Asya FF: THE DARK SHADOWS *thread 2 link added *5/5/14* - Page 50

Oh Eshi its so touching update.

I loved this part...Asad in pain... 😭

awesome!! but what happened all of a sudden?? what r those marks??

Hi there! You write well. I just get a little confused sometimes when the story jumps from one scene to another. I have just started reading the story and I noticed in the second update first you mentioned Asad was sitting at the dining table in t-shirt and 3/4th's and then you said he threw his jacket and tie on the couch when he cornered Zoya. also you ended that chapter with Asad asking Zoya - So you want to work and then the new chapter started without any mention of a conversation between them..

Please don't get me wrong.. I am not criticizing your writing at all.. I really appreciate it when all of you have such good talent to write and make a story out of your imagination. I just want to help perfect the talent you possess by pointing minor errors that I notice..

Keep writing!! Its awesome :)

Thanx for the pm
Awwesome update!
loved the way u described it
very eagerly waiting for the next part
continue soon 😊
Allah miyaa, dilshaad khan ji wrestler hai?."lol 😆

great update

hey nice update!! eager to know what did aryan say to Zoya..

Awesome updt dear...lvd it thoroughly... Continue soon 😃

wonderfull update...

eshita why did u cut the romance part out