Sun raha hai na tu... AsYa OS - Page 3

Originally posted by: Sand_Princess

I got your PM and came to read.

1) I was happy that your grammatical sense is good. 😃 I hate poor grammar in stories.

2) Why didn't you write a little more? This was an OS... Yes, but you should've gone more into it. You were doing so GOOD.

3) The ending. I knew that would happen! It's always that way! 😕

4) It was a good storyline, but as I mentioned before you should've written more.

All in all, it was good. You're gonna be really good in no time.

Sand.

Originally posted by: -Crazy4AsYa-

heartbreaking but well written

Originally posted by: -HoneyBunch-

Very well written but it was so sad😭

Originally posted by: rajnid68

beautifully written. ..

these situations does arise in the armed forces..

thanks

Originally posted by: NAVI55

This was lovely👍🏼 but a sad ending😭

I did both...smiled in the beginning and cried at the end...I am an emotional fool after all

Please do write more and please pm me when you do...

Originally posted by: gowtu

Painfull indeed but beautifully written..
I loved it..

Originally posted by: -ARLover-

Thank you Gowthami! Glad you loved it!😳

Originally posted by: Tamara27

My darling... this is beautiful. Full stop. I love it!

It was so sad... I felt their love, their absense from each other's lives...

His missing her, her happiness over finally seeing him again, and finally... the realisation that that wasn't going to happen. Amazingly beautiful.

👏