Floating Ideas - One Shots!! Remorse-II - Pg 17 !

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hello People...

Me and my Khurafaati Dimag have come up with a writeup...I dont want to call it an OS...Because it would be doing beizatti of an OS...U people write soo brilliantly that,I can never come upto that level. So,I'll call this writeup - RBO ki Riyaasat ka Lutta Pitta Writeup...

I know...Its going to be boring and un-interesting...But please Humour me and read it...Maybe all those of you who have insomnia might fall asleep reading this. 😆😉

This is the scene inspired by the precap shouting match that Shaan initiated at the unsuspecting Khanak, over the infamous Anniversary Gift for MadNil !!

I Wanna Make it Upto You !!

Hearing the harsh words from him'.tears welled up in her eyes'She blinked her tears away wondering what she had done to anger him to this extent.He had never treated her this way,not even when she came between him and Natasha.Why was he being soo difficult ,aloof and ever soo evasive.Hurt and Broken by the sudden outburst,she slowly backed away from him'and ran up the stairs to their room.

Shaan regretted his words the moment they were out of his mouth,his expression revealed surprise mingled with frustration.He was surprised at the fact that he had actually spoken soo harshly to the only person who cared for him and loved him unconditionally.

"Khanak'Khanak !!"'he called after her retreating figure'.But she'd already rushed into the room and banged the door shut behind her.

Khanak rushed into the washroom and bolted the door behind her,crying uncontrollably.She'd thought that all the problems between them were over,she had expected to surprise him by writing his name on her gift for Aada and Bai.But this reaction was something she'd never expected.Slowly she took controlled herself and took deep breaths to calm herself and clear her mind on the situation.Something was terribly and horribly wrong and she needed to find out,because she knew that this wasn't the Shantanu she knew.Shaan was a very calm and chilled out guy,he was not the one to go around losing his temper on trivial things.She really needed to find out ,what was it that had wracked his nerves soo bad.And she vowed to find a solution to her husband's distress.

Shaan guiltily entered the room and looked around for Khanak,not trusting himself to call out her name,in case he broke down from all the tension.He was just complicating things even more by behaving like this with his wife.

Not seeing her in the room,he knocked on the washroom door and with a lot of effort,he softly called out ' "Khanak" ! Khanak'.M sorry ! Please come out'.I can explain'.I never meant for this to happen.You know how much I love you.

The door opened and Khanak came out,and walked past him without sparing even a glance in his direction''.In his ever soo charming style he caught her hand,stopping her on her tracks.He held her hand and bent down on his knees.She looked at him'He could tell from her red swollen eyes that she'd been crying hard.He cursed himself for always managing to end up as a reason for her hurt and anguish.

"I have to make it up to her"'he thought'.He lightly kissed her hand and holding her gaze,very cutely asked her "Will you be my date tonight?"'..Her heart melted and putting aside all the tensions,she lightly nodded her head in affirmative and said ' "Yes, Shantanu."

Precap - Joe's Cafe...Blast from the Past...Will Khanak find her answers ??

P.S - This is my first attempt at OS writing...plz no chappals and belans😆
P.P.S - The sequel to this writeup depends on when and most importantly IF ,I feel like writing and whether you have the guts to tolerate another writeup from me after this crappy endeavour.😆😆

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Posted: 14 years ago
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vandu its gr8 plsssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss go ahaed with it plssssssssssssss
u know i thought u will write a hot scene n there my dreams came crashing down wen i saw the wrd cafe😆

but i loved the scene very much plsssssssssssssssssssssssss u gotta continue this plsssssssssssssssssssssssssss
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Posted: 14 years ago
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WRITE MORE NOW😃.....Pleaseeeeeeeeee!😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: shanakyasharan

vandu its gr8 plsssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss go ahaed with it plssssssssssssss
u know i thought u will write a hot scene n there my dreams came crashing down wen i saw the wrd cafe😆

but i loved the scene very much plsssssssssssssssssssssssss u gotta continue this plsssssssssssssssssssssssssss

I can only Read Hot Scenes...
I cant write them😆😆😆...M pathetic and hopelessly embarrased at the thought of writing hot scenes....So no...U are NOT allowed to expect that from me...
And I dont even know If I will write again......M too moody and kaamchor to think and write soo much 😆😆
I had an idea in mind of what might happen on the show next...Instead of writing it as an idea...I decided to write it as a scene😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Vandu,
Awesome ya.... I love it... Pls continue! Shaan better be on his knees for 47 min before going to Joe's cafe😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
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lololol vandu ur such an ass
spo mean wen yr so gd at this imsure u willrock at the hot scenes but its ur wish...bloody kamchor🤣🤣
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: tvrasika

