Swara ,Sanskar and Laksh OS :Charon's Cosmology

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Hi all 😃😃
Miss Late leaf is here 😆 who is the most lazy and has 100 works in life 😆
is now here to post an OS and this OS was written by myself in order to represent our team Hazel Heartbeats in our forum's Creativity Contest hence I thought of posting it here and due to my team's motivation ,I made this ,I am really thankful to my teammates Alohomora,Abhisheking ,Minoch and Ranjini di who really motivated me to write this and guys as we wrote on SanLak as the pair in the real story ,I have made a new character Simran but in order to be more clear and relevant and in order to add more excitement to the OS ,I have changed Swara's name there and made it Sanskar ,Swara and Laksh OS ,I hope u will like it .

OS : CHARON'S COSMOLOGY
A Swara ,Sanskaar and Laksh OS

Genre : Tragedy .

Sarcasm or sacrifice? Which plays upon his heels to survive the note of a piano. Is he soothingly melodic enough to wing a harmony to the land of love if he is bound to be with it? Is he dangerous? Does his epicarp covering gorgeous calcium reflect that he is a humanbeing or his ventricular branches transports blue fluid instead of red fluid to grow fruits in his lively garden. He a boycott manhood can be juxtaposed with the Greek mythical ferry man Charon who transports piles of corpse from the world of living to the dead. Charon can be celebrated as a revolutionary so as him whoes intentions and aims claims to rejuvenate the world with an underlying theme that "Equality is a birthright that is to be surpassed more than anything which must condemn rich and poor diversity and must fail to appreciate superlative degrees in lifetime.Simic the poet makes Charon as the level player to figurise his idea of "Death as an equaliser" while this idea could be inco-operated to Laksh the younger brother of Sanskaar whom we tend to define from the beginning spot.


Born as a boy of superlative richness, life was ready to give away all the possible fortunes for this young chap of 25 years but as defined with a clonic observation to his character above, he never loves to adorn mighty and cosy attitudes but preaches simplicity as a base of life on the planet that bores each and every humanbeing. While an oxymoron to his attitudes and lifestyle was his blood born but is that a matter of fact to deviate perspectives and opinions coz his elder sibling Sanskaar was way opposite to him he was one of the most promising youngsters of the current scenario who showcased his figure in the minds of people by appearing through mass media and became a popular figure through television advertisements, he was charming and girls referred him as 'Chocolate baby' he was prejudiced by his way of getting popular and he admired cosy and rich fantasy which life provided him.


While this was closely examined by his neighbour girl in the next house, a girl born to praise simplicity in her life an elegant girl who loves to interact with others her name was Swara. Swara had a plan to become a successful journalist, she was so chirpy as well as so enthusiastic to attain her goal now she is in her twelfth standard but her determination to reach her goal drew her towards Sanskaar and she frequently visited his house as an outcome they became true friends. They started admiring one another for the multiple talents hidden in themselves and tried to explore each and every unique character and wonder they possess. While Laksh the man of simplicity was attracted to this girl .He just chuckled whenever she grinned,he was overflown by the interior beauty of her heart which was extremely gorgeous, incredible and remarkable to him than her exterior beauty.


"Did, I love her, nope never, I am hardly blown away by her innocence and simplicity, I am prejudiced and my blood swears that, I will build up friendship as a relationship with her and promote my nature" muttered laksh within himself.


One fine day Swara and Sanskaar was walking on the grass meadow in the garden and chit-chatting about things that happened in their childhood while Laksh accidtentally steps that side and he was thrown away by Swara's deeds, he recalls Swara as a Naturalist whose ambitions was to protect the environment, she is killing the roots and stamping the divinity of nature, I am hardly in a nutshell or, I couldn't hold on to this, I am sure my brother is responsible for creating these types of thoughts in her forebrain by blabbering things within himself he leaves the place with pain and agony. While Swara tells Sanskaar, "I am joyful today Sanskaar for being nostalgic by reliving and reviewing my childhood days with you by trespassing on the grass but no more will I do this cause Nature provides life to us". "Yes you are damn true Swara", added Sanskaar and they happily went back with a smile inside the house. Sanskaar who was known for his playboy and naughty deeds which he bores as an attire itself is now transforming into a human being whose love adores insignificant things of life and Swara his best friend seems to be the level player responsible for this change. But Laksh's mind thought that Sanskaar his brother is now a cupid between Swara and her cosy behaviour. This made the blood of the man who preaches simplicity freeze to an extent. It was the beginning a genesis for Laksh to develop vengence on his brother which were the ruthless seeds of crime.


Birthday time arrived Sanskaar was getting ready to adore his birthday cake in the cheeks of Swara and he did it with an ease while Laksh took the knife that was placed for cutting the cake, his violence was stimulated by the seeds of agony he had in him and in a jiff of a moment he went near him... There was silence, no one was staring at his presence and he immediately took the knife near Sanskaar's tummy but Swara slips and Laksh panics and Sanskaar holds her the brutal knife reaches the ground from his palm and Laksh leaves in agony and suffering.


