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Posted: 11 years ago
#81
Cant wait to find out who the parents are. Cute scene between aman and pia
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Posted: 11 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: juhi611

Great chapter & update!!! You're on a roll with the chapters!!! Honestly wasn't expecting chapter 8 this quickly!!😆
Khayr, you are absolutely driving me crazy with the mystery about who Pia's parents are. But, with the way you ended this chapter with Aman suggesting to do a DNA test to check the possibility of it being in the authorities database... really took me by surprise. Now though, I think I have an inkling of an idea, about who one of her parents (note I'm saying one and not both) is AND the possibility of her having a sibling related by blood. NOT sure if it would make sense or even work out, so I'm not going to say anything yet. 😊

On another note, loving the interaction between Aman & Pia.. they were acting almost like a newlywed couple in the market scene. 😆

I also like how you're portrayed Rudra's growth in his character, in the awkwardness when it came to comforting Pia. It shows he's trying... even if not for himself, for Paro's sake at least. 😊

PS- thanks for the chapter dedication!!! feel like a mini- celebrity now!!!


To tell you the truth, I've actually written all the way up to chapter 14! I'm just taking my time posting them because I enjoy making you all wait...plus I have to let the drama build up!

I'm sure you know where I'm heading with this story, and I'm glad you're not going to spill the beans. Don't worry. My story will somehow make sense. It's very complex, but I think it will be appreciated.

I also enjoyed writing Rudra's evolution as a character. It'll be very interesting to see how he goes character-wise as the chapters continue to progress!


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Posted: 11 years ago
#83

Originally posted by: SherryGS

OMG!!! Loved the Pia/ Aman "date." LOL It was so freaking cute. I love Aman so any time he gets space in a story or on screen its better for me. Your OS on him was the best Aman story I ever read. Rudra and Pia's relationship is very sweet, very little sister-big brother in law. Also very very nice how Gaurav is interacting with the family and how they celebrated his b-day. Love the story and I am glad you updated on Saturday!

OMG how can I forget... lol... DNA!!! OK this will be big won't it???? 😃



I'm glad you loved Aman and Pia's scene. It was definitely one of my favorite parts to write. I didn't want Pia to be quiet and shy. I just wanted her to act naturally with him, and the same with him. I didn't want him to be very shy, but I think he'd be adorable if he was oogling over a girl, especially with one who's bubbly and cheerful like Sunehri. I love Aman a lot, so I needed him to have an actual moment with Pia in this chapter. Don't worry there will be more of them in upcoming chapters!

The Rudra and Pia moment was good for me. I wanted to show how Rudra didn't just protect Paro. He cares about Pia too because she means a lot to his wife. He also considers her (with Gaurav) family, which is a big step for him considering how he didn't believe in the whole institution of family before. I needed Gaurav to have a moment, even if it was a little one.

Trust me! The DNA test is going to be BIG! And it will be coming up soon!


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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: anisa79

Cant wait to find out who the parents are. Cute scene between aman and pia


I think by now everyone is excited to find out who the parents are. 😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
#85

Originally posted by: rashika

Thank you for the mention.

That was very sweet of you.
Now back to the awesome chapter.
Gaurav's birthday was very sweet.
Now they are planning Mala's birthday as a surprise.
Loved the whole Pia and aman scene. That was so sweet of Aman.
Now they are going to try a DNA test.
Wonder if that will bring any results.


Believe me when I say the DNA test will be BIG. I was excited just writing it. 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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thanks for the lovely story. enjoyed thoroughly. eagerly waiting to know who pia parents are...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hi everyone!
I'm back with the next chapter. Hmm...what can I say about this one? Well, it's certainly interesting I can give you that. Not much to it. It's kind of a filler, but then again kind of not. Anyways, I'll just let you read it and tell me what you think.


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Chapter Nine


After informing Rudra about the idea, Aman ran Pia's DNA. The analysts stated the results would take a few days due to all the criminal records they have to match it up against. They were told to be patient, which was quite difficult for everyone.


In the meantime, party preparations began. Everyone took turns taking Mala out of the house for at least in hour so they could make plans. After she went to sleep, the family gathered in the main hall to discuss what decorations would be used, what food would be made, what gifts everyone bought, and so on. Mohini wasn't thrilled about the idea of throwing a part for Mala, but due to majority rule she was forced to participate with a fake smile on her face. Pia remained in touch with Aman to see how the progress on the DNA was going, and he had given her the same response for the passed three days: as of now, they had nothing.


The more impatient Pia became, the more temperamental her attitude got. In the last few days she had snapped at Gaurav for little things. He understood why she did so, but the rest of the family was stunned by her sudden outbursts. Late one afternoon, while everyone was home and going about their routine, Pia decided to talk to Paro about the truth. She knew if she kept it in any longer she would snap at someone other than her brother, and who knew what the consequences of that would be.


