This was mind blowing GURL.The tools you've used to emphasize the emotions and foreshadowing in this chapter are a new benchmark for you.
First, I'm glad Tejawat is back, you're bringing back the suspense and the intensity. I knew you were too good to let all be just lovey dovey from here on. Although, I admire how cleanly you write about Parud's romance that still manages to give me chills. I wouldn't mind reading more though xD
Furthermore, the bonds that have been created between the couples, Aman & Pia with Parud is so swwweeet. *sigh* Beautifully written. The small yet significant details complement your chapters so well, like how Rudra got a job. Do you even know how excited I get when I get a PM from you? :p
Second, I KNEW something would happen to Paro, you gave away such a HUGE hint when she said
<font color="#0000ff">"Or else you'll come home and I'll be gone. I'll slip through your fingers just like that and make sure that you will never find me again. Then you'll regret behaving this way with me."</font>
I knew from the caller ID that something must've or will happen. Bravo my dear. There were many ways this could've gone wrong or could, for instance if the Jallad resurfaces which changes his equation with Paro and most importantly himself. Although, I doubt that because, it would've happened at the train station. This time there's more like an absolute guarantee, it's been a year. Referring back to the train station incident, it was merely a bundle of hours since his transformation.
Third, the way you conveyed Rudra's reaction was clean and perfect! "<font color="#0000ff">Rudra halted in his tracks. He froze. His heart was pounding in his chest. He looked at his phone once more to make sure he hadn't read the caller ID wrong. But he hadn't. Rudra put the phone back to his ear."</font>
The intensity is ground breaking, it's exciting. I'm extremely looking forward to see what's up your sleeves next. And I believe the right word to describe one of your lethal writing skills, is unpredictable.
Thank you for PM'ing and spoiling us with your updates, I aspire to be as creative of an imaginer and as original of a writer-- of PaRud or in general-- as you one day. :D I'll stop with the fangirling now. ;p
Lots of love from your fond reader..
Ru!
Edited by rupao21 - 11 years ago
