FF:My passionate desire pg 16 24\10\11 MODNOTE PAGE 20 - Page 4

Originally posted by: abhaylover

Hey Tia

Febulous Start With the Brilliant Writing……Too Good 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

Loved the Start Buddy.👏 U rocked again.👍🏼 Contract Marrage Concept Always Works Than it will turn in to Love.😉 Ya but After Lot of Fights, Nok-jhok, Ruthana & Manana. Wow I am already exicted. Waise loved the Writing.⭐️ But I really didn't get the Connection of relations.😕 Sorry for saying this.😳 you have actually introduced limited characters but I am Still thinking that Who is Jay? 😕& Is Akash is Shaan;s Real brother or Shaan stays in a Big Happy joint Family so he Must be His Cousine😕,,,,,Urrghhh…..Yaar Explain it please.😳

Loved the Dadi.😊 I am Sure She is Going to Play the Biggest Role In Shanaks Life. Dadi Asked girls to leave the Room & After Dadi Leaves I Loved the Way u Discribed Khanaks thought process.👏 About her Chunri & Specially about the Jewellary,😆 Khanak gets Sacred at the Sight of Someone on the terrace & She Piks up knife 😲 (loved it when u wrote its her fav Weapon)😆 But She Clams After getting to know its Shaan. The bad Since Was Wow...it was just superb 😉 & plus the way you explain How Bad broked was a fun to read 😉……You have fantastically explain the Whole sinario.👏

Intially they both are Attracted Towards Each other 😉 But Will not say Any thing. Morning Sence was mind blowing.😍 Shaan wanted to Wake up khanak. But gets Mesmerised by her Beauty & Starts Admiring her.😍 Waise I Really Loughed a lot While Reading Maine kuch nahi dekha line by Shaan.🤣 Finally Shaan Splashes a water on her face & khanak gets up by Screaming "Daddu".🤣 Loved their interaction. Loved it when she leaves but jaate jaate she Said "Monster" to him.😆 & poor shaan is thinking ke uske Kaan baj rahe hain but Finally Burthal got to understand that Kaan tabhi Bajte hain jab Khanak aaspas hoti hain.😆

Loved Loved Loved the New Entry Akash 😊 (Waise I still didn't understand how he is related to Shaan)😕 But this Akash is awesome. Loved the Way he Teased him abt his SR.😉 & Mr. Malhotra Blushed for a While….Wow.😉 Loved his Dialogue "yar tu ne SR mnai he, ya war ki he?" 😆 I can so imagine how emberresed Khanak must be feeling. She had listened to all the talks na?😲 but Dadi once again Saved her. Khanaks is extermly emberrased as Dadi has seen the Condition of their room.😳 Dadi is not happy with her cloths Coz she is a nayi naveli Dulhan so dadi decided to Make her Ready.😊

Intrusting……. Intrusting…….. Intrusting…..I am Loving this Story Abhise…..Waise when are you planning to update the next part?😳 😳

Waise Why didn't u Explain the Flash back.😕 Matlab Shaan & Khanak knows each other Since years Kya? 😕What made them get ready for the Contract marrage? 😕What is their Past ? 😕How they Met? 😕 Ya their Families are interconnecred? 😕 Oohhh……these questions are constant in my mind. Isiliye asking ke Flash back Story kab milega? 😳

Waiting for the next part……….Jaldi dena. 🤗 🤗 🤗 🤗 🤗

Love

Pranjal.