SAWSAN FF: My Foe to My soul (PART:-16(B). PAGE:-141) - Page 45

Originally posted by: raaz19

Hiya kamila...

So sorry..see I did it gain forgot to post the comment...

Wow back to your last post...well done priya...what a star she was making sanskaar all jealous...Our little cupid...

Okay back to this chapter...just super...lol seriously could it get any more passionate than this...There swara wants to be with him and here sanskaar is wants to be with her...yet both are fighting there feelings...

I loved the whole name calling and sanskaar gently making her realise what she means to him and what she should or is feeling for him...

For me the highlight has to be the scene at the end..oh wow the near kiss...bechara just cannot catch a break. ...sanskaar like you said she can run but not hide...

God what a cliff hanger...already waiting to read more...

Loved the way you have written out the conflict of there emotions...fantastic chapter once again...

Must say wonder were this will lead us next... If you get what I mean ;)

Waiting for this next update already...

Razia

Hey... 🤗 Razia... Love you... For this cute and wonderful comment... Don't say sorry yaaryaar..

Our cupid priya.. Little mercy from her... She managed to trigger him.. Jealous..

Passionate... Ahh you feel it was passpassionate... Awww I'm flying now...

They need each others presence just want to cherish.. Get lost in tat...

Nick names... I really don't like calling our loved ones by using.. sweet names jaanu.. I like my kinda names.. No one will understand.. It's an advantage.. 😉 you liked I'm hapy...

He is Tring his best to make her feel for him... But its in her hand...

That kiss.. She didn't realise what she is doing... It's a out of control..
He.. Is out of world that his wife kissed him... Owww.. Mrs.Maheswari kissed him... 😆

Their conflicts... Of their emotion.. I want it to natural.. Elegant to read.. I hope.. I managed that.. Tears flowing from my eyes yaar..😭 you liked that..

Where it'll lead us ahh you the answeranswer yaar What you think is right... 😳 ..

Love you... Razia... Take care..

Originally posted by: raaz19

Okay and what can I say about chapter 9...well let just say I loved the song choice and the way it helped move the story...

I see that sanskaar is getting possessive about his wife...bechaare thought she was already leaving him...It felt good making him work hard to get him to apologise I loved the whole scene between the two were she gently in his style says sorry...its showed that there love story is written in the stars...

Musts say for me the best part of this story was in the end when swara learns about her husband strict angry act...loved the way his mum tells her that he was not always like this..I know he lost his father but what made him change just like that... so which makes me ask what skeleton he his hiding...you will have to let us in on this soon...okay lol?

Anyway I loved the childish banter between the two and hope soon they will share some romantic moments...something just like swara did at the end by kissing him...loved her tenderness towards him...

And sanskaar...bechaare will find it even harder to resits her after this...

Fabulously written again...

Razia :)

Chapter 9... Thank you for reading and typing a wonderful comment.. Razia... ⭐️

His always possessive yaar.. But his wife.. When she'll get possessive about himhim.. But soon.. 😊

That apology from Swara I want it to bein his style.. With slight differences.. I'm happy that it made good impact..

No yaar nothing.. He is not ready for further heart break... By getting close to someone showing and getting love affection. He is just afraid.. But he can't resist from his little rowdy...

Ah childish banter.. I love that.. It's better than adult.. Convo.. Eee. My smile..

That kiss made him to think that his wife has some feelings for him... At the corner of her heart.. Yep its hard for him to resist..


Love you...hugs for you..

waiting 4 ur next update dr...hope u will update it soon...

Originally posted by: MistiofMistz

Awesome

Thank you so much dear...

Originally posted by: hasinig89

Wonderfull...Dear u r such a beautiful writer ...i really luvd ur way of story unfolding in a simple & beautiful way...

i love both monologues of swara & sanskaar ...

Thanks for the Pm...Do continue soon...

Hasini... Thank you dear for this wonderful comment...
Oh Thanks for liking my writing way..

Monologue I want that to be natural... Easy way.. Which express our original feel.. Moi thanku...

Love you yaar...

Originally posted by: abi03

waiting 4 ur next update dr...hope u will update it soon...

Just now typing... Will update in a hour...

Originally posted by: ishanita

sis m blushing like hell after reading your comment.

