~FF : Tere Sheher Mein, my way~

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hello all, this is my first attempt so i request you to please bear with me. I always wanted to write something on ManYa but opportunity never presented itself and before id even think their love story ended even before starting. Putting a fullstop to my dreams/imagination since the show is moving towards its end(as what i feel) i want to fulfill my wish.


Disclaimer : the show, title and characters belong to DKP, nothing belongs to me. in my version of TSM i've twisted the plot, turning it into a love story. Anyways, enjoy. Feel free to comment, like/dislike.😊


Chapter 1 : Her arrival


The story begins with Sneha with her three daughters returning to Banaras, after decades. Having lost her everything, to start a new life without her husband(rishi)


Several cars pulled up outside Varanasi railway station.


'Arre guru, yaha toh pehle se bhid hai..' said mantu trying to find a room to park his ambassador


'Bhaiya hum toh pehle hi kahe the jaldi chalo tourists intazar karege' said Atom.


'Han chalo ab nahi toh woh chale jayenge' said mantu, rushing into the entrance


While sneha unload luggages, racchu n jazz follows her


'Hari chachu's son is coming to receive us tell amu to hurry up' said sneha.


'Mom she'll come, mujhe bhuk lagi hai hum kuch khaye hai' Said jazz.


Here, mantu makes his way through the crowd


'Bhaiya train aa gayi lagta hai' said atom, shooking his head.


'Tum tension mat lo, jao us taraf dekho.. hum yaha dekhte hai' mantu said, checking out the passengers.


'Mahadev sambhal lena sab'


Amaya appears at the door with her luggage, trying to alight from the train but her high heels failing all her attempts.


'Rukho hum madat kar dete hai' said mantu, looking at helpless amaya. running towards her through the moving crowd and accidentally hits her luggage making her stumble but he manages to catch her as she falls and supports her in his arms.


(Her long black hair flowing in the wind as dheere dheere tune plays in the BG a startled mantu couldn't take his eyes off of Amaya who's dressed in a pastel pink floral fit-n-flare dress..their eyes met)


'Excuse me?' Said Amaya, curtly, snapping mantu out of trance. 'Is this a way you welcome your guests?' 'Agar tum hari chachu k bete nahi hotey main tumhe batati'


'Sorry?' Said mantu, making her stand 'Dekhiye madam hum toh bas apki madat..'


'Madat huh?' Said Amaya, 'oh God, mom rachu di jazz kaha gaye?' 'Dekho tum yahi ruko luggage ke sath mein unhe dhunti hun..' Said Amaya, handing him her luggage


'Kaisi pagal ladki thi!' mantu thinks. 'Hey mahadev, humare tourists' he drops her luggage and walks off


(Please skip grammatical mistakes/typos😳)


A/N : I hope you liked my spin on the first chapter, im going to continue with the story. More soon!

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Chapter 2 : welcome to Banaras


'Mom, thank god you're here..let's go now' said amu


'Amu! Meet rudra, hari chachu's son' sneha said


'Namastey Amaya' rudra said, forming his hands in a proper 'Namastey' he wore a black Kurta over denim, and a multi-colored scarf wrapped around his neck and a huge red tilak on his forehead


Amu looks at him, sceptical.


'Hello rudra' said amu, flashing a fake smile.


'Jeez agar yeh hari chachu ka beta hai toh woh kaun tha?' Amaya thinks. 'OMG MY LUGGAGE' ' mom mera luggage waha hai chaliye na please' said amaya, getting worried.

...


Amu finds her luggage missing from its place.


'Kaha gaya? Yahi pe tha woh ladka leke chala gaya' 'mom mera luggage, uss mein mera saara branded stuff tha' said amu, almost crying. 'Banaras, i already hate you!'


'Don't worry amu, hum dhunte hai yahi kahi hoga' said sneha, trying to calm her daughter.


'Auntyji yeh Banaras hai yaha ek baar koi cheez ghum gayi asanise nahi milti..hum railway police ko complaint karte hai us sasure ke khilaf' rudra said.


'Jane do rudra beta, humein koi complaint nahi karni' said sneha.

...


'Welcome to Banaras I'm mantu, your guide' said mantu, smiling genuinely. 'Yeh humara sheher hai yaha ek baar koi aata hai toh bas yaha ka ho jata hai.'


A/N : This one is bit short. I hope you liked it. Let me know, chapter 3 up next. :)


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: allin4manya

lovely start...pls continue:)


Thank you :) yes soon.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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luggage chhod k chala gaya... ab toh mantu ki khair nahi.. bichara...
I loved it...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: wrizaa

luggage chhod k chala gaya... ab toh mantu ki khair nahi.. bichara...
I loved it...



thank you ria😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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res

mujhe pm nahi kiya😔
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Posted: 9 years ago
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okay let me start like this
welcome dear to writing, i know its your first one so don't be nervous. just write whatever make you happy and you feel. others will automatically love it.

for the story i like it simple start,perfect description, character introduction and everything.
a short ans sweet update.

mantu and amaya meeting was interesting. waiting to no more about them. and its seem tom and jerry fight already startedšŸ˜†

good try.
keep writing.

i think memories of tsm will make all her fans writer. but its good for us only and our forever manya😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: manyarsh

okay let me start like this

welcome dear to writing, i know its your first one so don't be nervous. just write whatever make you happy and you feel. others will automatically love it.

for the story i like it simple start,perfect description, character introduction and everything.
a short ans sweet update.

mantu and amaya meeting was interesting. waiting to no more about them. and its seem tom and jerry fight already startedšŸ˜†

good try.
keep writing.

i think memories of tsm will make all her fans writer. but its good for us only and our forever manya😃



Thanks for the warm welcome dearšŸ¤— yes I'll update soon😳 and tumhe Pehla pm karungišŸ¤—
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Posted: 9 years ago
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good start😃Love the way how u made manya meet in railway station.
Excited for the next part .
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Divya429

good start😃Love the way how u made manya meet in railway station.

Excited for the next part .


Thanks divsšŸ¤— I'll try to update soon😳

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