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Posted: 14 years ago
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Edited by queenyuks - 14 years ago
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Ahem & Jigar

(entry 1)


Jigar is sitting alone in the back garden, he's very worried because things between him and Rashi are not getting better in fact they are getting more worse than before. He doesn't know who to talk to, who can he share he's worries with. Ahem comes in looking for Jigar.

"There you are Jigar, I've been looking for you all over the house."

"Sorry Bhai, you should've called me, tell me what do you need?"

"I wanted to tell you that our first meeting has changed to 10:00am from 11:00am. Try not to be late, it's very important you're there."

"Ok Bhai, no problem i'll be there."

Ahem turns to go back into his room, Jigar thinks it's now or never.

"Bhai, can i talk to you for a minute please?"

"Ok be quick, what do you want?"

Jigar becomes nervous, he know's Ahem doesn't like talking about personal things, but he can't keep things to himself anymore, he has to talk to somebody.

"Ahem Bhai...Um...I..."

"What's wrong? Why are you so nervous, just tell me?"

(all in one breath Jigar say's) "Iwantedtotalktoyouabout Rashi."

"WHAT? Say it properly."

"I wanted to talk to you about Rashi, The thing is sh-

Ahem puts his hand up to stop Jigar.

"You know i don't like talking about your personal life, if it's about work then come talk to me, if not then talk to somebody else."

Ahem again turns around to go up to his room, when he then hear's some words he never thought he would hear from Jigar's mouth.

"What kind of brother are you?"

Ahem is very angry but also confused, did his little baby brother just really say what he thinks he said.

"Jigar what ar-"

Jigar puts his hand up to stop Ahem, (Bad idea Jigar) Jigar know's what he is doing is wrong and that he shouldn't behave like this with his older brother, but how much can a guy take?

"No Ahem Bhai, let me speak, forgive me but i have to say this, What kind of brother are you? Do you even see me as you're little brother anymore or am i just you're employee? We used to be so close, we were like best friends when we were smaller. Do you remember Ahem Bhai how we used to paly all the time when we were kids, play tricks on Kinjal, pick Mango's together from the tree in our Garden and play Cricket all the time. We used to tell each other everything? What happened, why won't you talk to me anymore or let me talk to you. When did become a strangers from being brothers?"

"Jigar listen to me i ju-"

"No Ahem Bhai, nothing can excuse you from this, Do you know what i wanted to say to you. Me and Rashi are still in the "friends" stage of our relationship. (Ahem is very shocked to hear that, he always thought things between Jigar and Rashi were better than him and Gopi) I'm really glad that things between you and Gopi Bhabi are much better than before, but what about me, Don't i deserve some happiness from my marriage?"

"I didn't know things are bad between you and Rashi?" What do you want me to say? Why don't you talk to your parents or Papa.?"

"I should talk to anybody but you right? If mom and dad know i am going through this do you know how hurt they will be. I can't talk to Kaka because he will tell mom and dad and i can't have that. Maybe if you saw me as a brother, you could've seen what i'm going through?"

Jigar then walks away from there, he is feeling so many things at once, Guilt, Sadness, Anger, Sick and very Scared. He shouldn't have spoken to his big brother like that. He is usually the calm one out of both the brother's. Today it seemed they had swapped places. He goes into his room and see's Rashi already asleep, again she went to sleep without waiting for him. He doesn't know what to do anymore, why doesn't Rashi to move forward in their relationship.

Ahem is lying in his bed thinking about what happened. He see's Gopi sleeping next to him on the bed, everyone in the house has been so busy in trying to bring him and Gopi together that no one noticed Jigar and Rashi are having problems too. Ahem is now starting to feel guilty, he never meant to hurt Jigar. He had no idea Jigar felt like that. He loves his little brother alot, he just doesn't know how to show it anymore, and feels there is no need to show it anymore. But whatever he feels now doesn't matter. His little brother is having problems and as the elder brother he has a duty to help him.

Next morning both brother's get ready to go jogging, both feeling guilty and nervous about the day ahead. Jigar goes out first. Ahem see's Jigar leaving the house and quickly follows him. Both of them are just jogging along without saying anything to each other. They stop for a break, Jigar is the first to break he silence.

"Ahem Bhai, i'm really sorry, forgive me i should not have spoken to you like that, i don't know what came over me."

"It's ok Jigar, you don't need to apoligise. I'm sorry too, I know i haven't been much of a brother to you, i just thought as you got older you could handle things yourself. You didn't need me anymore."

"I'm always going to need my older brother no matter what age we are, no matter what situation we are in."

"Come lets go get a drink, and you can tell me more about what you're worried about."

"Are you sure Ahem Bhai, shouldn't we be getting ready for our meeting at 10:00?"

"That's not important right now, now hurry up before i change my mind."

They both walk towards a cafe at the end of the park with Ahem's hand on Jigar's shoulder.

