TEI Shot...It's the end...

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Posted: 9 years ago
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@goa...sea shore...even it seemed silent today
...silence is dangerous...
guess it would have continued ...this silence would have continued if the sound of a hard slap didn't didn't break it...

kunj looked up...his palm reached his cheek...he didn't dare to utter a word..
bebe: TU KISSE BARBAAD KARNE CHALA?..BATA MUJEH..KISE?iss ladki ko...jo tumhaare bache k khathir iss uv se shaadi kiya...jo parivaar k khathir apne marzi k khilaf shaadi ki...?agar tu uss din waapas aaya...toh uss shaadi ko kyu nahi roka?..kyu 5 saal ...5 saal humse nahi mile?..?KYU!?

UV: kunj...tumne bahut galat kiya...kis se badla lena chahte ho tum??aur kaisa badla...mujeh chod...twinkle se badla kunj?..twinkle se?...tumhe kya pata hai..inn 5 saal mein kya kya hua??kis baat ka badla kunj?..tumhare bache k khatir twinkle ne shaadi ki mujh se...par pyaar...pyaar aaj bhi woh tumse hi karti hai...miscarriage k baad bhi ..hum ek happy couple jaise act kiya...kyu ki woh nahi chati thi k koi bhi family member udaas ho...woh mujeh best friend manti hai..bas...aur tum isse badla lena chahte ho?...isse?

kunj couldn't control the tears anymore...tears made there way down his face...he couldn't look at her...he couldn't look into her eyes...so he kept looking at sand...near her feet...
twinkle slumped onto the sand...
"TWINKLE" came out a worried call from all the family members..
'TWINKLE' saying so kunj dropped to her height on the sand...
she let out a heavy sigh...but she didn't look at him...
'twinkle' he said again...his hand reaching out to her shoulder..
she stopped his hand midway...and said "STOP.Don't .Dare.To.Touch.Me."
she finally looked up...her eyes were red...they looked as if they were burning...
twinkle: zinda ho...kaha the tum..?...Badla lene aaye ho? Hogaya badla pura?
kunj: i'm sorry twinkle.
twinkle:sorry ...?sorry kis k liye? uss din shaadi nahi rok ne keliye?..uss din bina mile chale jane k liye? 5 saal humsab se..mujse dur rehne keliye..?ya phir 5 saal baad mujh se badla lene kiliye aaye ho...issliye? kiss baat ke liye sorry?
kya kaha tumne? yaha tum margaye aur yaha se shuru hua uv aur meri love story?..yehi kaha tha na?
yaha ...issi samandar ne mujh se mera sab kuch cheenliya...yaha maine meri zindagi kho diya...yaha maine mere pati ko kho diya...yaha maine..mere kunj kho di..
main aaj bhi kunj se bahut pyaar karti hu...main aaj bhi uske awaaz sunna chahti hu...usse dhekna chahti hu...usske bahon mein rehna chanti hu...aaj bhi uske liye tarasti hu...main aaj bhi usse bahut pyaar karti hu...
a lone tear rolled down her cheek...
par tum se nahi...tum mere kunj nahi ho...tum mere kunj kabhi nahi hosakte...mera kunj mujeh kabhi bhi dukh nahi pahuchasakta...
aaj jo mere saamne hai..woh rocky singh hai...woh apne badle k aag mein anda hogaya hai..
kunj: twinkle i'm sorry..i really love you..
twinkle: par main kunj se pyaar karti hu...aur kisi se nahi...main zindagi bhar mere kunj ki yaadon k saath guzar sakti hu...so please Mr.Rocky...plz mujeh chodo...aur Kabhi mere zindagi mein aane ki koshish bhi mat karna...
aur aap sab...plz mujeh jaane do...
saying so she walks away...
uv tries to call out for twinkle...but bebe stops him and says...' jaane de usse'
slowly all the family members leave that place...
kunj didn't move a bit...after few hours..he gets up walks to the sea
"I'm sorry twinkle" he says...before walking in more into the sea..and eventually disappearing...forever?
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next day's news paper's headlines
Two dead bodies were found on the sea shore together..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Oh god rula diya!
This is perfect!
You know I have been thinking of writing such an os on this plot for such a long time but I couldn't as I'm way too upset to write! good thing you wrote it!
I loved twinkle's dialogue the most! You perfectly portrayed twinkle's emotions and breakdown!
The ending haaye!
Thanks for writing this and making me cry!
Lots of love
Sayli
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: SweetSau

Oh god rula diya!

This is perfect!
You know I have been thinking of writing such an os on this plot for such a long time but I couldn't as I'm way too upset to write! good thing you wrote it!
I loved twinkle's dialogue the most! You perfectly portrayed twinkle's emotions and breakdown!
The ending haaye!
Thanks for writing this and making me cry!
Lots of love
Sayli


aww sayli...🤗
sry for making u cry sis...
on this plot?...same pinch sis😳
ty soo much for this comment...
i actually thought no one will like this...so didn't even pm about this...now ur comment gave some confidance...will pm now..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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I didn't read it again...but plz tell me ...if there are any mistakes... Hindi grammar mistakes... Etc etc...I'm not soo good with Hindi...at times eng ...
So feel free to point out the mistakes...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Sanju nice os.
Twinkle's views nd breakdown awesome.
Were they twinj im the end who died in the sea?
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Sanju i'm a puddle of emotions now
This was everything i ever wanted Twinkle to do. You wrote it beautifully. I can't say more without crying a river
This was just amazing
Let me go grab some tissues now
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Posted: 9 years ago
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😭😭 U made me cry.
But I loved it..it was just amazing...U wrote it very beautifully..
Bebe, thanks for that thappad 😆
This is not our kunj...its Rocky..our Kunj will never hurt twinkle.


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Posted: 9 years ago
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did twinj die in the end???😭
lovely os 👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Meri Pyaari Bhukkar Buddy;
What's happened to you???😕
It seems anyone messed up with your food.😆
But seriously Sanju,I am crying like never before.😭
Sanju;I don't know what will be the actual end but if this will happen then I definitively will be in mess through passing in emotional turmoil.
What will be the Trajic End of our one time darling show.
By the way The writing is amazing though heart wrenching.👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Sanju...😳😳
You didn't tell me you write stories. And so good ones at that!
This was so tear jerking. Goa..the place where it ended and ended again.
Liked how you showed Twinkle to be unforgiving and how she considered the new Kunj as Rocky. He is indeed Rocky.

Great Job buddy!👏

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