Awww.. Save that blushing for youryour future hubby 😉

Along with everyone I am also waiting
For your update 😆
😛 kindly update as soon as possible

Hola... Girls and Boys.. Here is my next update... Here some clarification... Swara house is not in serial... It's a individual house with three storeys... Medil class.. Okay... Song is from upcoming movie SAALA KADOOS.. Hope you guys enjoy it...
BLOOPER:-- After reading your wonderful comments... I was overwhelmed.. So did a somersault.. I have done this before many times... This time I missed my timings.. So I landed on floor with a thud.. My daughter saw this.. I usually won't do these kinda stunt in front my children.. She is saying to me "Mamma your notochord (tail) has grown larger than me.. I was like.. :-\
THANKS GUYS FOR YOUR COOPERATION... LOVE YOU ALL FROM BOTTOM OF MY HEART... B-)



PART:-11

I opened my eyes.. To see her.. but she is not in bed.. I find her near.. dressing table... Magenta colour chridhar.. With dark green border work. dark green legging and duppata.. Wet hair... She is looking.. Just awesome... She is applying sindoor in her maang... It fell on her nose.. I placed my feet on the ground.. went near her.. "Good morning" she turned to see me... She smiling.. "Good morning" I wiped that sindoor on her nose.. she turned her face away from me.. Now she is wearing.. Mangalsuthra.. I want to tie that on her neck.. She kept her hair on one shoulder.. She weared mangalsuthra.. It's pleasant to watch my wife.. getting ready.. She is avoiding eye contact.. I know why... "Swara" she turned but she is not lifting her head.. "What I'll do yesterday you didn't share with me" she lift her head in shock.. "Chocolate... You are fully.. Without sharing with me.. So I take my share otherwise you would have eaten that too" she laughed at me... "Okay hereafter buy two chocolate" I nod my head... What a life yaar... Lucky to have her in my life.. She turned to leave.. she throwed her hair behind.. It hit on me and my face.. with droplet.. She moved forward.. But her hair caught in my T-shirt button.. She turned. I lifted my hands in air.. She came near me to release her hair from my button... I can smell her.. It seducing me.. My hands are shaking.. It want to hug her.. But I'm controlling it.. I don't want her to run away from me again...

My hair stuck in his button I'm trying to release it.. but its not at all coming.. My heart is pumping fast.. My breath are getting heavier... I just want to go away from here.. I don't want to lose my control.. I didn't love him.. I can't get close to him.. I cut my hair.. and ran away from there...

AFTER THREE DAYS:::

"Swara its getting late... are you ready I have important work".. She stepped out of dressing room... Royal blue short top..its upto her knees.. Blood red Patayala... Her hair was set free.. Long beautiful hearings.. Elegantly beautiful.. She is... "Did you informed your parents about our visit" I asked her.. "No.. Im plannig for a Surprise" she sounded more ecstatic...

He opened car door for me.. I smiled at him.. I took my seat.. He sat on his seat.. And started the engine... I switched on radio... and tuned it.. "Swara.. Switch off that.. I like silence while driving..." His hand came near radio... I hit his hand... "I hate silence... I love noise".. He is shaking his head and blinking his eyes... "Next song is Tune mari entriyan from Movie gunday" RJ announced.. "Ahh.. My favourite song" I increased volume.. "Reduce the volume Swara".. He said... "No way I love this song Mr.Maheswari" I hide that music system under my plam.. Song playing now... "What is this.. Is this your favourite song?.. It's a nuisance." His comment on my favourite song made me angry... "You're too old for me Mr.Maheswari"... It made him angry too.. He kicked car break instead of me... all of sudden.. I was about to hit my head on dashboard... but my safty seat belt saved me... "Are you trying to kill me" I fumed at him... "Am I looking old... for your remind I'm just 24.." He fumed back at me.. "It's not about your real age.. It's about you taste.. it's so boring.. See who'll wear this thick cloth(pulling his blazer) in hot countries like India... In summer.. Why don't you try some casual wear you'll look handsome in that" I finished my description about him.. Tong... Tong... Tong... Someone knocking window.. In my side.. He opened it... "Why don't you use your bedroom for romance... Why disturbing us.. You are creating a traffic jam" a man at the age of 40 disturbed us... He started the engine again... "You spoiled my song.. See it ended".. I triggered his anger more.. Opps.. He shhhed me.. by keeping his left forefinger on his mouth... "I hate you... Hate you..." I thought to myself... Our journey lasted in silent...

