Redemption: A Swara/Sanskaar & Ragini Story [Pt10-Pg33]

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dundumol96

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Posted: 9 years ago

#21

Ragini dear just do matchmaking for swasan

and leave that jerk

we would find better one

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kaku17

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Posted: 9 years ago

#22

Hey this was awesome...I loved it...

Ragini's apprehension when lakshya turned out to be her husband was understandable and her wish that AP being the kind lady be her mil, not Suju who was giving her dirty glances...the current Ragini or rather the old Ragini would be definitely wary of the current lakshya...

Please do update soon ...waiting eagerly to see how the story unfolds

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piccola1

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Great concept, Ally (ok to call you that?) - liked the lateral thinking coming into this story.

While Ragini, as I see her today, is beyond redemption, the Ragini that you have picked up to redeem, is at the stage where we can hope for some light to enter her bedevilled state. I also liked that you have dwelt well on the trigger for Ragini's going wrong - Lakshya - careless, give a damn, impulsive and self indulgent, pampered and immature Lakshya😡. Glad she doesnt like him...she can feel he is dangerous to her peace of mind..Am happy to imagine Tejaswi in this mode...I feel the actor deserves a far more multi dimensional persona than the one sided evil view we are getting to see.

A Sanskaar who is clear about what he is not liking, and a Swara who worries about it, is a good change too !😃 Looking forward to that thread too..but I guess I will find Ragini far more interesting, going by where you're leading it to..

Can we have frequent updates, a new man for Ragini😃 and a Swara who falls for Sanskaar 😳far faster than we're seeing please?

Thanks for it !

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aashritha

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Posted: 9 years ago

#24

Thank you for the pm the update was nice liked the way you described ragini and SwaSan ... waiting for the next update

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Vianna

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Posted: 9 years ago

#25

Great update! Absolutely loved Ragini's reaction! 'not him, please not him, anyone but him' :D Completely awesome! Please update soon. :)

-V

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DarkPhoenix93

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Thanks for the awesome update! Loved the way you portrayed Ragini's confusion. I can't wait to read about how she redeems herself. Will SwaSan regain their old friendship anytime soon? Will Ragini help her sister?

Waiting for your next update and update soon, please.

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Ally

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Posted: 9 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: Sakura24
I read the first part early but could not find time to comment, first accept my apology for that.
I'm soo in love with this concept of yours, the utterly innocent Ragini back in her self created storm. It is a marvelous approach and a very soothing one at that. It would be interesting to see her confront her own evil self in this epic world of misunderstandings...no one will treat her the way she remember right?

I agree that the old Ragini might find the new Lakshya intimidating, her concern for SwaSan is justified as well. This is a awesome piece of writing, I do hope you'll keep it up.

Thank you so much for dropping by and giving me your feedback Sakura. I myself am terrible at commenting on things that I read so I never fault others for it.

That which you mentioned is the actual plan of this story, for Ragini to see herself and the world around her from a different lens. Most especially Lakshya. He is a bad person and I want her to see without the idea of being in 'love' with him.

Than you so much for your sweet words!

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Ally

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Posted: 9 years ago

#28

Originally posted by: princess_tara
it was fabulous
love ur writing style

Thank you friend for your compliment :)

I am glad to see you reading and enjoying.

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Ally

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Posted: 9 years ago

#29

Originally posted by: Marooshmalik
nice update
continue soon

Thank you :)

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Ally

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Posted: 9 years ago

#30

Originally posted by: maaneetfan
Wow its going perfectly. ..makes the memory loss sound more credible than in the show. .. i wonder wht comes next...do update soon

Thank you! That is exactly what I am trying to go for.

A big question for me with Ragini's 'memory loss' is that she is not concerned that there is some time missing from her life. She knows that the next day is Karwa chauth and she is okay with it, and everyone else is okay with that?

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