FAASLE II: QH FF. Links to Threads I and III pg 1 - Page 61

Originally posted by: anushreemishra

How do you do it di?how do you make us live every moment,make us feel every emotion that the character goes through?need i say that this was a brilliant update...you are a fabulous,fantabulous and an amazing writer and if this was the one of the challenging thing that you ever had to write then it was the one of the challenging and heart wrenching piece of work that i ever had to read...i you have portrayed each and every emotion so so so beautifully...i started to tear up as soon as i read the disclaimer

Thanks Anushree. Your comment is what drives me to write...I was a bit nervous about this part as it's a bit graphic and emotional. Your response made it worthwhile for me to write it😊

When walked into the mortuary and saw the dead body i felt as if i was her standing there trying to identify the dead body of the love of my life...It was as if i was right there not ready to accept that my love is no longer alive...

I loved zoya's optimism and her never give up attitude...i know everybody is in denial for sometime when one comes across such situations but m so proud and happy to see the emotional connection between asad and zoya...its like they are two bodies one soul... zoya is not ready to believe that asad is no more and she is right he is alive and i guess the dead body is of Arjun and this is where the small scene between asad an arjun comes into play...arjun had asad's wallet all along and asad is indeed alive and if i dare guess he will be in dubai where he may come across Razia and zoya's sister...

I loved how najma finally took charge and decided to give zoya a break after seeing her condition...

Dilshad and zoya scene was just heartbreaking...fining solace in each other was so beautiful...i loved najma's lines "aap mein aur bhaijaan mein koi farak nahin hai.Aapka dono ka dil Zoya ke liye rota hai aur aapki zubaan usey rulaati hai."

Dilshaad and Zoya have a complex relationship. This is one relationship that will give Zoya a lot of challenges

I am so happy to see zoya not giving up and its right wen people say love makes you grow into a better and stronger persona nd today i felt how much zoya has grown up...she forgot about all her wants and needs and all she cares about is asad and his memories are enough to keep her going...

Well destiny has finally caught with Rashid and he is paying for his Karma...i think here zoya will develop a bond with asad's father and may be asad will come to know more about zoya's family...

yes, this is the beginning of Rashid's redemption now

And the first one again🥳 love ya Anushree😊

Originally posted by: -KSGsmitten-

unres

I am speechless. You are so damn good! Hats off! Applause!

It made me cry, made my heart plummet and breath hitched! Seriously.

The mortuary scene was spot on! 👏 Shouldn't have taken the disclaimer lightly. 😵

Dilshad scene was heartbreaking! 🥺 Loved the interaction between Rashid & Zoya. 👍🏼

Can't wait for the next part. Please update soon. Dying for an update on Asad.

Originally posted by: me2you

Kya kahoon Di...aapne toh mujhe rula diya 😭

What kind of day is it today...waha real show mein we see AsYa finally hug and here you make me cry by separating them... Should I jump in the air out of happiness or should I open a new box of Kleenex to wipe my tears? Karoon toh kya karoon...

oh oh Narges...agar kleenex nikaal liya hai tho iska matlab I was successful in conveying my message. Don't worry, things will start looking up next part onwards😉

But why do I have the feeling that Asad is not death. He must have got hurt very badly, in fact I fear for the worse: memory loss. Not sure if Razia knows how Asad looks like but suppose that the ship has reached Dubai and she has found him? Or maybe Zeenat in that case?

Zoya is right, usse kuch nahin hua hai. But I am sure, koi na koi twist toh zaroor aane wala hai.

wait and see😉

This was indeed a very emotional chapter. You have not let me down or disappointed me at all. Normally, I do not want to have any expectations at all (from anyone and anything) because that will lead to disappointments, but I am always excited to read your work and never ever have you failed to impress me. You have always stood up to my 'expectations' and this emotional chapter was definitely one of the best parts.

thanks again..this part did drain me a bit but I am glad i was able to convey my message

The way you described the whole hospital/mortuary scene was absolutely brilliant. Very realistic. mujhe almost ulti aa rahi thi. mujhey bhi (while writing)😭

I really hope Dilshaad becomes not that weak that will affect her health negatively. Agar unko kuch ho jaye before Asad comes back..?!😲

let's see

Why was she doing this? She questioned herself. It'd be easy to walk out at this moment. Isn't that what all her friends in New York would advise her? Move on, sweetheart. It's not worth it. He's gone. You were just asked to identify his corpse. His mom hates you. Your dad has walked out on you. You are no longer enrolled in college. Your employer just yelled at you. Your salary is peanuts; couldn't even buy you a decent dinner with friends. (Very well said. I do not want to offend anyone but people who live in the West (USA, Europe) are more individualistic therefore they might not 'invest' a lot of time and effort in relationships. It is about 'I'/'me'.

People from the East/Asia are more collectivist (it is more about 'we') means relationships hold more importance than the individual. Zoya might have lived most of her life in New York but, at heart, she is still the Indian girl with her norms and values. That is why, she will not give up because she knows she is destined here. Again, my intentions are not to hurt or offend anyone's feelings)

A very big THANK YOU to you for writing such a brilliant, painful, heart wrenching, emotional but above all very beautiful chapter. 👏

it's hard to generalize but yes, people in the west do tend be more self directed and think about themselves before others...here i just wanted to highlight what Zoya has left behind in the US in exchange for her life in India. Also, wanted to make Zoya more human in having such thoughts and not a saint

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Originally posted by: -BadtameezDil-

Omg this was such a gripping update! How do you write so well? You portrayed their emotions so well my heart went out to all, and like Zoya I too have a feeling Asad can't be dead! But did you kill of my Arjun?😔 I like how you used him in the story btw😃 love how this FF is turning out and its definitely my favourite one! Loved it! Cont soon.

