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Posted: 12 years ago
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Tum aaye the

Meri awaz tumhare kaanon tak pahunchi thi

Mere dil ka dard mehsoos hua tha tumhain

Mere maan samman, garima ki raksha ke liye

Tum aaye the


Tum aaye the

Meri maang ko sindoor se sajane

Mujhe apni ardhangini banane

Hamare pyaar pe vivah ki mohar lagane

tum aaye the


Kyon der ki aane main tumne

Kyon na rok paye tum mera janaaza

Kyon raakh ho jaane diya pyaar hamara

Kyon na ban paye tum mera sahara


Kayee shikayatain hain tumse

Par ab kahoon bhi toh kis haq se

Shikva to apnon se kiya jaata hai

Tum aaye ho toh ban ke koi gair se


Kya bewafa maan ke muh mod loon tumse?

Ya ummeed the daman tham ke rakhoon?

Yaadon ki rakh ko bikhar jaane doon?

Ya, dhadakte ehsaas ko panapne doon ?


Ghut ghut ke marne to zindagi maan loon

Ya pyaar ki khatir, hawaon ka rukh mod doon

Kal sochoongi, poochongi apne hi dil se

Aaj itna hi sukoon kafi hai

Ki tum aye the!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Beautiful 🤗 I love it. Yes, definitely this must be going on Kumud's mind
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: mon.sayan17.com

Wow...

so beautifully written...!!


Thank you dear, Kumud's feeling at this time are so complex, just wanted to share that
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Samsangeetha

Beautiful 🤗 I love it. Yes, definitely this must be going on Kumud's mind


Thank you, she must be so torn apart right now, bechari Kumud
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Wow Arshi another beautiful poem from you.

It describes Kumud's state of mind so well
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Shramya

Wow Arshi another beautiful poem from you.


It describes Kumud's state of mind so well


Thanks dear, seeing you after a long time
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Arshi... Stupendous! 👏 Let me immerse myself into this... At least ten re-reads should do the trick 😳

My personal favorite, how eloquently you've stated something so incomprehensible:

Kyon der ki aane main tumne

Kyon na rok paye tum mera janaaza

Kyon raakh ho jaane diya pyaar hamara

Kyon na ban paye tum mera sahara


Kayee shikayatain hain tumse

Par ab kahoon bhi toh kis haq se

Shikva to apnon se kiya jaata hai

Tum aaye ho toh ban ke koi gair se


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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: IdiotViewer

Arshi... Stupendous! 👏 Let me immerse myself into this... At least ten re-reads should do the trick 😳


My personal favorite, how eloquently you've stated something so incomprehensible:

Kyon der ki aane main tumne

Kyon na rok paye tum mera janaaza

Kyon raakh ho jaane diya pyaar hamara

Kyon na ban paye tum mera sahara


Kayee shikayatain hain tumse

Par ab kahoon bhi toh kis haq se

Shikva to apnon se kiya jaata hai

Tum aaye ho toh ban ke koi gair se



Thank you dear, and I am glad that you enjoyed it, now that I know Hindi is a challenge for you appreciate it even more, but somehow writing in English is a little difficult for me, it is a language of "official communication" for me!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: arshicritic


Thank you dear, and I am glad that you enjoyed it, now that I know Hindi is a challenge for you appreciate it even more, but somehow writing in English is a little difficult for me, it is a language of "official communication" for me!


Hindi, also, I feel is a more evocative language... And apt for the kinds of thought you want to convey. So please don't switch, ever! I enjoy challenges, when the end product is worth it, and your words, without fail, always are.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Arshi aren't u Kumud herself?? Kumud is a a poem freak also and u seem to know her n her feelings so well.
I need to confess something. I have a big problem to read Hindi n I concentrate so much that I end up not understanding wat I read 😳
But I took my time, I read each paragraph n buddy u r amazingly very good in portraying emotions in such poetic style.
Poor Kumud. Destiny has played a big trick to her!! 😉

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