"She is a brat.. How can she say that I'm old... My tastes are worse.. No one ever made a comment on me like that.."... "But she.. Said that you'll look handsome in casual"... "She really mean that"... "Yes"... "Then I'm ready to Change myself for her".. It's always nice to have a heart and mind talk... I halted car in front of her house... I released my seat belt and got down from car... But she is struggling with her seat belt... I offered my help... But she "I can do it by myself.. I don't need your help" she is angry wife now.. I entered in the gate and turned to she her.. She is still sitting in car.. "You are not coming" I asked her she crossed her hand against her chest..."I'm asking you" she pursed her lips and closed her eyes.. She is glowering... How cute she is... "I'm stuck... It's not coming.. This seat belt.." She looks awesome cute when she is upset... I went near her... I bend down myself to get in.. the car.. I get close to her.. To release her belt...

Why his closeness affecting me... Attacking my heart... He kept his right hand on my seat.. His left hand is unlocking the belt.. Our chest are against each other but not touching... "What are you doing? if anyone saw us.. What they'll thin" I asked him... "What they'll think?" He asked me.. "They'll think that we don't have any manners to romance in public" He turned his head to face me.. Suddenly.. Now our face in centimetres distance... "What did you say.. Romance with you... Rather I would choose cast away life.. instead of romancing with you... Don't even think about that" He is such a horse radish... "Oh thank you so much... I thought I have to run away from this.. Now you choose cast away life.. So I don't have to run away".. I said by turning my face away from him... "Done" he said..


I'm ringing calling bell for past 15 minutes.. But no response.. "No one is there" he said... "Ashish is there... It's lock from inside" I said by looking through window glass.. "What he is doing... Oh he may dancing like you danced that day... Item no.." He is joking... "Ha... Ha.. Ha... Very funny.. Will you please forget about that item no" I showed my displeasure to him. I started to walk towards backyard... "Where are you going?" He is following me.. "To backyard" I said without stop... "Is there another way to get in" he asked me in blank expression.. "Yeah!!! My way" with that I removed my sandels and shawl.. I gave that shawl to him... "What are you doing?" He question me... "Wait and watch" with that I hold that steel water pipe.. Which is extending from water tank in terrace... "Voh... Voh... Voh... Have you lost your mind" he is disturbing me a lot.. I went in front of him.. "Yes.. On our wedding day.. Now will you please keep your mouth shut".. I said petulantly.. "Are you sure Swara you can do this... What if you broken your limbs... What if anything happens to you.. (Cupped her face) I can't see you hurt Swara" I'm blinking my eyes.. Melting in his touch... I hold his hand on my cheeks.. "Trust me.. I have done this before.. many times.. I can handle this" I assured him.. I walked towards that pipe.. "Swara".. I turned to see him. "Take care".. I burst into a laughter.. "Oh no Mr.Maheswari I'm not going for third world war... I'm just climbing up in this pipe" I shake my head to get fixed... I started my journey towards terrace...


