SS: Satrupa's Pride(Updated Chapter 2)

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Okay, first of all I would like to apologize for not writing the third chapter of my previous short story, but honestly, I could not find the inspiration to write more, considering how Baldev's character was shaped in the show, I could not find the reason to justify his character any more.

Secondly, please forgive me if this chapter did not come out as nicely as the chapters from my previous story. It is 4a.m right now, and I was feeling really lazy to write in a more proper way.😆

I would be really happy if you could leave your feed-backs. Even if it is criticism, it is all welcome.


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The crimson filled the air, as the whole house danced in revelry. It seemed ages since joy had last touched these faces, and it all felt fresh and energizing.

Only if she could stop time, and live this moment forever, only if she could add this day to the handful of constants in her otherwise ever-changing life, it was all that Satrupa would ask for.


Yes, there was a void, no denying; a void created by the absence of the son she had devoted to live her life for, a void that could not be filled that easily; but Satrupa was no more sad, she was happy, and it felt good, being able to feel the curve on her lips once again, she genuinely felt good in a long while. Her son won't be mourned, his life shall be celebrated, and that is how he will be kept alive. Through Anami, through herself, and though everyone he considered his own, Vatsalya shall live through all of them.

Her daughter, all she could feel looking at her, was pride. How beautifully had her daughter grown up, despite being deprived of the luxuries she was born to truly live with! Satrupa was ever so thankful to the Pathaks for raising her child so perfectly, for giving her the childhood she herself failed to provide, for loving her unconditionally and giving her an upbringing this fine. Anami was the change that Lal Mahal needed since long, and Satrupa was well aware of that.

With a wide smile adorning her face, she watched as Anami danced through the crowd, welcoming Maa Durga into their house, for the first time. The deafening sound of the dhol complemented the celebration, as the enormous idol entered inside the palace.

The time for the aarti came, and while Gayatri suggested Anami to do the aarti, Vikram showed his displeasure. It was against the norms, that he claimed his forefathers had set- a girl should not start the aarti, as he said; it should be a boy, he claimed. Gayatri tried to object, but unfortunately Vikram seemed adament and her objection was eventually ruled out.

Vikram was about to ask Avdooth to do the first aarti, but was stopped in his tracks by Satrupa, who took Anami by the hands, surprising everyone around including herself, and dragged her along to the altar.

"Papa, hum izzat karte hain riwazon ka, par agar koi riwaz galat hai, to unhe badalne mein hi humari bhalai hai, kyunki tab wo riwaz nahi, galti kehlai jati hai. Ye puja Anami ke badolat hi possible ho payi hai, to kaide se Anami ka pehla haq banta hai aarti karne ka.

Vikram could not utter a word further as Satrupa handed the aarti ki thaal to Anami and the Puja continued. It all went well, as Satrupa and Baldev too joined Anami in doing the aarti, and for the first time after Vatsalya left, Satrupa saw her family as a whole once again. This was all that she had ever wanted, and she could not seem to contain her happiness, as she let a tear roll down her face. Only if Vatsalya was also there to complete this family picture.

BANG!

Anything mobile, was silenced, as the whole crowd stood in their respective places, stupefied, watching in horror, what was completely and purely unexpected. The rust like smell intermixed with vermilion could be felt in the air, as two figures sat by the floor, one resting her head on the other's lap, as a piercing wail cut through the silence. What exactly had just happened?

Satrupa had never expected she would lose her daughter again, that too, this fast.

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Great work again..you depicted everything so beautifully that I could visualize all this events unfolding Infront of my eyes n I could clearly see the pride filled eyes of satrupa...N she mentally thanking Pathaks, that's one moment I really wish we could see in the show..she owes atleast a sorry n thanks to Pathaks..N satrupa did the right thing by going against Vikram's words..there are a lot of such customs that need to be updated..
But the end..that is not done girl...it's unfair to torture us poor souls...plz do update the rest soon..I am so eager to know what happened n how it's going to affect Baldev n rest.
Edited by TriShakti - 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: TriShakti

Great work again..you depicted everything so beautifully that I could visualize all this events unfording Infront of my eyes n I could clearly see the pride filled eyes of satrupa...N she mentally thanking Pathaks, that's one moment I really wish we could see in the show..she owes atlest a sorry n thanks to Pathaks..N satrupa did the right thing by going against Vikram's words..there are a lot of such costumes that need to be updated..