Edited by queenyuks - 14 years ago
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hem&Anita
(entry 2)

Ahem has been getting the same message on his mobile for the past 7 day's. The message say's, Please meet me at Joggers Park by the water fountain at 8pm tonight, from an old friend. Ahem has ignored the message since it first came. He even tried to call it but no answer. He tried to trace it but no luck. He has now had enough and decides to confront the person behind it.
The next day he gets the same text again at the same time like clockwork. At 7:30 he gets ready to go, all the way there he is wondering who could it be. Nobody comes to mind. He gets to the fountain and see's a woman wearing a sari with a shawl wrapped around her. he can't see her face because she's facing away from him.
"Excuse me, who are you and why do you keep texting me?"
She turns around and smiles, Ahem can't belive it, its Anita standing there right before him.
"What's wrong Ahem have i lost the right to talk to you?"
"Anita, what are you doing here? It's you who has been texting me for the past week? Why?"
"To talk"
"What do we have to talk about? I don't think we anything to say to each other."
"I think we have plenty to say. How is Gopi Ji?"
"What, why are you giving that gawar so much respect?"
"I see you haven't changed, leave that for now, there's something want to show you."
Anita pulls out a wedding necklace from her neck and shows it Ahem, and moves her shawl away from her stomach to
reveal a small baby bump.
"So you have come to rub you're happiness in my face? I did not expect this from you Anita?"
"No Ahem, please don't think that. I have come to show you that i have moved on, and i think it's time you did too."
"How do you know i haven't?"
"Because A, you just called your wife a gawar and B, me an Kinjal still talk to each other. I know what's going on in your life, i know you and Gopi Ji are not in a proper relationship. You both are living a lie? I am happy in my new life and i think you should be too. I have husband who loves me very much and who i love very much too. I'm here to tell you forget everything that's happened between us start afresh."
"How can live a life with someone is beneath me? She's a gawar, a fool.?"
"I can't belive you are still that same self centered egomaniac, how can you talk like that about another human being. Forget that she is someone who has feelings SHE'S YOU'RE WIFE, for god' sake. Have some respect. Ok tell me other than being uneducated what other flaw does she have?"
"She's like a mouse, when i ask her anything it takes her about ten years to answer back, all that comes out of mouth is ji ji vor vor."
"That's a stupid reason and you know it, why do you think she is like that?"
"I don't know, and i don't care."
"Kinjal told me what her fai saas and Rashi are like. I can only imagine what it's like for an orphan to grow up in that kind of atmosphere. Does she look after you properly as a wife? e.g cook clean keep everything of your's in order?"
"Yes she does, That's what she's there for so what's wrong if she does?"
"I'm not saying there's something wrong if does, i'm glad she does. At atleast she's fufilling her duty as a wife to you. Shame you can't do the same. Be the husband you should be. Tell one more thing, when i told you im married what did you feel, be honest? Shock, Hurt, Angry what?"
"I felt relived"
"Why?"
"Because i know how hurt you was when we parted, i'm happy to know that you're happy and settled."
"So you didn't feel hurt?"
"No"
"Why do you think that is?
Silence
"It's because you don't love me anymore, and that's great, it's what i wanted to hear. If there's no space for me in you're heart it means there's space for Gopi Ji who has every right to be. There's one more thing you need to know, the reason that started your misunderstanding. The necklace you thought she brought it wasn't her, Kinjal was the one who brought it. I know she was wrong and you know why she did it, she feels really bad about it, the guilt has been eating her since she has learned to accept her husband and newly married life, please don't say anything to her."
"That doesn't matter anymore. I can't belive you came all the way just to tell me all this. Have you been here everynight since you texted me?"
"Every single night, i'm glad you finally came. It was very important i tell you this. I have to go now, it's getting late. I just hope i somehow got through to you. Ahem you deserve to be happy and i know you have a lot of love to give, i was once on the receiving end of that love. Aunty made the right choice in choosing you're wife, from what i heard she is the calm that can cool down the hot tempered man you are. Good luck Ahem, i hope to hear different from now on. Bye"
"Bye"
On the drive home Ahem replayed everything that just went on. Anita was right he wasn't hurt when he heard that she is married and expecting a child. He always thought he would be hurt if he ever saw Anita again. But he didn't. Maybe she's right and he should give his married life a chance. Everyone in the Modi house loves her. Maybe he should give Gopi a chance to prove herself.
He got home and went up to his room and saw Gopi doing some work in the bedroom, as soon as Gopi saw Ahem she pulled her pallu to cover her head. Ahem went over to her, stopped her and shook his head.
"You look better without it."

Edited by queenyuks - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thank you for the fabulous OSs and good luck with your entries...

My Vote -

GoHam Entries - #2,#5,#7

Other Pairings - #1


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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thank you Yuks for the lovely contest and a big thanks to those who penned it down ever so beautifully..It was a treat reading all of them..All the best everyone.

Okay, am here for my vote..

Gohem : Entry 2, 6 &7

Other: Entry 1

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Posted: 14 years ago
#16
Hi my vote for entry 1 ,2 and 8
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey, all of them were great but my vote is:

gohem: 1,2,7
other: 1
Edited by SNS_fan101 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#18
I loved all the FF's entered, the standard is amazingly high which made it so hard to select my top 3. After a lot of thought my favourite three are: 2 , 5, and 7. Of the 'other' my favourite is number 1.
Congratulations to all the writers for the amazing stories 😃
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Posted: 14 years ago
#19
Really loved all the OS.very difficult to select from.Great job guys.👏
My vote goes to, Gohem:2,6,8
and other:1
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Posted: 14 years ago
#20
jus want to say that all the fanfics are awesome
Gohem: 2,6 & 8
Other: 2

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