ALTER fate - Twinj FF

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Here is a story of our very own Twinj. This would be a weekly updated FF unlike my other ongoing FF which is updated almost daily.
I am still not sure about how the story will progress nor I have any plot fixed or finalized thus the reason why the track will progress weekly... keeping into consideration your all Point of Views...

Enjoy😊

"Aise kyu dekh rahe ho muje?" She asked shyly looking over him...
"Kyu... nahi dekh sakta kya... ab kuch hi der mein meri biwi banne vali ho... meri mangetar ho hak banta hai mera..."
"Ohhh..dekhna. biwi ban jaungi fir zindagi bhar rovoge ki kisse paala pad gaya..."
"Aisa kabhi ho hi nahi sakta... tu janti nahi kab se iss din ka intezaar kar raha tha..."
As he smirked knowing how it melted her...
She was so excited about how perfect life she had lived till now..she was born with a silver spoon and had everything at her feet...on her one call her mother would serve her an entire shopping mall or a hotel if she liked its food... but amidst all this she had forgotten to enjoy little pleasures of life...which she dint know existed..her silver nails and golden sandals added to her charm but also added to her attitude...and it had a sting of arrogance in it...which all felt normal as kids of the rich are bound to be spoilt... and her this carefree attitude gave her freedom to choose him as her BF... today she was going to get married to him... her mother dint approve first for marriage but gave in time seeing her happiness...
how would she be not happy she was in love with him from years...atleast she believed it to be love...and today their relation was to get a name... he was even more desperate than her... for this marriage... maybe becoz he loved her more... and she sighed happily at that thought' but only babaji knew his reason for desperation

They were sitting in two royal chairs between all the rich and wealthy of the city... all were here to witness one of the biggest wedding of the city...they were not all here to bless the couple but here to boast about themselves and get a chance to start a venture with Tanejas...

Her trance was broken by her to be mother in laws voice...
"Yuvi beta chal na.. tujse zaruri baat karni hai..." as Anita dragged her son from the chair...
"Kya hua Mom... yaha sab hai... aise kaise mein"
"Tu chal... urgent hoga tab hi bulaungi na"
He walked back near her... "Baby mein bas do min mein aya..."she replied with her smile...


"Kyu Agarwal sahab Luthras ne baazi maar li... aapka beta toa reh gaya... Tanejas ka jamai banne se..."
"Kya kare... der ho gayi... Leela Taneja se riahte ki baat chalane hi vala tha ki... unki beti ne apne BF ka khulasa kar diya...social circle mein bhot baate suni unki narazgi ki... par akhir beti k samne Maa ne sar jhuka hi diya..."
"Kya pata sar jhukaya hai... ya Shadi ki vajah koi bin bulayi khus khabri hai..."the elite talked gossiping about the girls scandalous affair...

"Kya Mehra sahab... meri beti ko bhi aapki beti ki tarah samaj rakha hai kya... kamse kam meri beti ne bataya toa.. muje sach.. par aapki beti toa.. bhag gayi thi apne ashiq k sath... ab dekho.. mein apni beti k khusi k liye itna toa kar hi sakti hu... pure Amritsar ki sabse shandaar shadi karva rahi hu..."
Leela shut the men up... she was a strong confidant woman who never took anything on her name or her family... she was good at heart... a perfect Lady... but she also knew how to keep ever1 on thier toes...and showed them their limits...and they gave an apologetic look...

"Kya... Mom.. aise kaise ho sakta hai.."
"Haa. Yuvi humara sara plan fail ho jayega... agar vo yaha pogoch gaya...Mene socha bhi nahi tha ki... Leela ab bhi hum par shak kar rahi hogi... muje laga tha ki.. engagement k bad... vo bhi tere pyar k naatak ko sach man legi... Twinkle ki tarah... par ye Leela toa badi chalu nikli... usne humare hi office mein khabri rakhvaye aur.. vo humare pure plan k saboot leeke aa raha hai..."
"Damnit... is aurat ko toa mein abhi khatam kar deta hu..."as Yuvi
Started to walk out like a maniac...
"Yuvraj pagal ho gaye ho kya... itne saalo ki mehnat par paani fer doge kya...ye shadi ho jane do...tum usko rokne ka tarika socho..."
"Yes Mom... us aurat ne aapki zindagi nark bana di... ab uski beti ki zindagi nark banake mein badla lunga... unko barbaad karke rakh dunga...Twinkle uski Maa ki halat dekh k tadpegi aur vo aurat Twinkle ki bebasi ko dekh k royegi..." as he said like a maniac...
He walked ahead and called some1
"Hello... ek kaam karna hai.."he ordered
A man was standing outside listening to the entire convo between mother and son unintentionally...he was juat passing by from.the washroom when he heard voices... he left before hearing what the son ordered some1 on the phone...it was none of his business to interfere in others lives... he had his own problems to deal with...as he walked out to do his job with a smile...


