SanDhir OS: Stuck in The Moment

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Author's Note: Hey, guys! I know I'm supposed to work on "Memphis" and "LikeKnifes" but I just couldn't help myself from writing this "bakwaas"... okay, here's a secret, I saw this yesterday night in my dreams. I don't know why I get all my ideas in my dreams, lol 😛

Anyways, happy reading!

Hope you like it..

Waiting for your reviews !! 😳

Stuck In The Moment

-----x-----

I nestled my nose into his neck. I was in his arms, the place I had always belonged to. It was quiet, like it is before storms. The sky was filled with grey curtains, threatening to pour their tears on us. It couldn't have been more beautiful. I tighten my grip on his waist as I smiled on the perfection of the moment, my eyes closed.

We were in the middle of the ground of our college, F.I.T.E. I smiled as I remembered how we ended up in this position.

-----x-----

"Sanyukta!" came a shout. I didn't need to turn to see whose the voice was. Still, I stopped walking and looked towards the voice. I was here for my usual evening walk. I saw him running, towards me.

"Yes, Randhir?" I smiled, sarcastically. He came and stood in front of me. The look on his face washed my smile away. I was curious and worried now.

He was wearing a white shirt on his everyday, normal jeans. His hair was messed up and his forehead had sweat beats. But what worried me was the redness in his eyes. Had he been crying?

"Randhir?" I asked, worried.

"You are leaving" it felt like a statement rather than a question. I gazed into his ravishing, chocolate brown eyes one last time before starting to walk, again. He followed.

I stopped and sighed. "What?"

"You are leaving" he repeated. I nodded.

"Yes, I am" I said, angrily. Wasn't he the lone reason for this, for fixing up my marriage with that chomu, for breaking my dreams, for everything? What did he want now? Hasn't he done enough damage?

"Don't leave" he whispered. I shook my head, in disbelief. "Please, don't leave me"

"One can only leave the things that belong to them, Mr. Shekhawat" I replied. He cringed at my response, like my words were acid that I'd splashed on his face.

I started to walk again but he held my wrist and pulled me towards him, making me clash onto his muscled chest. I didn't struggle to free myself; I just looked angrily into his eyes.

"Please, you are the only one I have" he said as a tear fell from his eyes.

I don't know what happened to me. His tear, his pain was unbearable to me. I wiped the tear away with my thumb and cupped his face in my right hand.

"You ruined everything" I stated as I felt wetness around my eyes, too.

"I ruined everything" he agreed, nodding.

He engulfed me in his arms, all of a sudden. He hugged me as if he was afraid we had only so much time left to us. His hug frightened me; still it didn't fail to make me feel like the luckiest and happiest person alive.

-----x-----

I felt a drop on my cheek. Maybe, it had started raining after all. But, if that was the case, why did the raindrop feel so warm? I opened my eyes to invest about the source of the wetness. I saw his eyes, open, staring into infinity. Another tear oozed out from one and fell on my forehead. I broke the hug.

"Don't go" he pleaded, finally, looking at me.

I ignored his demand as I answered.

"Always remember, we are stuck in this moment just because of you and your ego" I said, fresh tears fell from my eyes, as I left him all alone there.

-----x-----

See like Adam & Eve
Tragedy was a destiny
Like Sunny & Cher
I don't care
I got you baby

See we both
Fighting every inch of our fibers
Cuz ain't no way it's gonna end right but
We are both too foolish to stop

Now you don't wanna let go
And I don't wanna let you know
That there might be something real between us two
Who knew
And we don't wanna fall but
We're tripping in our hearts
And it's reckless and clumsy

And I know you can't love me



Loads of Love

Kriti ❤️

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Res
UNRES..
Yeah..!!! Yippee.. Me first..!!
Aww.. Such a sweet os..!!
So beautifully written Kriti..!!
Loved it Yaar..
Awesome awesome awesome...
" PLS DON'T LEAVE ME.." aww.. Mar dala...!!
Keep dreaming and write more..
Love
Shalini
Edited by shalini_shakti - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Res!!
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Bwahaha!! I so love pestering you!
Oh My My Partner!! I damn Envy You!! I mean I am pathetic with brief works and OS is something which i can not even imagine me writing! But the way you have sewn the myriad of emotions with such few words!! Take a bow!!
Well there is just one little Syaaapa girl!! I didn't visualize SanDhir during my read!! Though Randhir would peep in frequently,It was nari all the way!! Couldn't help it!! I had this big smile while reading and I want the same to happen in real life!! Just a few days and so much of action!!
Now lets come to the point!! You were so good with especially the 'Sweat Beads'
Reading this was a bliss!! Did I tell you that I read this twice?!! Proud I am!!
Btw in the A/N note--seriously man!! Write like knifes nahi toh pitegi! xP
You know I am a bigtime nautanki, don't you!! NaRi for life and beyonD!!
I want you to mentor me for OS writing!!
Now lets unKatti!!
Love
Iptisha🤗
Edited by BeyondWords - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Res
Un res--
Kriti! That was too gud 😭