I can't believe my eyes.. Being a man I never tried these kind of stunts in my life... Within a minute she reached to first floor.. I'm standing straight under her if she fall I'm here to catch her.. She is adjusting her top frequently... "Mr.Maheswari will you please move away from there" she is more aware of me... "What if you fell down... I'm here to catch you.." I really worried about her... "Please" she requested me so I moved from there.. Seeing her.. Only one name reminding me of her... TAMARIN (Pigmy monkey).. Perfect for her... Her leg slipped.. "Watch out Swara" I shouted... "You are not helping (rhythmically)" she is singing... Her size... antics... Climbing style... Everything same to same... I laughed.. One big hop she landed on a sunshade... "Come on its your turn" is she kidding me... "Me through this.. No way... I'll always choose save side.. I'll wait at main door for you".. She showed thumbs up.. One final jump she reached terrace.. I was about to leave.. "Mr.Maheswari please take my sandels with you.." First job from her... as a husband do I have a choice... No... I did what she said...
I'm waiting for her at door.. She opened the door.. "Where is your brother?" I asked her... She lead me to his room.. He is in sound sleep.. She is calling him.. No response.. Shaking him still. No response... "I'll call doctor" I said in a tension.. She waved her hand in no... "Hi Rita" she said.. But I can't see anyone... Other than us.. "Hi Rita" he jerked from his sleep.. adjusting his hair.. She grabbed his hair in her hands... "You can't hear calling bell.. You can't hear me... But you'll leave your sleep for a chik..." She is shaking his head... He released from her.. Run away from there.. She not ready to leave him she chased him.. They almost covered the whole house in their chasing... Finally he fell on floor.. She sat on him started her combat.. Slap,punch,pinch,scratch... She trailed every bit on him... "Hey guys you both finished your fight... I don't want to be a referee." I said... She leaved him.. "Thank you jiju" Ashish said by wiping his blood which is oozing out from his nose.. and mouth.. Is her knuckle are powerful weapon... I wonder.. She wipe blood in her knuckle... "Are you bleeding" I asked her.. "Yes.. His teeth made a mark" she said casually..

Me and Ashish sitting in living room... "Where is maa pap?" She asked him "To atten wedding" he answered her.. "I called them but didn't reach them" she took a seat next to me.. "They are in some village... They'll be here at 8pm now it's 10am".. He said.. "Okay prepare lunch" he nodded and went to kitchen for cooking... "He'll cook" I asked her... "Why? Do you want to taste my cooking" she asked me.. scornfully.. "Jiju don't dare yourself... Her cooking taste worse than a dog food" Ashish shout from kitchen.. "Shut your shit mouth.. Chipkali... He knows about that" she said... My phone rang I went inside to atten a call... After 1/2hour.. I came to living room... She is not there.. "Swara" I called her.. "Jiju.. Di went to meet her friends in play ground" Ashish informed me.. "Jiju.. Lunch is ready.. I assembled the on a table.. I have cricket practice at 12 I'll be home at 5pm.." So she will be alone.. I can't leave her alone... "Ashish drop me at play ground"I said..
Im seeing her... She is playing some ball game with kids around the age of 13 to 14.. She tied her hair using her shawl into a pony tail.. That shalw hanging from her head in front of her torso... Her face is littybit dusty... "What she is playing?" I asked him.. "Dodge ball jiju.. She is pro no one ever beat her in this" he praised his sister.. Seeing me she waved her hands. Came near me.. She asked me to join her in her play.. But I refused first.. Then I accept on one condition.. It should be just us... She nodded for that... "Okay Mrs.Maheswari.. Be ready for your defeat" I shouted... "Let me decided that" she challenges me..

He is playing with me... He aimed at me.. I escaped from that attack.. I throwed ball at him.. He escaped too. Not bad he is playing well... "Come on jiju.. Finish this.. Defeat her" its Ashish... Oh he is my brother... Traiter.. "You can't beat me" I shouted at him... "Let's see.." He kept that ball near his right side of his face.. Aiming at me.. I'm too focused on him.. Suddenly he winked at me... That's all BANG.. I'm on ground lieing like a dead toad.. My legs are stretched bend inward.. My hands are on ground eighter side of my body.. My eyes are covered with sand.. He helping me to sit..



BGM

He is speaking with me... I can't hear anything.. I'm wholly occupied by that wink..

DIL ye ladaku kyun ye lad gaya
(Heart is a fighter why they were fighting)

He is dusting my face... I'm blinking.. Tears are flowing from my eyes. I didn't bother about my pain.. I'm admiring him..

Kyun ye bhid gaya khud hi se aaj
(Why did it quarrel with itself)

Butterfly flying in my stomach... I'm smiling like a mad.. "Are you OK" I nodded my head...

Laakh roka Haan toka magar naa maane
(I was stopped it million time but it didn't listen to me)

He stand on his feet.. He forwarded his hand to me I grabbed it he pulled me towards him I landed on his chest.. I can't control my smile it oozing out from my mouth... "Shall we" I shake my head

Banke jhonka hawa ka ye udna chahe
(It wants to fly being in breeze)

"Ahhh" Suddenly I felt more pain in my eyes.. He is blowing in my eyes... I'm totally blown out.. His touch.. His breath.. I'm grinning at him...