Vandu,
Awesome ya.... I love it... Pls continue! Shaan better be on his knees for 47 min before going to Joe's cafe😆

Ya Ya...!
Khanak ka pura badla lenge humlog...
The punishment for Shaan is 5 minutes kneeling down from Every SHANAK fan in the vicinity...For the Ghor Apraadh he committed by shouting at Khanak😆😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey it was so good...m actually expecting to see something like this..... pls continue ur os ahem...ahem... write ups😉
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Posted: 14 years ago
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(dis is my one.................hope u don mind posting it here...............if so let me knw) shaan shouted ay khanak like tht first time since thy discoverd their love..............khanak all shoked........sh ws crying all d day...............ddnt had food........n ws infact kping away fm shaan ..............shaan knwing everythng bt couldnt make out wt to do khanak.......thnking wt happend to shaan y he's angry....hs sh commited sum mistake or if he hs stop loving hm........random thoughts in hr mind dharam..........shaan baba khanak madam ne khana nai khaya.............aur aap bhi kuch nai bol rahe hain........kya hua(shaan thnking.......thnking..............kya kar raha hun me.............me khanak ko kuch nai kahna chahta..............bht pyar karta hun par aisa kyu ho jata hai bar bar................kyu me uska dil tod deta hun jab ki ek wo hai jo mujhe itna pyaar karto hai.................use mujh pe itna wishwas hai) shaan .....dharam gadi ghar pe wapas le lo.................. rat ke 10 ho rahe hain........shaan enter's d room........khanak ki aankhe sooji hain............ shaan ........eee......kh....khanak khnak leaves d room khanak re enters wid food shaan........tumne khaya khanak.............chup rahti hai..............doing sum almira job shaan ...kahank yar m talking to u..........yaar m sorry khanak.......still quiet shaan ........khank ke hath pakad leta hai khanak.......shaan tanu mujhe chodiye shaan ............plz mujhse baat karo khanak........nai jab aap kuch kahna nai chahte to chodiye........yaha me din bhar sochti rahti hn.....aap ayenge to ye karenge wo karenge......n app?????? shaan ............looks sad!!!!!!!!!khank .......aaa.........maim..........wo........ kahank....stops hm in bw.........rahne dijiye khana khaiye n so jaiye mujhe bht neend aa rahi hai shaan .......pl kahank meri baat suno kahank.....nai ab kuch ani.......us din aap ne mujhe samjhaay....ki aap kya chahte hain........jab me tayyar hui to aap achanak badal agae........maine kya kya nai kia..................ada bai ki tarah room sajaya............par aapko koi farak nai pada.................aap bhul gaye ...............kuch baat hai to mujhe batana th............par aap achanak shaan realizes abt tht book n all shaan.................says to hmself...........ye thk nai hai...........kahank is my wife uski ichcha ka dhyan rakhna meri responsblty hai shaan......leaves d room khanak..............bht der tak yuhi baithi rahti hai............ dharam.....madam khanak........dekhti hai its 12 nw hain dharam bah madam jaldi chaliye pool ke pas??????????? khanak........pool ke pas kya she runs like nethng aur ye kay khanak is amazed to see all pink prep done thr sh is in hr thoughts peeche se shaan hugs hr khnak......shaan ta shaan puts hs finger on hr lips.......... shaan ..................nai kuch mat bolo.............bat karte karte 6 mth ho gae............ab kuch nai...........
shaan ...........rubbs hs hand on hr lips thn face thn neck
kahnak.............holds her hands
shaan..........don stop me today........aaj nai......shaan aur kahank ko ek ho jaane do
khanak closes hr eyes
shaan gave hr d most passionate kiss eber
n lifts her to d bed
shaan ................on top of her......khanak looking like moon
n thn shaan gives all damn hot kisses
kahank holing hs shirt
n gave bak a sweet kiss on hs chest
n thn its all over
shanak r one nw forever
hope karishma n all loved it
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: The_May_Rose

WRITE MORE NOW😃.....Pleaseeeeeeeeee!😊

May....!! May !! U read it??😲....Omg...Why did I even post...Now U ,Amrita,Beeni,Simi,Sampar,Pooja and all other Star writers will read this trashy writeup of mine !!!😭😕😆😆
Koi nahi....This will reinforce your faith in yourselves....that you people write soo well😆
Thank You for humouring my attempt😆😆 *giggles*
Edited by togepe30 - 14 years ago

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