Pia told Rudra and Gaurav that she wanted to talk to Paro, and they agreed to be by her side as promised. Pia told Paro everything in private. She didn't keep anything hidden because at this point, there's was nothing left to hide. To say Parvati was shocked would be an understatement. She continuously looked back and forth between Rudra and Pia. They had been keeping such a large secret hidden from her. Rudra had been helping Pia track down her real parents. Gaurav wasn't Pia's real brother, she was adopted. She thought there weren't suppose to be any secret in their marriage, but Rudra was doing all of this behind her back. He should've at least told her, in fact Gaurav and Pia should've told her. She considered them family after all. Could they not share this with her?


After listening to the story, Paro spoke, "After all of this, you never once told me? Why?"


"We didn't want you to get involved until we had some sort of lead," Rudra answered, trying to pacify his wife.


"Is that why you never wrote? Because you were going through all of this?" Paro asked Gaurav and Pia.


Gaurav nodded.


Pia spoke, "Paro, we didn't want to hide it from you. But we knew if we told you, you would not rest until you found out who my parents were, and we didn't want you to do that. I also knew that you would try to get Rudra to help us, so we just went directly to him. Please don't be upset."


"I'm not upset Pia," Paro reasoned. "I just wished you would've told me. Who else knows about this?"


"Aman does," Rudra said.


Paro hugged Pia, "Don't worry. Major saab and Aman bhai-sa will help you find your parents. Leave it to them. Don't ever forget that I am here for you, Pia."


The lump formed in Pia's throat as she hugged Paro back and managed to say, "Thank you, Paro."


Parvati looked over at Rudra, who gave her a small nod. In his gesture, he was assuring her that he and Aman would do whatever they can to find Pia's parents. She mouthed the words thank you' to him before comforting Pia once again. She wondered why this had to happen to Pia and Gaurav. They had never done anything wrong in their lives, so why was this storm destroying everything in their paths. She prayed to Bholenath that everything would turn out alright.


That night, the air of tension seemed to cool around the haveli. Paro tried to get Pia and Gaurav to forget about their troubles. When she saw the smile beginning to fade, she would go and silently comfort them, causing the smiles to reappear. The entire family was sitting in the living room, conversing after a long day. Dilsher and Danveer were playing cards while their daughters-in-law were making garlands for the Shiva murti'. Pia walked out from her room and immediately ran over to the card game. Dilsher began teaching her how to play, and she was eager to learn. She began telling jokes and mimicking family members, which the two brothers laughed heartily at.


Maithili, who was watching the scene play out, whisper to Paro, "It seems that Pia is enjoying herself."


"I know jija," Paro agreed.


"She certainly is very different, but very lovable."


"Maa-sa used to say that same thing about her and Gaurav."


"It's sad that the two of them have to leave soon."


"Soon? Meaning?"


"They were only here for two weeks remember, Paro? They'll be leaving in a week."


"That's right. Who knew time would go by so fast. I'm going to miss them."


Suddenly, Gaurav came and sat down with them and said, "Miss who?"


"Paro was just saying how she will miss you and Pia when you leave," Maithili said.


"Don't worry I'll write this time. I promise," Gaurav said to Paro. "I can't promise about Pia."


"She will write. I know she will," Paro said.

"What are you doing here anyways? Making garlands?"


Paro handed him the needle, thread, and flowers, "Here. Try."


Gaurav took a deep breath and tried to make a garland. Maithili and Paro giggled while he tried, but the flower was properly placed, causing it to fall off or break apart. He tried multiple times. He began sticking his tongue out and close one eye while he tried to focus. It didn't help. Instead, he accidentally pricked his finger.


"Ouch!" he shouted.


A concerned Paro pulled his hand towards her, "Gaurav, be careful."


"Something is wrong with the flowers!"


"It's not the flowers, it's you!"


"No it's no-..Ouch! Paro that hurts!"


"It should, you're bleeding a little." Paro wiped the blood. "It's just a small prick."


"Oh really?" Gaurav said sarcastically. "Thank you so much for saving my life! I would've died if you didn't tell me I pricked my finger."


Paro huffed in annoyance and let go of his hand, "I was trying to be nice and you are being mean in return."


Gaurav laughed as Paro snatched the flowers and needle and thread back from him and continued making garlands. By now, everyone was watching them, as if they were a comedy act. Even Rudra was, but he wasn't upset seeing the two of the interact. Paro was upset and Gaurav knew it. Back when they were younger, he would've let her stay mad until she realized how wrong she was. But they weren't kids anymore, and Gaurav didn't have forever. He was going to be gone in a week, and he didn't want to leave on a bad note. As Paro stood up, so did he. Gaurav blocked her path so she couldn't walk away. This time, like many times before, he would have to apologize. He took a deep breath, grabbed his ears, and pouted.


