HaYa FF Mere humsafar Part 3 updated - Page 2

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nice one...
Harman is indeed shakti of somya...
Omg somu ko chot lagi jhumar se...harman will take good care of her
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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was so good...
Wish show mein bhi aesa hi dikha de...
HaYa scenes ke liye tadap rahe h hum..
Waiting for the next update
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Hybrid_Freak

Nice one...
Harman is indeed shakti of somya...
Omg somu ko chot lagi jhumar se...harman will take good care of her

Thank u.. Yes he is her biggest strength and will always help her from evil things. He surely will :-)
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: sparklingeyes

It was so good...

Wish show mein bhi aesa hi dikha de...
HaYa scenes ke liye tadap rahe h hum..
Waiting for the next update

Thank u.. I qish that too :-] The couple is soo adorable I wish they focus on HaYa more
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Posted: 9 years ago
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I have read both parts and loved them both. You have a wonderful vision 👏. Your writing style is crisp and flowing. I loved HaYa's bonding also enjoyed Preeto in a wonderful saas mode. One thing I noticed though is that you tend to fluctuate between your past and present tenses which seems jarring at times. Can't wait to read more... 👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: soul76

I have read both parts and loved them both. You have a wonderful vision👏. Your writing style is crisp and flowing. I loved HaYa's bonding also enjoyed Preeto in a wonderful saas mode. One thing I noticed though is that you tend to fluctuate between your past and present tenses which seems jarring at times. Can't wait to read more...👏

Thank u so much. I am working on my english grammar. Hopefully it will improve too. Thanks for telling that. Will update the next part soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hello people.. Mai phir se aa gayi tum logo ko pareshaan karne :-p Here is the 3rd part of my ff.

Part 3

Harman rushed to his room with Soumya and gently placed her on the bed. He opened the cupboard while she put her bleeding leg down on the floor. Harman saw this & came to her side immediately.

Harman - Kya kar rahi ho Gulabo? ( What are you doing Gulabo?)

Soumya - Wo.. Khhon nikal raha hai. Bedsheets kharab ho jayegi. (It is bleeding. The bedsheets will get stained)

Harman sat quietly on the bed, lifted her leg again and placed it in his lap this time while she winced a little.

Harman - Ajib ho yaar Gulabo.. Pati seva karne ki koshish kar raha hai aur tumhe bedsheets ki padi hai. (You are weird Gulabo. Here your husband is trying to help & you are thinking about bedsheets)

He started tending her wound gently, trying not to hurt her more. But her welled up eyes were telling him that she was in pain. He blew some air on the wounds to soothe it a little. He was feeling worse for not saving her on time. He was a second late and he did not wanted to think what would have happened if he would have not been there. He cleaned the wounds and applied ointments. He felt like crying seeing the expression on her face. He was about to speak something when the dr came, it was the same dr who came on their wedding day.

Dr - Hello, ye chot kaise lagi aapko? ( How did this happen?)

Before Soumya could speak Harman started,

Harman - Ghar me function chal raha tha aur jhumar gir gaya. Usi se lag gaya.

Dr - Koi baat nahi, dawai to laga di hai aapne, thode dino me thik ho jayega. Aap bas ye medicines khao aur aaram karo aur iss pair pe jyaada stress mat dijiye.. Ok? (Its ok. He have already applied the ointments, the wounds will heal in some days but do not stress on that leg.. Ok?

Soumya looked at Harman while he nodded.

Dr - Mr. Harman aap ek min ke liye bahar aayiye (Mr. Harman can you come out for a minute?)

Harman took a glance at Soumya and followed the dr outside.

Harman - Ji dr (Yes dr)

Dr - Mr Harman, aap ke shaadi ke din aapki wife ki tabiyat thik nahi thi. Hame aisa laga tha ki food poisoning hai par aisa nahi hai. Unke kuchh tests karwayete hamne jiske reports kehte hai ki unhe jeher diya gaya tha. (Mr. Harman, your wife was not well on your wedding and we all thought its food poisoning. But its not the case, we ran some tests and it clearly states that your wife was poisined)

Harman could not believe what he just heard. He stood their with an shocked expression not able to speak anything further. Soumya's image flashed in front of eyes.

Dr - Ye aapko batana jaruri tha. Take care. Agar koi pblm hoti hai to call karna. (It was important. Call me if you have any problem. Take care)

Harman quickly turned and dashed inside their room. There his wife sat leaning against the headboard of the bed with her eyes closed. He sat on a chair beside her side of the bed and took her hand in his. She stirred a little but soon settled down again. He held her hand tightly and vowed that he will not let anyone hurt her till he is alive and by means anyone not even her family. He thought for a while about the recent incidents just when someone knocked on the door.

Harman - Kaun hai? (Who's that?)

Person - Bhaiyya, main magan. (He was one of the servants of their house - Its me magan)

Harman - Aa jao (Come in)

Magan entered the room only to witness Harman holding Soumya's hand protectively. He looked down while Harman noticed why he was looking down but he did not wanted to leave his wife's hand.

Harman - Bolo.. Kya baat hai? (What's the matter?)

Magan - Bhaiyya, wo jhumar pe jo rassi thi naa wo jali hui thi.

Harman - Aise kaise jal gayi? Tum logo ne check nahi kiya tha? Dhyaan kahan hota hai tum logon ka? Pata hai aaj kya ho jata iss ki vajah se.. Soumya ko kuchh ho jata to? Tumse baad me baat karunga me. Abhi ke liye yahan se jao tum (How did that happen? Didn't u guys check? Do u even have any idea what could have happened? What of anything happens to Soumya? I'll talk to u later. Leave for now)

Magan tried to speak but Harman was not in a mood to listen. He was furious. The small mistake could have taken his life away from him. Magan started to leave but he stopped and told Harman, "Bhaiyya aaj bhabhi ji ke pitaji bhi aaye the kya yahan? Maine unhe bahar jate hue dekha tha" With that the guy left the room leaving an already fuming Harman in rage now... tbc


Guys, do let me know how it is. As it is my first ff and very close to my heart.




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Posted: 9 years ago
#18
Nice part...
I m liking the way u r framing the story
Waiting for the next update
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: sparklingeyes

Nice part...

I m liking the way u r framing the story
Waiting for the next update

Thank u so much. Will update the next part soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
#20
very well written thanks for the update continue next part soon

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