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kamila.

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Posted: 8 years ago

#41

I loved this.. First I thought.. it was some of your post.. I doesn't want to a stalker anymore soo I pertained myself opening it.. my eyes didn't notice the TS as my mobile screen is cracked..

Now I can post my opinion a out it.. I loved it.. dialogues and his emotions... What less is Swara cry.. I wanted that more..

I get this dialogue from tu .. -"hello hello sojao" san-"kya baat hai aaj bhi mere saans lete hi samajh jati ho ki yeh saas leta huva murda insaan mein hi hoon"

Upcoming scn dialogue..."Aaj tak apne har dard mein tumhare liye dua maangi.. aaj ke baad apni har dua mein tumhare liye dard maangoonga" I'm dead.

It just echoing in my ears... Your dialogues were equal to it.. I can imagine Sanskaar saying those..

Pm me..

With love...

Kam...

PS.. my mobile screen I can't read your Fanaa update just give me some days..

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lucky.m

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Posted: 8 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: Vaiyambar...
I loved this.. First I thought.. it was some of your post.. I doesn't want to a stalker anymore soo I pertained myself opening it.. my eyes didn't notice the TS as my mobile screen is cracked..
Now I can post my opinion a out it.. I loved it.. dialogues and his emotions... What less is Swara cry.. I wanted that more..

I get this dialogue from tu .. -"hello hello sojao" san-"kya baat hai aaj bhi mere saans lete hi samajh jati ho ki yeh saas leta huva murda insaan mein hi hoon"

Upcoming scn dialogue..."Aaj tak apne har dard mein tumhare liye dua maangi.. aaj ke baad apni har dua mein tumhare liye dard maangoonga" I'm dead.
It just echoing in my ears... Your dialogues were equal to it.. I can imagine Sanskaar saying those..

Pm me..

With love...

Kam...

PS.. my mobile screen I can't read your Fanaa update just give me some days..

Kam🤗..thanks dearie ,😛

Swara ... Not more yaar ..This is not set in current scenario so .cant maker her cry more 😆.Take your time yaar ..its ok .

love

lucky

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lucky.m

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Posted: 8 years ago

#43

updated part 1 ... hitting bed .. gudnight folks🤗 ..and do let me know 😛

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Nynaeve

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Posted: 8 years ago

#44

Res for part 1

I am first to res and unres

I loved it - it was such an easy and pleasurable read - Sanskaar the geek and Swara the beautiful new girl who is automatically Ms Popular, their slow and steady growth from friendly acquaintances to lovers was beautifully penned. (Laksh had to go back to his accepted avatar of being the impulsive jealous character😡😡😡) But then it did serve to break all barriers between them as they confessed and surrendered to each other, in blissful union. They had so many dreams and hopes, as they basked in that warm afterglow.

And this bring me to the moot question, what did Swara do or what happened that the geek greek god mutated to the angry raging man.

I cannot just wait for the next part.

love you loads,

Nyna

Edited by Nynaeve - 8 years ago

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lucky.m

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Posted: 8 years ago

#45

Originally posted by: Nynaeve
Res for part 1
I am first to res and unres

I loved it - it was such an easy and pleasurable read - Sanskaar the geek and Swara the beautiful new girl who is automatically Ms Popular, their slow and steady growth from friendly acquaintances to lovers was beautifully penned. (Laksh had to go back to his accepted avatar of being the impulsive jealous character😡😡😡) But then it did serve to break all barriers between them as they confessed and surrendered to each other, in blissful union. They had so many dreams and hopes, as they basked in that warm afterglow.

And this bring me to the moot question, what did Swara do or what happened that the geek greek god mutated to the angry raging man.