Twinkle was sitting alone and getting bored... where was Yuvi she thought abhi se aise gayab hone ki adat hai toa shadi k bad kya hoga... she stood up to talk with few guests and then she spotted her mother...she was walking towards her... when...
SPLAASHH... she looked at her dress...which was pink before was now turned to a dull maroon...her anger boiled at the person responsible...and
"MAM I m really sorr...
"SLAAPP..." he dint see that slap coming as he held his cheek...
"Idiot... andhe ho kya dekh k nahi chal sakte... pata bhi hai kitne ki hai ye dress..."
"Mam vo galti se ho..."
"Just Shut up...do kaudi k waiter ho tum... tumahri salary se zyda mehngi hai ye dress.. aur tumne ise...MANAGER kaha hai...MANAGER..." as she shouted...every1s attention was grabbed on the sound of the slap itself... but they dint paid much heed as it was obvious scene that a rich shouting over some waiter or servant... but when she shouted to call the manager... her mother noticed...the scene...
"Mam..please...vo galti..."now his eyes were of fear when she called the manager... and surprised at this rich girls arrogance...he had come to know by his fellow mates that it was her wedding today...
"Tumse bat kar raha hai kya koi..."she spat back..
"Kya hua beta... kyu itna chilla rahi ho.."
"Maa dekho isne meri dress kharab kardi...kitni special thi ye dress mere liye... Yuvi specially laya tha.."
"Its okay beta...shant ho ja... hum ise saaf karva denge...n isne sorry bola na tumse..."
"Kya hua mam... any problem...?"the manager asked Leela politely...
She was about to close the matter when...
"Kya hua baby... itni upset kyu ho gayi..."Yuvi asked Twinkle holding her cheek much to Leelas disinterest...
"Dekho..Yuvi... ye isne kya kiya...meri dress.."
Yuvi grabbed his collar... "kyu be.. tuje agar waitering ati nahi toa... karta kyu hai... tu janta bhi hai.. ki meine ye dress di hai meri hone wali biwi ko... kitne ki hai dress soch bhi nahi sakta... tu... gin nahi payega..."
He just kept mum as Yuvi grabbed his collar and insulted him more... he recognized the voice from that room to be his.. he was the one plotting...against this girl...his to be wife... his mind reminded it was none of his business...
"Mam maaf kar dijiye... humare ladke se galti ho gayi..please...naya hai..."
"Toa aise bekar logo ko kaam pe kyu rakha hai... iske liye aapne paise liye hai humse..."Yuvi fired at the manager...
"Mam mein persnlly kehta hu.. isko maafi mangne... Maafi mango mam..se...sorry bolo.."
He knew it wasnt his fault entirely... she too was walking aimlessly...but he dint have the luxury to argue...he needed this job...
"I m sorr.."
"Sorry se meri dress toa thik nahi hogi na... Manager.. Fire Him" Twinkle oredered...
He observed her rudeness...he knew it was both their mistakes and he was ready to apologize for the same but... she was far from acknowledging him...
"Mam...but isse pehli baar aisi galti hui... aage se nahi hogi..."
"Twinkle puttar chhad na.. mitti daal is mamle pe... aaj kitni khusi ka din hai..."leela tried to cover up... she knew Twinkle was very much touchy about her dresses and all and it was difficult to control her when she found anything of hers in damaged condition but looking at that waiters face... Leela softened... he was struggling apologising... so she made a last attempt...
"Manager... aap isko fire karte ho ... ki mein Maa se kahu... aapko fire karne k liye..."
Manager...in fear of loosing such a big wedding contract spat authoratively...
"SARNA YOU ARE FIRED"...




