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madhvi4gurti

@madhvi4gurti

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#31

im speechless after reading this!!!

the result was the same but still the way u wrote it made me cry a little more!!!...😭

idk why but the current QH track is unacceptable for me...its too painful!😭

Gr8 job here dr!

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Ankita

@Violet_orchid

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+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#32

it made me cry..asya's pain always make me cry...

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Surish

@Surish

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#33

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@metoyou

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

#34

Before you start to attack, mujhe explain karne ke liye ek mauka toh do...

Woh...actually...Miss Monica, who kya hai na...

Actually, koi reason nahin hain...I just forgot 😲 (hides behind the couch from your deadly glare) Thanks for the reminder though! Tum nahin hote, toh kya hota??? Kuch nahin hota, bas tumhe kuch aur din intezaar karna parta mere comments ke liye. 😆😆

Okay cut the crap, coming back to your wonderful wala OS.

My morning has just started. I read it once again and the emotions are back again. Do I need to say that this absolutely wonderful? Yes, I need to say it because I have to make sure you understand that you are one of the most talented writers here on the forum 👏

Be it romance, drama, comedy you always give us good stories. Like this one; kaash yeh scene show mein hota. I really felt the scene was a bit rushes. They could stretched it out a bit more, make it an AsYa scene, to show what they went through at that moment.

Expressions wise KSG and SJ did a fantastic job in the show but a few more dialogues would have made it even better. But koi baat nahin. Thank God we have you here who does listen to her readers😉😃

Ki aap, sirf aur sirf, meri hain (He knows, she knows and even HE knows)

"Aur iss sach ko, koi nahin badal sakhta. Khuda bhi nahin.'' (Exactly, because they are meant to be) 👏

Before her was an emotional, selfless, loving and incredibly understanding human being (Kaash woh thoda selfish bhi hota toh yeh din nahin aati)

to not be able to see him everyday. To not be able to tease him everyday. To not be able to lean on him, when she needed her pillar of strength. (This is a teaser for us what we will get to see in the show in the upcoming weeks. AsYa missing each other like hell. Every second will look like years...one hell of an emotional ride)

They knew. This was it. Their test of true love, began now. (They came, they left, they conquered...have faith, they will be together once again)

Do you want me to say more? Ya phir sazaa dehna chahti hoon because of the long wait 😛

You know that I can go on and on with my bhak bhak, but I cannot guarantee you that all of it will make sense 😆

On a serious note: Thanks a lot for this really beautiful and emotional OS, Monica.

Its always a pleasure to read your work. I am so glad you are back. We all missed you (I did for sure) and now I am just looking forward to even more. Take care and and and...a super wala hug for you!!! 🤗

Edited by me2you - 12 years ago

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Ayra Nuzhat

@-LazyLamhe-

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#35

You know what? QH CVs are looking for someone in their team..I plead you to go and work with them!!

How do you manage to write such beautiful scenes??

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Mayee2217

@Mayee2217

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#36

What can I say..hope they did it like this on the show😭 rather than Asad dragging her out like that..can you pleas continue?like what happens after they enter SM?Cause that scene also wasnt up to expectationsbetter reading your writing than watching those non-promising scenes!