Teri hi gali main mudna ye chahe
(I wants to turn towards your street)

I'm walking next to him.. Our shoulders are brushing.. I took a deep breath and closed my eyes... cherishing the moment.

Akdu jhagdalu naram ho gaya
(Stubborn rowdy become soft)

I tripped.. He caught me.. By holding my waist.. And made me to stand ony feet.. "My heel is tripping me.. shall I hold hand until we reach home"he nodded.. I hold his hand tightly... I'm all laughing...

DIL mein hua ghotala
(There is a corruption in my heart)

DIL mein hua ghotala
DIL mein hua ghotala haaya re...2

I'm smiling all the way.. Blinking my eyes.. Seeing him frequently.. I'm following his steps to have my future with him..

Teri nazar jaaye jidhar
(Where your sight falls)

Meri nazar rakhe uspe. Phera
(My eyes keep their guard there)

Kar doom main kya saazish.. Koi
(Should I conspire)

Dekha tu jidar dikha mera chehra
(Where you see you see my face)

Jahaan tu jaaye main kyu tere piche
(Why dobi follow you where you go)

Piche piche bhataki rahun
(Im always after you)

The water flowing on me.. I'm taking bath with my cloths on.. Remembering our meeting one by one.. Engagement, sangeet.. Item no.. Our first fight.. That duet.. His first kiss.. My first kiss.. I'm laughing.. aloud.. Dancing...like akid.. I'm blushing.. First time in my life.. It's... Nice...
I came to living room.. He is sitting.. On sofa.. I'm wearing a blacksmiths long skirt.. Blurted Shot slim half sleeve top.. I sit next to him on sofa.. He is busy with his Mobile.. My sautan.. I kept my left hand on my left cheek...I started drooling him.. Mesmerised in his anger.. He is shouting to his slave.. I don't know who it is.. I want him to throw his phone through window. So that he'll pay his attention on me.. He went near window to get proper signal... I can't take my eyes off from him.. I never felt this kinda feeling before but is soo good..

DIL main hua ghotala
DIL mein hua ghotala
DIL mein hua ghotala haaya re 2

I'm playing RINGA roses after 12 years.. I can't control my happiness.. I want to hug him but how.. I want to gain his attention how...

Maghroor tu,Maghroor mein
(You're arrogant, I'm arrogant)

Mash'hoor hai tera mera jhagda
(Conflict of mine and yours is famous)

Phir kya hua pighli kyun main
(What happened then why did I move)

Karhi diya tune jaadu tagda
(You made any strong magic)

Thanks Jo kal tak Haan dushman DIL ka
(You're an enemy yesterday)

Aaj kyun mujkho pyaar lage
(Why did he become dear today)

He went outside to meet his PA.. I'm jumping here and there.. I don't know what it was but I'm enjoying this.. I stand on a stool.. and dancing... for my own tune.. It didn't tolerate me like him.. it pulled my legs.. I fell on floor with a thud... He came running towards me hearing my cry... Seeing me he frowned at me.. I smiled at him.. He removed stool which is on my right ankle.. He touched my ankle.. "Is it hurting" he asked me.. I nody head.. He came close to me.. put my hand around his behind his neck.. Lifted me in a bridal style.. I hold his shirt.. Taking me to my room.. I'm all smiling... I thanked that stool.. I grabbed his attention towards me... He smiled at me... I died in that smile.. Awww how handsome he his.. I grinned at him... "You are not going to office" I asked him... "No" he said... "But you have important work right" o said.. "Nothing is important than you Swara" Im so touched by his words.. He made me sit on bed.. adjusted pillow behind me so that I can lean back.. He massaged my ankle.. "Are you feeling better now Tamarin"... "Hmmm... Tamarin... What Tamarin"... "It's you" ... "Me"... Someone pressed the calling bell... "I'll " with that he went to main door..

"What is happening to me"..I asked... "Love happening" my sub conscious said.. "May be love" I said...



DIL mein hua ghotala
DIL mein hua ghotala
DIL mein hua ghotala haaya re 4



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Originally posted by: whity.007

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