FF: All the Right Moves - Chapter 14, page 129 - COMPLETE

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Waqt Zaya

@WaqtZaya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#741

"Can we stop for a candy bar, Phupee?" she asks sweetly.

Dilshad frowns at her. "Why? Do you feel faint, Zoya? Do you need to rest?"

"No," she looks back at Asad and winks slyly. "I just suddenly have a craving for rich, sweet chocolate."

Asad jerks to stop, confused. Suddenly he hears Zoya's voice in his head.

"I love those beautiful brown eyes. Every time I look into them I feel like I've drowned in a pool of warm, rich, melted sweet chocolate."

He has to duck his head to hide his small, tight smile. "Mahendra Singh Dhoni, you have nothing on me."

THIS PART STOLE IT ALL. 👏

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krati

@krati5

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Posted: 11 years ago

#742

He has to duck his head to hide his small, tight smile. "Mahendra Singh Dhoni, you havenothing on me."

🤣 what a way to end the most amazing update😆.. rest i'll comment later. i hv to control myself from laughing this much...👏... hehehehe🤣

too good yaar!!! superb

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Mahima

@Mahima_13

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#743

wow... this part was awesome

I so loved reading it

The way Dilshad understood Rohan was superb... her kindness was beautifully shown

Asad as the tiger ready to fight anyone who harmed his family alone was so perfect

Najma not being sidelined and Being brave was something really new

Zoya being the life of the family and smiling was a magical site

Rohan understanding that he is not alone was so well written

AsYa relation was definitely shown indirectly.. the way Asad was scared to loose her and jealous of MSK...

superb work yaar,,, 👍🏼

love your work as always

will patiently be waiting till 17th march

luv

Mahima

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@Zola029

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Posted: 11 years ago

#744

Awesome update !

Loved it !

Dilshad was fabulous ! 👏

Loved the way she made Rohan see sense !

She's really kind !

Asad 👏 As always protecting his family !

Fianlly Rohan knows that he's not alone !

Zoya and Najma have been with him since the beggining !

The last scene was so cute😳

Great job 👏👏

Eagerly waiting for the 17th March 😃

Thanks for the pm (:

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Amna

@...KSGmiAmor...

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#745

I'm already waiting for 17th March! 😆

I just love long updates! ❤️

Thank u Thank u Thank u

You write such brilliant descriptions man! I could almost see the scenes play out in front of me. such an amazing update ... loved it so much

The best one was with shirtless Asad 😳...KSG's perfectly Six packs! I'm swooning at the image in my head. 😆 😳

I miss him so much

Rohan turned out to be a good man. i cried for his pain. And what he didfor Navi was amazing . loved that .Thank god! 😃

Dilshad is such an awesome character in this FF. She's flawless! Perfect

i seriously wish for a mother in law like her😆

And the last few dialogues! Sighs!

Sweet chocolate

17th March kub aayega? 😭

Asyalicious update coming soon 😉😉😉

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SovaSana

@SovaSana

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#746

An amazing awesome update😊👏

it was full of suspense, thrill and excitement and pretty emotional too

i simply love dilshad in this story

she is truly an angel

it was pretty heart wrenching knowing about rohan's past and how he blamed himself for everything that happened

u are really very good with words

the way u describe it feels as if i can play the scenes in front of my eyes

i am counting days till 17th march

hope u will be back soon with yet another update

thanks for the pm😊

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akaswan

@akaswan

Dazzler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#747

Awww again an awesome update

This story is just Awesome

So the truth il finally out

I feel bad fro ROhan but now everything is alright

I'm alredy waiting for your next update 🤗

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sona_naksh

@sona_naksh

Sparkler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#748

Amazing ...just amazing ...i luvd each n every bit of it ...n it is so very beautifully written ki i can imagine everythinv happen right in front of me ...
waiting for march 17 ...
thnx for pm

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ChocoBerry

@ChocoBerry

Rocker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#749

Thanks for the pm Paly. I loved the update. Every scene and dialogue was so well written. I could picturise the whole drama unfold in my mind and it felt no less than a blockbuster movie.

The way Asad kept pulling Dilshaad to himself to protect her, Zoya n Najma taking small steps away from the others for safety n as you revealed in the end to capture the whole thing on their phone. That was just so amazing.

That s*****g Arun got what he deserved. The pointb Asad made of making Arun go through the police grilling him was a good idea. Lucky and Sunny would never want to take on Asad Ahmed Khan and so would never open their mouths, they definetely now know what he can do with his bare hands.

The way Asad started understanding and trusting Rohan by the end of the whole fiasco was definetely a surprise. Loved the way Zoya still manages to pull Asad's leg in the end, it was so cute and Asad understanding what she ment was super. Loved the little teasing that happened there.

Hope all stays well here now. Most importantly will miss you for the next month as I always looked forward to Mondays only coz of the updates we got from you.

Thanks for the pm n please remember to pm me when you update on 17th March.