Rudra Ki Daastan - English Version (Updating)

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Sumneet

@Zeffy

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Posted: 11 years ago

Hi Baisas,

This is a link to the Hindi version,

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/rangrasiya/4010619/rudra-ki-daastan-updating

This is about a version of what Rudra's diary, if he owned one, would look like. How a 10-12 year old would pen down his feelings. I watched the 1st episode and worked on the content. Well it was fun to type in the Hindi Version, but I believe that some people might have slight difficulties in understanding.

Kindly please wait for the updated english version. Deeply apologize in advance.

Edited by zeffy2k2 - 11 years ago

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prabha

@prabha.abha

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Posted: 11 years ago

Its so cute i love tis kid rudra so much. Thank u so much for the English version my dear friend 😉 😉

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shutter

@shutter

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Posted: 11 years ago

WOW!!!!! You started writing fiction...

Will come back with more after I finish reading!!!!

👍🏼

And I'm back!!!!! 😉

Okay we see the transformation of one innocent kid into a ruthless, heartless young man!!!! The poor guy is so young and still trying to come to terms with the fact that his mother left him and his father, and he doesn't even have the hint of why!!!!! All he can think of is that maybe, since he always refuses to have milk, his mom walked out on him... And now he's holding onto the belief that if he drinks milk of his own free will, then she'll come back...

Cut to a few days later, we see his dad adding salt to his wounds with all that "khubsurat aurat" crap!!!! No wonder he's become miserable; also burnt rotis with aloo ki sabzi and an alcoholic father doesn't help calm his already disturbed mind!!!!

Ohh... That moment he sees "the girl" on the other bus... He was momentarily snapped out of his misery and again he feels guilty for forgetting his mom and finding peace, even for a few seconds!!!! Nicely written...

Chha gaye viru!!!!! 😊

Would love to see how this story progresses... 👏

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Sumneet

@Zeffy

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: prabha.abha
Its so cute i love tis kid rudra so much. Thank u so much for the English version my dear friend 😉 😉

Ha Ha, thanks Prabha. Your most welcome, glad you liked it!!

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Sumneet

@Zeffy

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: shutter
WOW!!!!! You started writing fiction...
Will come back with more after I finish reading!!!!

👍🏼

Well not fiction, technically, Paro did get to read a few pgs from his diary in some episode, so thought maybe could have a different take on it!!

Sure do, would love to get your feedback!!

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Sumneet

@Zeffy

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Posted: 11 years ago

Thank you so much really appreciate it, dkr195, prabha.abha, sho-shweet, shutter, shreya_rc, Javeria3991, glad you had a good read!!

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Sumneet

@Zeffy

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: shutter
WOW!!!!! You started writing fiction...

Will come back with more after I finish reading!!!!

👍🏼

And I'm back!!!!! 😉
Okay we see the transformation of one innocent kid into a ruthless, heartless young man!!!! The poor guy is so young and still trying to come to terms with the fact that his mother left him and his father, and he doesn't even have the hint of why!!!!! All he can think of is that maybe, since he always refuses to have milk, his mom walked out on him... And now he's holding onto the belief that if he drinks milk of his own free will, then she'll come back...

Cut to a few days later, we see his dad adding salt to his wounds with all that "khubsurat aurat" crap!!!! No wonder he's become miserable; also burnt rotis with aloo ki sabzi and an alcoholic father doesn't help calm his already disturbed mind!!!!

Ohh... That moment he sees "the girl" on the other bus... He was momentarily snapped out of his misery and again he feels guilty for forgetting his mom and finding peace, even for a few seconds!!!! Nicely written...

Chha gaye viru!!!!! 😊
Would love to see how this story progresses... 👏

Well first and foremost 🤗 for taking the time to respond and add such encouraging words!! You really have triggered some thoughts, and yes I find this part interesting as he is small young boy, would love to dig deep into the current BSD Rudra avatar!!

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shutter

@shutter

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: zeffy2k2

Well first and foremost 🤗 for taking the time to respond and add such encouraging words!! You really have triggered some thoughts, and yes I find this part interesting as he is small young boy, would love to dig deep into the current BSD Rudra avatar!!

Oh yes... Would love to see how the story moves into his current BSD avataar... Build up a nice, good plot filled with suspense and thrill... 👍🏼

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javeria

@Javeria3991

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Posted: 11 years ago

Very interesting concept of penning down Rudra feelings and emotions as diary entries.

Awesome start. Rudra latest enteries are emotional and it's so sad that a son is now doubting on his mother love with time. He is restless because his mother isn't anymore with him to showered love on him. He is yearning for the attention of his mother but she is no where but he wants her at any cost and willing to do anything but it's all vain.

His father too is filling his mind against his mother, what can dilsheer do when he is also a victim of the betrayal. He only could take his kid away to another city for new beginning and to bury their past.

His only support in his harsh time is the friendship and soothing love he got from a girl for few minutes, that memory is precious for him and that really helped him out from his depression. That bus stand scene was really a cute.

Update next part soon and continue in English version.