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Posted: 12 years ago
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OMG CONTINUE THis soon!!! PLWASE PLEASE PLEASE THIS IS SO UNFAIR!!!!! u left us hanging!! 😭 Please continu it!!! Now I know how my readers feel lol..too much work! Please continue this was amazing!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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M gonna spam u lol until u decide to continue after all
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow!!! it is incredibly beautiful👏👏👏👏 you have to conitnue soon... and if possible please pm me. 😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Really heart touching update Sania..
Loved the way u describe ZOYA's POV..
Waiting for next update..Continue soon..
Thnx for PM..
Mariam...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: KSG_luv

OMG CONTINUE THis soon!!! PLWASE PLEASE PLEASE THIS IS SO UNFAIR!!!!! u left us hanging!! 😭 Please continu it!!! Now I know how my readers feel lol..too much work! Please continue this was amazing!!


Thank you soo much!! LOL, I'm working on a new update today! Trying to change up the story a little more so we can see our beloved Mr. Khan swim in guilt ;). Anyways yes! Now you know how I feel when you leave me hanging! Thank you sooo much again! ❤️
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Khushi2187

Really heart touching update Sania..

Loved the way u describe ZOYA's POV..
Waiting for next update..Continue soon..
Thnx for PM..
Mariam...


Thank you so much Mariam! Loads of love!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#17
Hello everyone. Here's back to my overly excited self posting updates so fast. I probably won't update everyday, not because I have a life or anything, but because it'll take me some time to build up this plot. Also, I want to start giving you guys longer updates, as I personally don't like small ones. I want to write with substance in the next update and actually bring something new to you guys! I did change the original story up a bit just so we can make our beloved Mr. Khan swim in a pool of guilt. Hope you guys enjoy this one, and don't hesitate to leave a comment. I'd really appreciate it, just because I'm a new writer and any feedback is extremely helpful to the story. Also, could you please let me know whether you prefer dialogues in hindi or english? I can write pretty fluently in both but I feel english is a better bet for the sake of all my readers. (I gave you a sample of both in this update) Love you guys as always! - Sania.

Dilshad: "Asad, where's Zoya? Is she okay?"

Asad: "Ammi, forget about her, are you feeling better now?"

Dilshad: "Why would you say something like that Asad? Where is she?"

Asad: "Ammi, all this arguing isn't good for your health. She left, and I wasn't about to let her stay anyway. She's the sole reason for why you are here right now, on this hospital bed. And you're asking about her?"

Dilshad: "ASAD! What in the world is wrong with you? Zoya got shot FIRST! She was trying to protect me all throughout. When she got shot, she didn't even move, she just kept standing there trying to save me!"

He felt a billion needles prick through his heart. He couldn't breathe. Flashbacks of his hands against her warm cheeks kept replaying in front of his eyes. He tried to move but it felt like someone was holding him down. Nothing made sense. He hadn't even looked at her state when he saw his ammi on the ground. He couldn't see the pool of blood that she was sitting in trying to save HIS ammi. He couldn't see her small hands covered in blood holding the side of her waist. She was hurt. She was more hurt than his ammi. She didn't even get help at the hospital. She was running in that state with him trying to get HIS ammi aided. HELL, she even walked towards him holding her waist and apologized for something that had nothing to do with her. He fell to the ground. He remembered her just turn around and walk away when he'd slapped her. She hadn't said a bloody word!


Goddamnit Zoya! You used to defend yourself so much. What happened when you actually needed to knock some sense into me? Zoya why couldn't you have just said so? Oh my god Zoya if anything happened to you...


Dilshad: "Usse abhi le kar aao Asad."

Asad: "Ammi mein apni jaan dedoonga magar Zoya ko kuch nahi hone doonga."

Dilshad: "Yeh toh tumhe pehle sochna chahiye tha"


(English Translation to the dialogues above)

Dilshad: "Bring her back Asad."

Asad: "Ammi, I'd rather die than let anything happen to Zoya"

Dilshad: "You should have thought about that before you accused her"


He rushed out of that room, feeling his heart give away to hers. He picked up his phone and feverishly gave a call to the head of police to file a missing person's complaint. He parked right in front of his front doors and ran up to the room that once belonged to her. It still smelt of her.

Love, Sania

Edited by pillamaster - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#18
👏👏Yayyy me first...good job gal...waiting for ur next update...👏
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Posted: 12 years ago
#19
have you also memorized the episodes.
even i too knit stores from the past in my head
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Posted: 12 years ago
#20

Originally posted by: etmartian

have you also memorized the episodes.

even i too knit stores from the past in my head



LOL I used to basically sleep thinking of different possibilities that could have happened instead, and the way asad feels the guilt in this episode was the best way to start! :) hope you enjoyed it!
Edited by pillamaster - 12 years ago

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