selfless love, the desire to make it upto rv even when he dint have any complaints, and that readiness to endure any pain makes their love for eternity n I hope it stays that way..I know it's fiction but they r a part f my life yaa... n with such good rahi works floating all around my love s just getting magnified...
Btw dear.. all the best for ur exams... n thanks for this...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wow anjali...🤗 Ur OS is much much better than yest Epi...😳😳😳
Good work Keep it up...do write more...👏

And yes my best line from OS is aur tum kya ho Pyaar ki Panchi.(Panchi just blushes) wow ur so creative dear...😃😃

Loved it...

smriti
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: tinaswea

OMG

It was just amazing!
You should keep writing!
It was written beautifully!



Thanx a lot yaar.
It means a lot.
Thank you so much for your appreciation.. 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweetdesire

<font face="Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif" size="2">Anjali my sweetheart🤗..Wow U just made my day..I so love you
u for this OS😳...And are u sure it is your first work😲.?..u write so well babes👏...Ranveer
and Panchi..The perfect soul-mates and you portrayed their moment so
well🤗..Finally u penned down your imagination and I am so glad that u did...Love
you so much..So Panchi tattooed Ranveer name...how romantic is that..Love RV's reaction...My
RaHi...God bless them..And u plz do write more yaar...will be waiting for ur work
now😳...take care</font>


<font face="Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif" size="2">PS: All the very best for ur exams👍🏼...jaldi se exams do uske baad we want more stories from you😳</font>



<font face="Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif" size="2">Lots of Love</font>


<font face="Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif" size="2">Geet</font>





Thanx Geet... I am glad that you loved it. Your appreciation means a lot.
I was actually not sure whether u guyz would like it but i am glad that you did.
Love you tooo.
And thanx for you wishes. 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: luv_u_Bharti

Wow yaar Anjali...👏
Nt just Neha or Geet bt even I'm shocked & overwhelmed... 😃
Really NICE...
Gr8 job... 👏
Is dis really ur 1st work ??? 😕
Well hats off den...
Lovd it...
Muahh...
Write MORE... 😊




Hey... Thank you so much. I am overwhelmed by you comments.
Love u too.
Muaahhh 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: sneha02

<font size="2">Anjali babe... thank u.. what a pleasant surprise.. unexpected tha completely... n so ten times more sweet n delightful too... Wowww...</font>

<font size="2">me loved the idea that day itself n now when u have developed the concept into a full fledged os I am so so mesmerised.. what perfect rahi yaa.. u have presented the emotions n panchi's thoughts behind the tattoo so well.. I so expect all of it from rahi... that selfless love, the desire to make it upto rv even when he dint have any complaints, and that readiness to endure any pain makes their love for eternity n I hope it stays that way..I know it's fiction but they r a part f my life yaa... n with such good rahi works floating all around my love s just getting magnified...</font>
<font size="2">Btw dear.. all the best for ur exams... n thanks for this...</font>



Hey Neha... I am glad you liked it. You comments encourage me a lot.
And yes Rahi are indeed q part of our lives..
Thanx again. 😊

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