"Look Paro I'm sorry," he said.


She looked at him, "Really?"


"Your whole family can see me holding my ears. I'm sorry, I wasn't trying to upset you. Do I have to drive to Birpur to get imli to prove it to you?"


"Yes."


"What?"


"Get imli from Birpur, then I'll forgive you."


Gaurv dropped his hands from his ears, "Okay, I'll be back."


Paro was astonished, "Gaurav, wait! I was kidding. You would go to Birpur right now and get imli just so I would forgive you?"


"If that works."


She smiled and pinched his cheeks, "So sweet!"


"Ouch! Paro! Paro! Stop! Ouch! Maa-sa help!"


The entire family laughed, but didn't help Gaurav. Paro stopped pinching his cheeks, and he rubbed his face. Mohini was watching the scene play out before her. She was disgusted seeing so much happiness. It was because of Pia that her son, Sumer, was humiliated, and she wasn't going to take that sitting down. She was going to plant a seed of doubt in everyone's mind, in order to taint the image of the two people that matter most to Pia. Mohini stood up and slowly started clapping. As everyone's attention turned to her, the atmosphere became tense. Mohini had a tendency to speak without thinking, and no matter how hard they tried to stop her she wasn't going to change. They began to brace themselves for what venom the snake was about to spew.


She stopped clapping and said, "Wah! What a sight! I must say there is so much love and affection between Gaurav and Paro. And such an open display! Was this how you acted in Birpur?"


Gaurav responded, "Kaki-sa, Paro and I grew up together. We have always acted like this, even when we were younger."


"Oh? Always? In case you haven't heard, Parvati is married now, and acting in such a way could make people question Paro's character. It will make people wonder what is between you two."


"First of all, I am well aware that Paro is married. I'm not blind. Secondly, Paro and my's relationship will always be that of friendship, nothing more. And as for her character, there is a black stain on it."


"You seem to be very defensive about this issue. Why would it matter if she is just your friend? It wouldn't be a surprise since there have been members of this haveli that have had affairs. So why should it matter if you and Parvati act more like lovers-."


Rudra shot up from his seat and angrily yelled, "Enough!"


Everyone stood up after hearing Rudra shout. They all knew Mohini was speaking out of line, but once she started there was only one person that could stop her, and that was Rudra. Hurling such accusations against Paro was no less than a capital crime in the haveli. And Mohini piled on the insults, so when Rudra finally had enough, they weren't surprised. No one intervened as he stormed up to Mohini.


Rudra pointed his finger in her face and spoke through clenched teeth, "If you say one more thing like that about Paro, I will forget that you are my kaki-sa!"


Mohini spoke, "I was just saying what I saw."


He dropped his finger from her face, "No one asked you about your opinion. Now you listen to me. Don't you ever question Paro's character. Ever. You are the last person that has the right to do so, especially after all the deeds you've done. You have no right to judge. You're lucky you're still welcome here."


"You may not see it Rudra, but I do. The same way I saw it when Mala was getting ready to leave Dilsher. You will remain blind when Gaurav snatches Parvati from you. Then don't complain when you find out that I'm right. It's better to put an end to such shamelessness now!"


Pia had had enough. She walked over to Mohini, looked her dead in the eye, and said, "Enough. Don't you ever insult my brother or Parvati."


Mohini stood stunned to see this angry side of Pia. The facial expression. The anger. Her words. Pia was like a junior Rudra. She hadn't predicted her to have such a side. Her eyes lacked any emotion, they were instead engulfed in the flames of rage that now had become too difficult to control. Now she couldn't take back what she said. It was too late. Mohini had to face the wrath of Rudra and Pia. They both looked at her, shooting daggers with their eyes.


"I usually don't speak against my elders but you left me no choice," Pia said angrily. "Bhai would never try to take Paro from Rudra. He cares for her the way he cares for me. By saying he would do such a thing, you've insulted him. I can handle a lot of this, but I cannot handle someone insulting Gaurav. And you question Paro? Paro?!"


"Paro would die before she even thinks of doing something like that," Rudra added. "And my maa-sa ran away, but there were circumstances that we didn't know about either. We forgave her. She made a mistake. That doesn't give you any right to insult her."


"And if we're judging others than what about your son?" Pia questioned. "I wonder what sort of values you instilled in him to make him so unmannered!"


"Watch your tongue!" Mohini yelled. "You have no right to speak about my son like that. Don't forget your place. You're a guest, not a member of this family."


Pia smiled as she had her right where she wanted her, "Exactly. If I have no right to judge your son, then you have no right to judge Gaurav or Paro."


"You have no right to judge anyone," Rudra added.


"It seems I don't have a right to do anything in this house," Mohini said as she put on a facade of sadness. "If I have no right, then why do I stay here?"