Ch 1,2 - pg1
Ch 3 - pg3





Edited by joe10 - 9 years ago


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Posted: 9 years ago
#2
Joe this was so good
I promise i'll read this one on time
I'm still on chapter 6 of the other ff
I know lazy me. anyhow this was really really good
I could visualise this all in my head
And yay! Another story
So kunj is a waiter? Oh my! Didn't see that one coming
And yuvi is evil as always
Awesome start
Do continue asap
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Ok Joe! Now this one sounds amazing and I am very excited for this one 😃😳
Well its a weekly update !! I 'll have patience 😆😳
So continue soon 😳p.m. me on next updates whenever done 😳😛
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Posted: 9 years ago
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awesome start joe
i just loved it
this anita nad uv are same baddies
iam really excited to read more
plzzz do continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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nice update
interesting
continue when u r free
eagerly waiting for ur next update
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Bhai this was FABULOUS ...LOVED IT...👏😳😃
Hayye Allah today i'm busy getting shocks!!!😆
Sarna (waiter)...Yuvi(mangeetar)...Twinkle(fiance)😲
Plzzz update the nxt part...can't wait yaar...itna suspense aur seh nehi paunga!!!😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Chapter 2
He walked aimlessly on the street taking a glance back at the house decorated and standing out in the whole of locality the gate read 'Taneja Mansion'..he smiled at his fate laughing back at him he was so used to all this, he had lost hope that his life would change ever...he held his cheek, still tingling by that slap she gave him, but he was numb to it as it was slapped numerous times by strangers that he had forgotten the count, this was his life living like a street dog teased, tamed, beaten up...all he thought was to make sure there is enough food for him and his bebe to eat at night...in their little abode...but like many hungry days...today too he would return without a paycheck...just becoz he spilled some spoonfull of drink over a dress..
he never considered clothes to be that important...what was the fuss about, he would never understand...maybe it must be very imp to her coz...his fiance gifted her...and he chuckled...his fiance...who was a snake, whose convo he had heard back there returning from washroom, she is surely going to face a dreadful life ahead...getting married to him...he dint care enough to make a point...his opinion dint matter, and he had other matters to look at...as he called her...taking out his second hand phone...
"Hello Bebe... aap khana khaakar so jayega... muje aaj raat ko bhi kaam karna padega...apna khayal rakhna"
and he cut the call without hearing a reply...
On the other side...she had silent tears...with miffed sobs... how well she knew her grandson the only person alive of her family...The Sarnas', she knew why he dint return home on some nights... she was tired of explaining him that...failure is a part of life...just to get success in future... but she herself now doubted her wisdom...looking back at last 15 years... her grandsons struggle was irking her... he had no faith in God...he lost it...when they lost everything their family, their wealth, their prosperity..but she still believed in Babaji...now her faith had become a challenge to her God...as to when was he going to shower his blessings to her son...when would he nurse his wounds...when would he turn his Fate...to Fortune...'Mere puttar ne...bohot saha hai.rabji..use apna ashirwad kab denge
aap...mere jane se pehle mein uske chehre par ek baar... sukoon ki khusi dekhna chahti hu...bas ek baar...'

