Drabble: Ghar Aaj More Aaye Piharva

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Now, this is an OS I wanted to write since long. I do not know whether or not you will like it, but I'll be glad if anyone gives it a try.
This is written from the real Seetaji's POV, but has no connections with either Valmiki's or Star Plus' Ramayan.
Thanks to Meghadi who hastened the execution of this idea with her request for a romantic SiRa piece. I hope to be able to fulfill your expectations, Meghadi!
P.S. I know I kept Lakshman out of this. That was intentional.

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The warm light of dawn creams through the open window of the quaint cottage by the waters of Godavari. Chilly winds whizz past the trees encircling the clearing.

I retreat to my little garden in the backyard. The trees sans their usual gleaming pride still sway their dry branches to welcome my presence.

It is a strange day. A strange ecstasy has taken control of the swing of my heart,

Finding my steps over the gentle green
I have entered this wild;
The heart's lost iwis to the fragrant sheen,
Melt into the melody mild.


The greenery gives way to frost.

The birds are silent as if they watch the sun touch the trembling dewdrops. The milky clouds float past my horizon. The emerald leaves of the distant, russet woods are rimed with snow.


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He has left for the day's work leaving me just a trail of a smile to seek ere good twilight. Oh when shall I lay my eyes once more on his tawny frame emerging from the woodland while the wind may send shivers across the viridian of the freezing lake?

The silence of my home cries out for peace,
Is it not time for him?
Has he ventured too far today, far enough to miss
The daylight that grows now dim?


The sun settles in his cot as his smile does fade. He submits to peaceful slumber stealing mine in his.

Oh the soft flakes of silky frost
That adorn His curls;
Indeed they shall be not lost
In the flood that unfurls.


O love, return. Return to the sweet haven where thy wife waits for thee.


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Posted, finally.

Thank you, any reader who reads this before I send out PMs.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Oh!!This is so poetically beautiful!!
And the last line stole my heart.Keep it up šŸ‘šŸ¼
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Beautiful, I have no words except that. It's amazing. I especially loved the last linešŸ‘
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Posted: 9 years ago
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very nice


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Amazing Story.
Loved it so much.
Tfd pm.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Lovely drabble Proteeti!! šŸ‘šŸ¼

Thanks for the pm!! šŸ¤—
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Posted: 9 years ago
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What a beautiful excerpt, Pro! The way you write about their love is just so magical and divine, can't wait to read more!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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The birds are silent as if they watch the sun touch the trembling dewdrops. The milky clouds float past my horizon. The emerald leaves of the distant, russet woods are rimed with snow.---
Radhika , excellent Drabble ! Highly poetic , beautifully described the tender feelings of a newly wedded wife's longings for her loved one !
Nature at it's expressive best in all your poetic assertions , whether it is in devotional , or in romantic story , most of your highly imaginative thoughts expressed in figurative in all your writings .
Thanks a lot for this wonderful piece of writing .😊
Edited by Snehamadhuri - 9 years ago
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Res
Unress soonšŸ˜‰
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