"You're welcome to leave," Rudra replied. "The door is right behind you."


Rudra and Pia simultaneously crossed their arms on their chest and eyed Mohini, then the door. Kaki-sa stared at them, huffing and puffing while observing them. They were waiting for her to make a decision right then and there. Her plan had backfired as now she stood, humiliated and insulted. She was outmatched by her nephew and a stranger. Knowing her weak husband and children wouldn't support her, she stomped out of the crowd of rivals and into her room. Danveer followed behind so he could have a word with her, alone. The minute she was gone, the air calmed. A few sighs of relief filled the air. Rudra and Pia went over to Gaurav and Paro to ask if they were okay. By now, they had learned not to take Mohini's taunts seriously.


Mala was the first to speak to Rudra and Pia, "I am glad you stood up for Gaurav and Parvati. But Pia, you shouldn't have spoken against Mohini jija like that."


"Maa-sa I couldn't just stand by and let her insult my loved ones," Pia said. "Family is family, and I will stick up for them until the very end."


"I can't believe you stood up to kaki-sa," Paro said. "Usually it's only Major saab."


"Maybe I should join the BSD and be an officer like Rudra!"


Rudra shook his head and smiled softly, "No. I think not. I get enough of you here, and the BSD only needs one Rudra type officer."


"I must say one thing," Dilsher grinned mischievously. "It was nice to see Mohini put in her place not just by Rudra, but by Pia. Who knew she had such a side to her?"


Everyone laughed and Dilsher patted Pia's head. She had guts, no one could deny that. After that day, it was made clear to the entire Ranawat family that no one should mess with Pia.

The family decided that that was enough drama for the night and began preparing for bed. In less than ten minutes, sleep consumed every person in the Ranawat haveli. The only sound was the leaves softly rustling in the wind.


The following day, at the BSD, Aman had finally received what he had been waiting for. On his desk was a file containing Pia's DNA reports. A large red stamp marked the file as Confidential'. There must've been a match in the records. Aman opened it and read its contents. The color drained from his face. His hands began shaking. His jaw dropped in utter disbelief. No, this couldn't be right. This was impossible! This report was wrong! It had to be! But how could it? He had the best analysts run her DNA. This meant that...the reports were right. This meant that she was his...could it be? Aman had grabbed his phone to call Rudra and tell him about the reports, but stopped. Before he could give the Major answers, he had to do some more research. He had to...for Pia. For once, Aman hoped that these reports were wrong.



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Yes, that's right my friends! The reports are in! What are the results? You will find out in the next chapter, which I will post once I see some love. Leave your comments and feedback below!

Thanks for reading!



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Posted: 11 years ago
#88
Please make pia related to Rudr in some way or another😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wow!!! Another great chapter!!!!

OMG... You HAD to end the chapter there na? 😲 Really, I don't know what to say. This line:

This meant that she was his...could it be?

coupled with Aman's reactions has me really wondering now. I'm still not 100% sure if what I have in mind is right. I think I do, but I guess I'll have to wait and find out. 😊 But can I add, that I find it interesting that Pia & Rudra reacted in the same way to Mohini. 😉


Khayr, that Mohini knows NO bounds. She'll go to any extent to humiliate someone. The vileness of that character (show or this fic) is just.. ughh!! But I totally understand why she needs to be there. In that Mohini accusation scene, this was my favourite bit of dialogue:

"Watch your tongue!" Mohini yelled. "You have no right to speak about my son like that. Don't forget your place. You're a guest, not a member of this family."

Pia smiled as she had her right where she wanted her, "Exactly. If I have no right to judge your son, then you have no right to judge Gaurav or Paro."

"You have no right to judge anyone," Rudra added.

"It seems I don't have a right to do anything in this house," Mohini said as she put on a facade of sadness. "If I have no right, then why do I stay here?"

"You're welcome to leave," Rudra replied. "The door is right behind you."

That LAST line there had me in stitches!!! Sounds like a typical Rudra line! I can even picture his expression.😆

Eagerly looking forward to the next chapter to find out the results!!!


Edited by juhi611 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#90
Fabulous update.
I am glad Pia finally told Paro everything. She deserved to know after all they were like her family plus Rudra also knew.
Paro was hurt at first but Paro being Paro gets over it pretty soon.
Loved the whole family gathering that was good.
Pia learning cards while Gaurav trying to make flower garlands. How funny.
Mohini and her venom knows no bounds.
So glad that not only Rudra had a go at her but also Pia.
Rudra saying that Mohini shouldn't taunt other's characters after what she has done.
Pia taunting her values because Sumer is a leech. Both parents are responsible for a child's upbringing but in Sumer's case all the blame is Mohini's.
OMG!
What has Aman found out? I have a very nasty feeling that Pia is related to Rudra.
Only your next update or the update after can reveal that. Can't wait.

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