Sabherwal Series: Shot #5 updated Pg24 (27/10) - Page 2

lol even i wanted her to be jealous, she was somewhat in the initial episodes and then after goa track where everything went downhill she was reduced to a bystander

Very well written dear will wait to read more stuff from you

Akshu!🤗

Read it avidly. N its awesome.

Shagun was so vividly described here. could visualise her on the treadmill!😆

Too many loopholes had been left in her sketch on the show. She deserved a harsher showdown for her misbehaviours n plotting.

Devi n Shagz convo...superb!👏

Loved it! ❤️

Waiting for Alok's character now. He is someone worth getting an insight of his devillish mind.

N of course, Yash. The most complex character in the Sabherwal khandaan.

Bring it on.

Originally posted by: AK_2010

Shagun Kapoor aka Shagun "Wannabe-Sabherwal" Kapoor

No amount of workout could dull the pangs of humiliation she felt today.

By the time she had marched out of the conference room, the entire college knew about her conspiracies and was gossiping about her unsuccessful intentions. All her hard work went down the drain.

Now, not only has she lost her scholarship at Cambridge, but also her only job and reputation. Getting fired from SIAC is a big deal, no one would hire her after this dismissal.

Why?

Why did Shaurya have to choose that down-market, classless, Anokhi Bhalla over someone like me?

I could have given you everything, Shaurya! I would have taken care of you, this family, been a dutiful bahu and a pliant patni. But no! You chose someone like Anokhi Bhalla even after I promised to be the life partner you always wanted for yourself!

Beneath the covers of a conniving woman lay an old flame. A woman who had once deeply cared and loved him.

Shagun could not fathom how or why had Shaurya changed so drastically?

How?

How can he change for Anokhi and support her ambitions when he didn’t bat an eye before asking her to choose between career and relationship!

It was so unfair!

How can Anokhi effortlessly have his love, his support and his companionship when she did not get even a fraction of it, even for a moment during their two years of relationship? Shaurya and Anokhi didn’t even date before their marriage!

And if this was love, then what did they share for over two years? Where was this insanity during those years? Where was this adamancy when she needed it?

Love!

He is losing his family. The great Sabherwal family that has always been his sole priority. Yet, he does not think twice before walking out on them for his so-called love.

Shaurya says he loves Anokhi. Well, he has his love today. But at what cost?

“Look, what that girl has reduced you to! Had you chosen me, you would have lived peacefully with your family! All because of you, Anokhi!” She raged and ran faster on the treadmill.

“You really have no shame, do you?” A calm voice broke her sprint.

When Shagun gave her a questioning look, she continued further, “Shaurya has uncovered your ploy, the committee has fired you and by now, the whole city must be aware of your schemes, yet, here you are! Shamelessly loitering in our home…” Devi Sabherwal walked inside gracefully, “Tej and Shaurya will be home soon. I thought you would have left before one of them decides to kick you out.”

“So, are you here to make it easy for them, Badi M-”

“You may call me Mrs. Sabherwal, Shagun.” Devi smiled gently, but Shagun could feel the animosity behind that soft tone.

“You are throwing me to the wolves? After everything we have done!”

“We? There was no ‘we’ here, Shagun. All this mess is our own to clean. You became too hasty to get rid of that girl. It was too cheap for your own standards to manipulate the evidence to frame the daughter-in-law of the Sabherwal family.”

“Oh, now that middle-class, down market girl is your daughter-in-law?” Shagun scoffed.

“She is. I might hate her guts, but she is married to Shaurya. She is a Sabherwal now. And as long as she holds that surname, you must not forget that attacking a Sabherwal won’t end well for you.”

“Unbelievable. Are you the same woman who tried to manipulate me into coming back into Shaurya’s life?”

“Don’t fool yourself, Shagun. There is no love lost between us, I still don't care about Anokhi. This is about a Sabherwal. You tried to slander the daughter-in-law of this family!! And we Sabherwals won’t take it lightly! That girl is gone, good riddance! And now, it is your turn. A fair warning, if you don’t leave on your own accord, Shaurya will gladly ask the security to escort you out the door... ” Devi Sabherwal taunted gleefully.

“What about your promise?” Shagun reminded her hastily.

