~Insensate- A poem~

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As requested by kabhiforever...
Thanks Farz and everybody who commented on the previous poem :)


~Insensate~


Gasping at the sight before me

Breathless I stood, the silence penetrating my head

I arched back, giving up life

Couldn't see it; I am not strong.

So many questions to ask, so much to tell you

Can't talk to you, can't feel anything

Barring the whip of realization

Lifeless, you're sealed.

I see you, enveloped with death

My soul breaking with every heartbeat, like heated glass

I drown back in the ocean of my regrets

Yeah, I'm still numb, shaking.

Your voice was my euphony,

Your name my litany

But who do I call now

Now that my heart's shattered and mute.

I touch your face one last time, reminiscing the best days of my life

With you, I regret every moment spent together

Because knowing how great this love would be

Would have had me being in less pain

But now that I've lost you

Nothing is going to revolve time back and usher you back

You're gone, with the wind towards the clouds

For forever.

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Yeah, its a sad poem. Asad dies and this is Zoya's perspective. They hadn't confessed yet still they were much like skinny lovers. And before Zoya could have said anything to him, he leaves. She's numb. And I'm in a dilemma.. why did I even write this 15 mins ago. Don't know, it just occurred to me that tragedy is my forte! Don't get me wrong but I find myself expressing myself writing tragic rather that other genres of poems.

Tell me how it went!






It's a sad poem where Asad is dead and I've written it from Zoya's point of view. Do read it :)






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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome though it's a sad 1 😳
Don't know what makes u write it
Bt ur poem deserves tiz >> 👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Omg!!!!!!!!

This is damn amazing👏




U wrote it sooo well👏





I can feel all the emotions of zoya.



U write so f**king damn amazing I can't tell you in words👏



Really really believe me its brilliant and amazing



I can just say now I am biggest fan of your writing❤️




And thank you so much for writing this😛



I love you for this..



mwah mwah.




do you wtite any ss or ff if you do plz tell me and send me pm



last time loved it keep writing because u write damn good.





Edited by kabhi-forever - 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: kabhi-forever

Omg!!!!!!!!

This is damn amazing.




U wrote it sooo well.





I can feel all the emotions of zoya.



U write so f**king damn amazing I can't tell you in words.



Really really believe me its brilliant and amazing.



I can just say now I am biggest fan of your writing.




And thank you so much for writing this.



I love you for this..



mwah mwah.




do you wtite any ss or ff if you do plz tell me and send me pm.



last time loved it keep writing because u write damn good.






That was l-o-n-g! Thanks dear!!!! Seriously, you insisted me to write and voila! It turned out to be good. Thanks for saying all that and of course I'll spam your inbox if i write again 😆 MUAH!! Love you! Thanks again for reading!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nithiya95

Awesome though it's a sad 1 😳
Don't know what makes u write it
Bt ur poem deserves tiz >> 👏


Thank you for saying that! Even I dunno what inspires me to write, I just write whatever come up in my head! Thanks for reading!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: 713_Sparkles


That was l-o-n-g! Thanks dear!!!! Seriously, you insisted me to write and voila! It turned out to be good. Thanks for saying all that and of course I'll spam your inbox if i write again 😆 MUAH!! Love you! Thanks again for reading!

welcome



It turned out to be very very good not only good.




Yes plz do spam my inbox.



And plz write something soon.



Love u too.


You are most welcome dear.






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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: kabhi-forever

welcome



It turned out to be very very good not only good.




Yes plz do spam my inbox.



And plz write something soon.



Love u too.


You are most welcome dear.



Sure! 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: 713_Sparkles



Thank you for saying that! Even I dunno what inspires me to write, I just write whatever come up in my head! Thanks for reading!


U should definitely write more 😉
would love to read more of ur poems 😳
Welcome...actually thanks for writing an awesome poem 😳 😆
Edited by Nithiya95 - 11 years ago
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'But who do I call now?'




That.


:'(


Sparkles. That might as well be us.


When I read. I thought of me.

Read it from my point of view.

Litany, you said. Didn't we all chant their names?



'Couldn't see it; I'm not strong'


Is this not us? Just like you've expressed Zoya without Asad, you've expressed us without them, both.


'But now that I've lost you
Nothing is going to revolve time back and usher you
back'



Sparkles, this piece they touched my heart. So very close to home.

Reading it again with Zoya in mind, I'm thinking - you're right. She's not strong enough.

Then I tried again with Asad this time. Her name was his litany.

Truly very heartfelt. You've outdone even yourself. Maybe.



Thank you so much for thinking of us worthy to share this meaningful work with.



Hugs.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nithiya95


U should definitely write more 😉
would love to read more of ur poems 😳
Welcome...actually thanks for writing an awesome poem 😳 😆


Sure 😳 Thanks again😳

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