But the end..that is not done girl...it's unfair to torture us poor souls...plz do update the rest soon..I am so eager to know what happened n how it's going to affect Baldev n rest.

Thanks! I will try to update as fast as I can😆!
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Posted: 7 years ago
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A great start...beautifully written...I really loved Satrupa's POV on everything...she thanking the pathaks...Pls continue soon...if possible include Baldev also.

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Oh God what happened... I hope Anami is alive...
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CHAPTER 2



They stood together, by each others' side; their eyes meeting the others' eyes; he kept smiling while she could only cry; they had met before, yet it seemed to be their first time.

At last, she had found the missing bits of her otherwise perfect life; and she was overwhelmed. Being able to see him again was overwhelming; being able to feel his presence was overwhelming; everything about this bloody moment was overwhelming, and no, she could not contain herself.

"Anami! Hum bole the na? Agar humari koi behen hoti to wo bilkul tumhare jaisi hi hoti., he said, flashing his innocent smile.

Anami was left stupefied and could no more speak, the lump in her throat did not allow her to speak, his presence had left her immobile. All she could do right now, was to cry, uncontrollably and vigorously.

After she was finally satisfied with her crying, the siblings finally sat together to enjoy the other side, both free from the worries of life. It was then that Anami noticed her surroundings, the vibrant sky, the Ganga ghats, it was the same as when they had met for the first time, the fresh air, and the petrichor, no it was not raining, yet it smelt similar, fresh and new, completely surreal, and for the first time in a while, Anami felt unbarred.

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Blood stained her face, as she shivered frantically, holding an unconscious Anami in her arms. In this Chakravyuh, she had already lost too much, Anami being all that she was left with, losing her would leave Satrupa with nothing, and even the thought of it horrified her.

Never had she felt this vulnerable. Her daughter, her pride, was lying in front of her, motionless. She wanted Anami to argue with her, scold Satrupa for for holding herself, fight with her like she would usually do, but alas, she stayed in her mother's laps, unfazed, unmoved.

"ANAMI!!!!, the shrillness of her voice cut through the deafening silence that spread throughout the astounded palace.

Dadi was left aghast, while Poonam was scared, Dadaji and Baldev were shook, and an angered Adhiraj had already gone behind the fleeing perpetrator.

Baldev was worried for Anami; for Satrupa, he saw her break for the first time and it broke his own heart. He was afraid to lose them both, and for the first time he did accept Anami as his own.

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They were elated to meet each other again, talking and talking continuously as if there was no tomorrow.

"Tumhe pata hai Anami, hum bohot khush hai, hum bohot khush hai, ki humare jaane ke baad bhi humari maa has rahi hai, unka abhiman banne koi aaya hai, hum bohot khush hain ki dadi firse kisiko itna pamper kar rahi hai, unka laad batorne koi aaya hai, ki dadaji ke riwazon ko takkar dene koi aaya hai, aur papa ke adhure sapne poore karne koi aaya hai, Narottam ke dukh ko samajhne koi aaya hai, hum bohot khush hain Anami. Humare baad Lal Mahal ko sambhalne koi aaya hai.

Edited by reema.ghosh - 7 years ago
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Thank You everybody, and sorry for itna late update.
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It's amazing story...keep writing it yaar and plz do pm me
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Originally posted by: reema.ghosh

After she was finally satisfied with her crying, the siblings finally sat together to enjoy the other side, both free from the worries of life. It was then that Anami noticed her surroundings, the vibrant sky, the Ganga ghats, it was the same as when they had met for the first time, the fresh air, and the petrichor, no it was not raining, yet it smelt similar, fresh and new, completely surreal, and for the first time in a while, Anami felt unbarred.


@red👏👏
Beautifully written.. something very Serene.
whenever Anami n Vatsalya comes together they literally steals the show..N here also u did full justice to them n their scenes overpowered rest for me.
So finally Baldev accepted Anami..now waiting for BalNami bond to unfold.. hope we get some beautiful MiRaj too from u.
Thanks for the update.
Edited by TriShakti - 7 years ago

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