Shanak - Sunny OS (Part 3) Pg - 9

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Krishna

@kubare

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Posted: 14 years ago

#21

Zzzzzzeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeennnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn God...loved it loved it loved it and please please post the 2nd part soonnnnnnn...caaaannnnnnttttt wait to read it soon...You have written what most of us are thinking and want to see...so..get down to writing ....😆

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RagSia

@RagSia

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Posted: 14 years ago

#22

itz lovely!

do continue.

would love to c it actually on tv happening between Shaan n Khanak!👏

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iluvmanar

@iluvmanar

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Posted: 14 years ago

#23

pls Zennn...dont be so modest ha...it was awesome....and agli part jaldi...warna...u know na...😆.....hum sare tumpar tut parenge...

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.Dilwale.

@.Dilwale.

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Posted: 14 years ago

#24

thanks guys! i am over whelmed, really. thank you so much. part 2 pakka coming tomorrow😳

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tofeeees

@tofeeees

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Posted: 14 years ago

#25

zenn that was amazing yaar!Very good! and i am SO glad you kept to the emotional bit of it as well, when shaan felt like hugging khanak, when khanak's eyes welled up with tears it was just perfect! See this is what i want! i want the emotional bit to remain because like i said sunny's look alike coming in is huge! way to go zenn! very well wrtten! :)

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Urooj

@rooj-i

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Posted: 14 years ago

#26

will come back and read soon...piramise

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.Dilwale.

@.Dilwale.

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Posted: 14 years ago

#27

@beenz

thanks hun! means a lot coming from the OS queen!🤗

it was actually my intention to make it a little emotional. i love intense shanak!

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tofeeees

@tofeeees

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Posted: 14 years ago

#28

lol what is this the OS queen?! i promise no one has ever called me that before!😲😆 aww everyone is equally good yaar! i was inspired to write through the ones i read here too so how can i be a queen?lol! no seriously zenn i really liked it! i was actually thinking of something like this anyway, you know where shanak's eyes would meet and it would be like an unspoken thing! this is truly what i would call intense good going yaar! i'm so glad you wrote! :D

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NinjaInPyjamas

@NinjaInPyjamas

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Posted: 14 years ago

#29

ou write so awesome!! SO you get the Best OS Debutant Award🤣

No, seriously speaking...it was very nice..crisp is the word I would like to describe it with..

loved the last phrase.."...slammed the coffee cup..." somehow...

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Sairaaaa

@Sairaaaa

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Posted: 14 years ago

#30

This is what I want to see in the ShaNak-Sunny angle!

^^Zen...I must say you're amazing; I simply loved it! I mean I love how it was all emotional,this is how Shanak should react when seeing Sunny. I love this whole unspoken connection between them of how looking at each other or Shaan wants to hug Khanak; it's very heartwarming in such a subdued moment 😳 The last bit takes the best stokes,you showed Shaan brilliantly! abit of insecurity and touch of jealousy,Just loved it!

I'll be waiting unpatiently for the 2nd part...It was too good! 👏

Edited by -Saira- - 14 years ago

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