I cannot just wait for the next part.

love you loads,
Nyna

Nynu🤗😳

Even I am surprised with the flow ...It just came out ..I just went on typing and I am happy with it ..glad to know you are too😳/My fastest story after Swasan OS -Carpediem😉

Geek Greek god ..☺️ I love that name for sunnyboy

What did Swara do?? Next update ..u will have all answers 😉

Love

Lucky

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Nivedita

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Posted: 8 years ago

#46

Lucky,

Part 1 is totally superb. I mean I have no words to describe it. It is so nice. Sanskar the nerd and swara the cool dudet. Perfect jodi. Sad sanskar's parents died when he was at the the age of four. He must have suffered a lot. Glad ap supported him not like the one in serial. Dp is biased towards his sons 😡. Laksh always the jealous 😡. Swara is so possessive about sanskar. She does not like any one ogling her sanskar 😆. After all, sanskar looks so handsome . Sanskar's fear and confession and swara's confession 👏 . Love their future plans. Wonder what turned this loverboy sanskar into an angry bird. Did swara do anything wrong or anyone created some misunderstandings. I hope the reason is the latter one because they have so much love for each other that they forgive each other's mistakes easily. Now my head will explode because of this suspense. Can't wait for the next part. Update soon.

Love u loads

Nivi

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darcyholic

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Posted: 8 years ago

#47

Hi Lucky

The prologue and first part is awesome.Love at first sight for sanskar 😳 .Swara developing love slowly from mere gratitude to study partner to friends to girlfriend is just so romantic and realistic.Because that's how love develops in real .Thank you for the perfect development of such a beautiful emotion.
Sankars back story was quite sad and shows his craving for love.Laksh is going to be the villain in this case I think because the prologue indicated separation.Again marvellous writing. ⭐️
Minerva

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lucky.m

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Posted: 8 years ago

#48

@ Nivi & Minerva🤗

Thanks a lot guys ..Will revert in detail tomorrow but I loved your words😛..I am going to sleep with huge smile😃

Love

Lucky

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Nupur

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Posted: 8 years ago

#49

Res for Part 1: Off to read now!

Unres:

Did I told you how amazingly brilliant you are as writer? Yes or no, I'm saying again you are really a brilliant!

I just loved the first part!

Sanskaar is a nerd, labeled as geek! And Swara is the newcomer, a cool personality & became popular!

Perfect combo!

Sanskaar fell for Swara at first sight and Swara fell for him gradually & steadily! They became friends first & then their love bloomed!

Felt bad for Sanskaar as he lost both his parents at the tender age of 4 & brought up by AP-DP! DP is biased towards his own but thankfully AP loved him like her own!

Laksh had to show his true colors of being a foolish, impulsive, jealous jerk! Why I'm not surprised!?

Bt I loved how Swara gave a fitting reply to all by declaring Sanskaar as her boyfriend! And what I loved most is she didn't do that to shut people up but bcoz she liked him or we can say already loved him!

So Sanskaar tried to change himself a lil by having a new makeover for Swara even though she loved him just the way he is! Bt he didn't want her friends to tease her for choosing him!

Swara loved his looks bcoz she already noticed before how handsome & charming he is with the most beautiful pair of eye! Bt she got angry with girls for drooling over Sanskaar or more precisely her Handsome Hunk Sanskaar 😉

That jerk Laksh went ahead & tried to implant the seeds of insecurity & fear of losing Swara on Sanskaar's mind! And he tried to ignore Swara but ofcourse our Swara can't let that happen & confronted him!

Btw I loved how you mingled some of Sanskaar's dialogues here to express his fear, vulnerability & love!

Swara very effectively calmed him down by confessing her love for him! I loved that kiss & love making bcoz of their pure love!

Now I'm hell curious to know what happened between SwaSan? What made the shy geek Sanskaar Maheshwari to angry, vengeful Sanskaar Maheshwari? Why he wants to make her cry? Did Swara do something or someone else created some misunderstanding between them? Or maybe she was forced to hurt Sanskaar?

And Sanskaar referred her as Swara Sanskaar Maheshwari in prologue where Swara came back to Sanskaar after years?

Were they married before their separation?

I know I have to wait for you to reveal the past & thankfully you are going to post part 2 tomorrow!

So I'm looking forward for that!

Lucky this was a beautiful update!

Loads of love for you <3

P.S: Lucky you have, A FF - Faana, A SS - Fitoor, A TS -Fida & An OS - Carpendiem up your sleeve! So why don't you make an Index? That will give us hope to get some more stories from you :)

Edited by Nupur_5 - 8 years ago