Awesome os 👍🏼

Strting mein in blue the first para,, beautifully described *too gud*. 😊

Randhir's red eyes n clouds in sky.. Dese two thngs!
Imagine krte hi wo scene aise eyes k samne 😔
Randhir cryin :(

Its a driftin types of scene beautifully described !

N the lines at the end in bluish green colour
Those are just awesome !
If nt mistaken u did use dem in memphis also 😊

Btw agar aisa h toh
Roj sapne dekha kr xD
Hume roz aise os milenge *just imagine* 😆

I knw bolne ki jarurat nai lekin fir b
Do write more 👍🏼


Edited by Awesome-blossom - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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beautifulll u really left me speech less... kriti this was an excellent portary of their strong emotionsss... really... luvedd it... :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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I received 3 PMs nd my heart started walloping"oh god koi OS ka link ho" I checked it and wohooo it was an OS dat too written by you <3
Kritiii!!!!!!! Toh yeh raaz hai itne Dhasuuu ideas ka-----DREAMS?? Really??
In that case please get some sleep right now and update "Memphis" and "like knives" tomorrow morning itself nd YESSS I'm serious...jk...Noh noh sweetie take your time 'cause I want the best of you nd too lambaaa wala (remember?) Nd morevover you must be swotting for JEE...Hahaha!! xD
Exams, exams nd more of them...kabhi peecha nahi chhodte..
Ohk now enough of my blathers!!!
Coming to your OS-- Needless to say that you are a splendid writer!!
The way you depict and write about EMOTIONS is so bewitching!!! But one thing that caught my attention the most is how innovatively you've written this OS.
One thing I wud like to mention is when I read the fifth last line "Don't go, he pleaded, finally, looking at me." I was like yeah now comes the all time fav. lovey dovey happy ending where Sanyu will requite. But THUD you dropped the bomb at last "Always remember, WE are stuck in this moment just
because of you and your ego"...totally unexpected unlike all normal lovey - dovey OS(s) yet very REALISTIC. This is the thing I loved the most and it shows how mature you are as a writer.<3<3
Ohk here I'm done with my reviewing. Idk y I always end up writing a complete Novel sized comment. So xcuse the length.
In nut shell...I LOVE IT AND ITS ONE OF MY FAV. OS
Love ya,
Samaira
Edited by iraa_parsh - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: shalini_shakti

Res
UNRES..
Yeah..!!! Yippee.. Me first..!!
Aww.. Such a sweet os..!!
So beautifully written Kriti..!!
Loved it Yaar..
Awesome awesome awesome...
" PLS DON'T LEAVE ME.." aww.. Mar dala...!!
Keep dreaming and write more..
Love
Shalini



Thank you So Much, Shalini!!

Means a lot!!

Nd yeah.. I wish I dream more, too xD
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: priiy

WOW...IT WAS TOO GUD...



Thank you!! :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Awesome-blossom

Res
Un res--
Kriti! That was too gud 😭

Awesome os 👍🏼

Strting mein in blue the first para,, beautifully described *too gud*. 😊

Randhir's red eyes n clouds in sky.. Dese two thngs!
Imagine krte hi wo scene aise eyes k samne 😔
Randhir cryin :(

Its a driftin types of scene beautifully described !

N the lines at the end in bluish green colour
Those are just awesome !
If nt mistaken u did use dem in memphis also 😊

Btw agar aisa h toh
Roj sapne dekha kr xD
Hume roz aise os milenge *just imagine* 😆

I knw bolne ki jarurat nai lekin fir b
Do write more 👍🏼




Thank you so much chotu!!

Nd yeah, I use those lines a lot !!

They are lyrics from the song "Stuck in the moment" - Justin Bieber

Btw I wish I keep dreaming too haha!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Gunseerat

beautifulll u really left me speech less... kriti this was an excellent portary of their strong emotionsss... really... luvedd it... :)



Thank you so much di!! I'm glad you loved it.. Means a lot, seriously!! :*

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