He held his vest on his arms and loosened his tie... the street was deserted... there was no one around... just then... he heard some noise... a man in a sophisticated suit was running from some1 he was terrified... constantly looking back...his head was bleeding but he was quiet concious..he had held some files like his life depended on them... before he could gather the scene playing in front of him... he saw a glass bottle hurled at the man and hit him... on his back... he fell down from the impact... and then three men came in his vision they looked like maniacs... they had leather jackets on with chains hanging... they were not goons but... some spoilt brats...he watched as the man looked from down in horror...towards them...
'Muje chhod do... jane do muje...'
He felt it not right to interfere...in the matter... he started walking from the corner...as one of three looked at him...
'Aye... dekh kya raha hai... mujra chal raha hai kya...nikal yaha se...'
He looked at the pleading man and the three maniacs... and started walking...looking away
'Please... muje bachao... in.logo... se...please...for Gods sake...save me...'
And he heard the man call for help...a slap sounded maybe...on of the maniacs hit him...
He looked over and...smiled...'for God's sake...' he was surprised at peoples belief in this strange entity which they never saw or witnessed any proof of... GOD... and how they could ask for something or anything in his name... he dint pay heed to any1 who mentioned God...
'Please help me... Kisi ki zindagi barbaad hone se bach jayegi...'
And he stopped in his tracks...now thats a point you put forward to take his help... 'kisi ki zindagi barbaad hone se bach jayegi'... his Own life was such a mess and destroyed that he knew how it felt like when the world comes crsahing down...infact he was never able to stand up from the debris of his life,, still buried... but one thing he was sure was he would not let this God person damage any1s life like his ... if it was in his hands he would erase every pain from those suffering at Gods hand of Fate like him... and when the man pleaded for saving some1s life, he...turned around...
He walked back now the trio was trying to steal that file from him...but he was clutching the file inspite of the bleeding and beatings he recieved...his heart surely melted at the person bearing all this to save some1s life... he wondered who was that lucky one...
"Chhod dijiye ise... ye aap log sahi nahi kar rahe.."
"Aye.. tuje bola na nikal le yaha se... varna tuje bhi isi tarah dho dalnege...chal nikal"
"Dekhiye...aap log aise inko nahi maar sakte...mein police ko bula lunga...agar aap yaha se nahi gaye toa..."
One of the trio came towards him and.. hit his face with a punch..."ye sadak dekh raha hai... kitni sumsaan hai...agar kaat k kahi fek dunga na ... pata bhi nahi chalega kisiko..."
He held his nose which was now slightly... bleeding...
He took out his phone to diall 100...
But the man who hit him... took his phone and... threw it over the ground... and smashed it into pieces... he watched his phone face the brutality by the maniac... it was bought by him just a few days back...by his savings and... this man...
"Police log ko hum apni jeb mein leke ghumte hai... samja... ab dafa ho jaa... yaha se...varna..."the maniac grabbed his collar and now was holding a locket tied to his neck...it was of maybe ...silver...he held him by his locket threatening him...and saw his expressions change...
As the man grabbed the one thing most dearest to him... his mothers locket... his eyes pierced through the maniac spitting venom... with... intense rage... the maniacs hold on the locket loosened... and he walked ahead...ready to attack
The maniac tried to...punch him.. but he held his hand mid air... blocking the punch...and... hitting him hard enough to break his teeth...and lay him on the ground the other two watched the blow received by their friend...and .charghed towards him... but only to be held by their necks... and... thrown over on the side of tw road... as they hit...concrete over their head..
And.. the broken teeth maniac ran
away...from the scene...

He closed his eyes and... held the locket... calming his breath and heartbeat... as he looked at the pleading man... trying to get up... he helped him...
"Thank You so much beta... muje ek pal k liye laga ki tum meri madad hi nahi karoge"
"Muje bhi yahi laga tha...,,he stated honestly
Aapko bohot chot lagi hai... aapko hospital jana chahiye..."
"Nahi.. abhi... ek zaruri kaam hai... agar deri ho gayi... toa kisi ki zindagi barbaad ho jayegi... tumne meri madad ki... bhagwaan tumhara bhala kare..."
And he looked with disappointment... thinking for once give god a break... you people...
He looked over to the man he was around his late forties...but had a more mature look...and a sense of gratitude towards him being saved by him... they walked towards an auto stand..nearby...he turned towards him to thank him...again..and leave...
"Mera naam Amarjeet Mishra hai...tumko kabhi bhi meri madad ki zarurat pade toa... yad karna... ye mera card hai..."
He took the card... and watched him leave...
As the man sat in an auto...

"Kaha jana hai... chacha...?"the auto wala asked Mishra...
"Taneja Mansion, Vilas Nagar"

He looked at the card in his hand... it read
'Amarjeet Mishra, legal advisor'...
there was his phone number..
.as he turned the card and read the name of the company
he threw the card away...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome updates. Loved it.
Continue soon plz.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Loved both the updates
Interesting concept
Continue soon 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wonderful update Joe 😳
Plz continue soon 😛
Wud be w8ng for ua updates 😳

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