Originally posted by: delena90

Fantastic update Sangeeta. Poor Zoya...I can't imagine walking into a morgue to identify a body. *shudders*

thanks Pri. yes, that was the hardest part to write

So, obviously the dead body is Arjun (I liked him...😒) but then it begs the question where the heck is Asad?

will find out in next part😉 we have had three Asad less parts

Zoya and Najma were great and I am absolutely loving their relationship. Dilshaad needs to come around but I wonder what will make her change her mind.

najma-Zoya relationship is simple and an open book. Dilshaad-Zoya is quite complex

And now Rashid possibly telling Zoya the truth...just WOW! yes, Rashid's redemption starts now

Originally posted by: ..Kirann..

What was that?? I'm crying. Extremely emotional, painful and gripping update. You explained everything so well. I could imagine every single scene in front of my eyes. So Arjun is dead?? But where is Asad? I hope we get to see him in next update. That was amazing. Continue soon and Im loving these long updates:D

Originally posted by: webuser7

OMG! I am speechless! Really cannot describe what I felt after reading that. I wish I was half as eloquent as you!

I need to copy-paste your response on my hard drive for a rainy day😊 You sure made my evening/ night with your reply😊

For starters:

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Sangeeta, take a bow for a mind blowing, tear jerking, out of this world update. My goosebumps have finally cleared! phew...did u have to use kleenex? If not, then I need to re write it😆

Every character's feelings were so beautifully described:

• Najma's heart wrenching sobs and terror of losing the only father figure in her life.
• Zoya's fears of losing the man she loves, yet a strong belief that he's alive. In spite of her will power and utmost confidence that he is alive, I can see an emotional breakdown happening soon. She has no one to support her right now. Will she call and speak to her BB? Perhaps, she won't have the money to do so. Her father is as good as absent. Dilshad has shunned her. Najma is being emotionally blackmailed to stay away from her. Asad is missing in action. She is homeless (yes she has the hostel but its still not home) and almost penniless. Wow, the struggle for the NY princess begins! I cant see Ayaan becoming her friend, so it will be Rashid who ends up being her Dost?

yes, this is essentially Zoya's story and her struggle. I added the last introspection part when she wonders if she should go back...just wanted to keep her human and not make her into a saint overnight. Rashid is def going to be her father figure now

• I felt like I was reading a Robin Cook book with the description of the morgue scene. I can't make myself write about the details but suffice to say, Robin Cook's medical thriller books are amongst my favorites and I immediately had a deja vu feeling reading that portion. Bravo!! I could visualize the scene and ... sigh ... I can't talk about it anymore.

that morgue scene was the hardest one to write as I had to practically imagine the stench and ambience there😕

• Dilshad, Dilshad, Dilshad! Very well portrayed how she initially took comfort from Zoya then shunned her. Very natural human nature. You truly understand complexities and feelings of people. I can boldly make the statement that you are a good judge of character!

i am not sure about that but yes, am def learning the hard way, Dilshad-Zoya relationship is complex and again, i didn't want Dilshad to change 180 degree overnight

• Arjun Kirloskar. Yaha bhi Maha Sangam with Pavitra Rishta?? Biwi kaun hai: Purvi ya Ovi?! Why do I feel he's not dead either? Question is how did the dropped wallet land in someone's pocket? Sure you will answer the question soon!

yes, Arjun is Rithvik. I kinda liked him in the MS. I don't watch PR so no idea about his wife😆

yes, when he was about to give the wallet to Asad, it had become pitch dark. Let's assume Arjun put the wallet into his pocket so he wouldn't lose it but alas right after that there was an explosion

• Where did Asad land? Cast Away a la Tom Hanks? Hopefully, he is not in an unfriendly country. Guess he will be MIA or Lost at Sea for some time. Zoya has some lessons to learn from life. Poor baby! The struggle begins...

great guesses😉

• Ayaan: this character hasn't bonded with his bro but his heart sank nevertheless. I haven't connected yet with him. Need to see more of him.

i am keeping Ayaan as a supporting cast here😆

• Rashid: oh what worse punishment can a parent face than knowing you are responsible for the harm that's befallen your offspring! My heart did melt for this father's plight. How exactly does he plan to sever ties with the devil and how will he help his troubled family?

this is def the beginning of rashid's redemption track

• I have to bring up Zoya again. For me she was the star ⭐️ of this chapter (second to you, of course!!). Her introspection scene in the office shows how strong this character is. I love such strong, independent and working female characters and can totally relate to it! 😉

my heroines are usually strong...even though I am a KSG fan, my ffs are usually women centric

Yeah, I know! Wait and watch to get the answers to my questions!! 😆 of course😆

Loved the ending sentence: "Tha nahin," he lowered his gaze, "hai." Wah! Wah! Readers, punch line isse kehte hain!! 😃 shukriya shukriya😊

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thanks a ton once again😊