OS attempts---Love will find a way!updated page 2

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Dear RBOans,
Happy Monday! I hope it is indeed a happy one for us...😊
Tis is my first attempt in writng a scene ever...but these 2 BURTHALS are driving me nuts, they are totally lost! So I thought that they needed some help from the God Almighty..so here goes..hope you like it...
DIVINE INTERVENTION

In his room Shan is trying on different sherwanis, each one makes him look more groovy than the previous. But his mind is anywhere but here. he was thinking about Khanak and imagining her. He knew that he loved her desperately, more and more each day. It seemed that somehow his love for her was growing stronger and he just couldn't imagine a life without her. She occupied his thoughts 24/7 and he was behaving like a lovesick fool,phool like she would say..he smiled. He even missed her cute mispros, infact he missed everything. He coudln't imagine Natasha taking her place..no. He couldn't think of her in this room, sleeping on his bed, that belonged to Khanak. He couldn't imagine her bringing him chai in the morning like Khanak used to. He chuckled when he remembered the jadibooti wala incident, he had had so much fun teasing her and playing with her. Khanak had that knack, she brought out the child in him and he loved her for it. All those sweet memories played back in his mind....Khanak in her light blue sari, so beautiful and her bhas in the bus stand, how could any girl be so gullible? Khanak dancing in the rain in total abandon and he watching her, Khanak making him believe in himself, wanting to prove himself just for her sake...and of course her smile and tinkling laughter, music to his ears. Yes I know now that I can't live without her no matter what, if I let her go I will lose myself too...

SH: Shan beta, dude go and tell her that you love her, you have never done that have you? Don't let your ego stop you, or you'll lose her. Woh to ek typical bhartiya nari hai, seedha nahi bolegi ke mujhse woh pyaar karti hai jab tak main use nahin bolunga. BUt she has told me indirectly several times..with her beautiful eyes, and her actions..hell, who would eat meat for someone else and go against their very identity? Nobody, but she was ready to do so..and me, I'm so blind!! And that kiss she placed on my forehead that night...uuummm it sentme to heaven!! I could feel her love in it. And who would tolerate all the hateful things I've said to her and still be with me? She could only do that if she loves me for me..and I love her for her!!! Yes, I will tell her and then I don't care about any body else. I can't see tears in her eyes again.

Having made up his mind he walks out of his room towards Khanak's room with a happy smile on his face, when he hears voices in his mother's room. He was going to walk by when he heard Khanak's name...his curiosity perked, he stopped to listen..

MD( Madhavi): Khushboo, I have to give it to Khanak, she is indeed a very nice girl. If she wanted she could have spoiled my plan and spilled the beans..but she didn't.

Khush: Yes mom, you are right, Khanak has dug her own grave, she loves Shan too much that she doesn't want to turn him against his mom, though his mom is the one who is separating her from her love.

MD: Yes, she could have told Shaan about me replacing that letter which he had written to her, which I gave instead to Tashu. She could have told him that I didn't want her here, so I was trying to make Shaan hate her..but she didn't,( she laughed). Khanak,meri bholi bhali bacchi, tune mera kaam itna asaan kar diya!

Outside Shaan stood stunned, he couldn't believe what he had just heard! His mother was behind all this, and he had been blaming poor Khanak all the time. Poor thing, how she had suffered in silence..his taunts, he had been so mean! When all along she had done nothing wrong. She had been a victim of his mother's and Bhabhi's plans. He couldn't believe that his mother had done this, Khushboo bhabhi yes..after all Tashu was her sister, but his mom! Maybe all this money and glitter had blinded her so much that she couldn't even see what her son had wanted and needed to be happy... Poor Khanak, my darling, I love you so much!I need to see her right away, before she runs off again!

He went into Khanak's room and at once felt her presence in it. Her faint perfume which reminded him of jasmine assailed his senses and he felt excited and calm at the same time, was that possible?

SH: Khanak, mein aa gaya hoon. Bahar aa jao,ab koi problem nahi hogi. Mujhe sab pata chal gaya hai, bahar aao na Khanak. Mujhe tang mat karo....

When she didn't come out he started to get worried. He looked in the BR, the cupboards were empty, her peti was gone. He stood there and put his hands on his head..not knowing what to do when he noticed a piece of paper on the nightstand...

Khanak had written...Shantanu, mein jaa rahi hoon, shayad meri zindagi mein aapko pana nah likha hai. Mujhe bhagwan par bahut bharosa tha, magar shayad woh bhi meri madat nahin karna chahte hain. Main aapse bahut pyaar karti hoon par yeh aapse keh na saki.Aapne jo kuch mere liye kiya, uske liye Thankyou! Aap hamesha khush rahen, yahi meri prathna hai...

Aapki, Khanak.

Tears came rolling down Shan's face. He thought, meri pyaari Khanak, tum kabhi kisika bura nahi chahogi...Isliye mein tumhe itna pyaar karta hoon.

He rushed down the stairs and out of the house...he had to find his Khanak before it was too late....

PS. Hope its not super long..please comment, thanks!!😊
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destinylove thumbnail
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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey dear sumiv
superb!!!! excellent!!! funtastic!!!
i had tears in my eyes honestly!!!
you have so beautifully brought out the very essence of khanak's character. well done dear!!!
please continue as and when possible. thanx for this one. have a nice day.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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awww sumiv it was lovely :) truly divine intervention LOL...i hope he finds his khanak now! :D
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi Simi,
First, congrats for wrting an OS!

Second, what a debut:) Amazing...beautifully written and the imagined scene fits right with the characters of Shaan and Khanak!

Continue...

and I hope to God we have a good scene today!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Cant they give us a scene like this????Now this was really really good.I so hope it happens this way.This would be awesome.Very high quality writing Simi.Plz do write more.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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👏👏😳 haiii truly n awesomely soooo sweet..this is our shanak.tooo good sumiv awesomely written loved it simple n so beautiful
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Awesome !! Loved it !!

Kaash aisa kuch hota show me !!

Do Keep Writing !!

Luv,

Vandu

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Posted: 14 years ago
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lovely ....if they show something like this in this current odd track i will faint for sure
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: sshriyaa84

hey dear sumiv

superb!!!! excellent!!! funtastic!!!
i had tears in my eyes honestly!!!
you have so beautifully brought out the very essence of khanak's character. well done dear!!!
please continue as and when possible. thanx for this one. have a nice day.

That was so sweet of you to say so, thanx!!😃
simikr thumbnail
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thankyou all for the lovely comments, infact I thought that GOD in heaven should definitely do

something to save this cute jodi....awww the are so ssweeet!!😆 I almost feel/wish sometimes
that it is reality TV, I'm very attached to them!! LOL
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