Devi stopped midway and gave her a mocking smile, “You must be really desperate, if you think that Shaurya would let you anywhere close to himself after knowing the kind of schemes you made against his ‘beloved’ Anokhi...” She slithered her way out of the room.

Shagun angrily tossed the towel and paced the floor.

Her plan had failed. Now, there was no way out of the ditch she had fallen into. And now she had to face the consequences of her failure.

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A/N: Okay, so, this is the first OS of the series. Shagun chapter was incomplete and I kinda didn't wanna spoil it with my own ideas. I was however disappointed with Shagun's lack of jealousy, after all, she did once love Shaurya. Or at least cared.

I really expect you guys to give feed back! It is very encouraging to us writers. Now, even more because the show is not there anymore. Silent reading NOT ALLOWED, okay? Please hit the like button and spare a few seconds to comment for us on our stories...

P.S. The more comments I get, the faster I update.

Coming up next: Bebo-Kitty Sabherwal 😎

So it starts after the revelation..

This is good.. Shagun as a scheming and jealous ex is out in the open with her POV.. Wahan sirf wo do line bolke nikal gayi..

Devgun confrontation was on point..

It's wonderful Akshu and I could imagine that famous work-out of Shagun.. 😂😂

Originally posted by: AK_2010

Shagun Kapoor aka Shagun "Wannabe-

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Coming up next: Bebo-Kitty Sabherwal 😎

So very well written as always 👏

Your work truly depicts what a powerful character Shagun was in the beginning how it was changed into a negative one towards the end of serial.

You covered all of the thoughts and her tries to bring herself to peace. Beautifully explained chain of emotions one by one that rushed through Shagun where she had to face the burnt of her deeds.

Another awesome work Akshu 👏

Can't wait for your next piece of writting

Originally posted by: jhankarbeats87

Shagun was one of the most well etched characters initially. Bt later she was reduced to a mere pupet int he hands of Devi. The ph had the option to use her for their story, bt she was just a bystander.

U'r story perfectly etched her turmoil n how she has been actually played by Devi. She actually cared for Shaurya to come back leaving her scholarship, but one wrong move n she lost her career n even the friendship she had with Shaurya.

Like in case of Shaurya and Shagun... Had Shaurya entertained her like the rest of the ITV MLs, I am sure there would have been more drama for us to break our head on. I think whatever Shagun did was well within realistic boundaries...!

Thank you so much! ❤️

This entire series will have other characters in limelight with ShaKhi bit from their POV, so I was worried about how you guys would respond to it... But your comment is the first and knowing that you liked it is very encouraging!

Originally posted by: mallukumari

Watching early episodes, I realize how much more Shagun could have been. She had so much potential to create some real rifts instead of the incompetent planning we saw from her.

Beautifully written, as always. Can't wait for the twins chapter!!

(copy-pasting from the previous reply) I think that is because we are looking at her from ITV perspective. A vamp-ish ex is supposed to be a conniving b*tch who make the hero-heroine suffer... But in real, ex's are jealous being who can only do so much to create trouble when it is a one sided flame.

Thank you for reading and commenting, Anju. Next chapter coming soon! 😃

Originally posted by: sushfiza

Would love to read more

Thank u

Please watch the space! Next shot in the series coming soon!! (Tonight or tomorrow morning!)

Thank you so much for reading! ❤️

Originally posted by: GHKPM

This is truly a good idea...closing the loops...maybe you can even do another one later by inserting your own ideas...i am game to see what you have imagined for us👍😊🌹

Shagun 1.0 had so much more potential, wish she had been much better utilised...

Would love a tag as well when you update, thnx🌹

Madam, aapne abhi tak apna subh naam nahi bataya!! Nahi batana toh bol do... Hum hi apko koi nickname de denge... After all, I cant call you GHKPM, right? 😆

I actually try my best to stick to OG character sketch and story to write my OSs... Coz I know if I start writing as per my own ideas, I might end up writing an OTT, dramatic and constipating story 🤣 But I will see what I can do to finish off Shagun's chapter!

Thank you so much for your honest review! I will look forward to more as I update ahead... ❤️

Originally posted by: ShaKhi1820

Love it 💜

This might have happened with Apshagun 😁

Apshagun's face was worth watching when she got fired by Shaan out of all people!! 😆