As days passed by Sanskaar started admiring Swara and he was determined to maintain the friendship of the girl who adores simplicity which he hates from the bottom of his bosom, one early afternoon he went to Swara and poured out all his intentions and deep thoughts. Swara thought for a while and immediately whispered something into Sanskaar's ears and they both ran near the fountain and started chatting with one another. "Sanskaar, why are you adoring simple things nowadays, please forget those cause they can't provide you any pleasure, just look at me, I started admiring all cosy things and now I want to date ten boys at a time that much I loving these changes in my life but you have hanged entirely". Sanskaar added, "Yes ,Swara ,I adopted this behaviour from you my dear, I can't change it now". Laksh who was listening to this conversation from behind a bush immediately ran into his room and he shutted his door and he started grinning his subconscious mind which sees everything as equal has shapened his cosmology to kill his own brother who made the one whom he admired too as a spoiled brat like him. He rushed through all his tools in the store room found a knife which had sharpened edges and took it with him and went to his brother's room pierced the knife into his brother's body and went way everything was done in a flash of seconds, he was wearing a pair of gloves, Sanskaar screamed with pain and died at the spot. Laksh took a deep breath and laughed to the core, he was satisfied by his work of killing a person who was against his ideologies.


He came near the lantern that was lit near the terrace and heard laughing screams it was Swara's voice, he hid himself behind the stairs and closely listened to her voice, he was eavesdropping while Swara was performing a soliloquy "Finally, my plan worked out well, myself and Sanskaar changed roleplays for minutes and, I changed his opinions and intentions, I am heartily satisfied cause I have made my love to respect my thoughts, yes I love him, his willingness to change himself made me fall for him, I will propose to him early in the morning and speak out my heart". These words threw thousand arrows and thunder on Laksh's heart, the kerchief which he had injected with poison to kill Swara reached the ground and tears started falling like raindrops from his eyes, his heart broke into thousand pieces with pain. For the very first time he could hear the voice of a cotton being crushed, that sound was so delicate it was the sound of Sanskaar's innocent heartbeat ringing in his ears. "I have killed my own brother who was ready to change himself, now I haven't spoiled my brother's life but the life of a girl whom, I considered as a gem, I have murdered her love, her future life, What a sort of equality? I swear in the name of the Lord, I am holding on to? How come my intentions, take a twist by experiencing little heart fake situations" by reporting this to himself he went into a deep sleep ...Within a matter of few seconds he woke up,his heart urged to settle him in grief and extreme pain. He said to himself, "I preach and feel prejudiced of my simplicity and worship equality since my cosmology is as if, I will kill myself, Death is an equaliser it is an leveler hence it will make me equal to my brother who is dead just as a person who is out of oxygen and dead but not as a person of justice. His knife pierced his intestines and his blood fails to come out of his body due to his outrageous sin,he immediately recalls his brother's face and his dashing innocent smile, blood oozes out of his body and he dies on the spot. It is not Laksh who killed Sanskaar but his dynamic free frictionless Cosmology made him land in chaos and evolute catastrophe to an extreme level. Both the souls had love but they were not able to communicate and create a union, hope it happens in the next birth.

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CarpediemRose thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Updated atlast ,hope u people will give a mixed response as it is a tragedy ,will love to hear ur comments.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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I am not a great fan of tragic end
but this one stole my heart...really amazing
do try on some happy genre too dearie
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Superb os 👏
Basically i don't like tragedy one but i like this one 👏
Do write more
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: ishanita

I am not a great fan of tragic end
but this one stole my heart...really amazing
do try on some happy genre too dearie

Ohh ,lovely dear 😊
Thanks a lot for ur kind words
As ,this is made for the contest and we chose to do Tragedy ,I did this dear
And offcourse ,haooy ending stories are the best ,will write them😳😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: sujoyricky

Superb os 👏
Basically i don't like tragedy one but i like this one 👏
Do write more

Ohh thanks a lot dear😃😃
yup ,will write more 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wonderful OS Jenni. The writing style.. honestly threw me back to my school days where I studied Shakespeare..even this has a tragic ending, like the many I have read and gives out a good message.
I'm kind of in awe of the first paragraph.. I don't know why.. 😆

Is there anything you can't do? 😲 You sing, you make edits, you write poems and now this.. ⭐️
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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was different ..but expertly written...👍🏼
good job..👏


But plzzz never write anything like that about sansku... im obsessive for him...i cant bear it...🥺
Do write more.. happy ones

Talia
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Posted: 9 years ago
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jenni wonderful os yaar..i loved it do write more!!
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Very different take, Jenny. Liked your writing style. 🤗


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