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Mahima

@Mahima_13

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: ...vula_kv...
so sweet and cute os mahima❤️

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Mahima

@Mahima_13

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+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#52

Originally posted by: shafy_MN
lovely

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sehrish

@sizzysehrish

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#53

Sis 🤗

wow again as OS by you

u know what i love ur writings a lot😊

don't know abt this couple more😆

but really loved the way u portrayed this👍🏼

all events u put together 👏

with flashbacks u created amazing story👏

love it ❤️

love u

sehr

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can call me Mrs Enrique Iglesias

@enrique

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#54

☺️Awww it was just soo sweet off him

The cake was hard 😆

And mr perfection spoiled the kitchen 🤣

All and all sweet os tha I loved it

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ritu

@janu1610

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#55

Mitwa Ishq pe zor nahi !!!!! AAK baked a cake for his lady love . it feel awesome . isn't it?😆

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Mahima

@Mahima_13

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#56

Originally posted by: sizzysehrish
Sis 🤗

wow again as OS by you

u know what i love ur writings a lot😊

don't know abt this couple more😆

but really loved the way u portrayed this👍🏼

all events u put together 👏

with flashbacks u created amazing story👏

love it ❤️

love u

sehr

<3 ya sis

Was waiting for your comment

I didn't scrap you abt the os cause you had exams

I remember the no thx rule

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Mahima

@Mahima_13

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: enrique
☺️Awww it was just soo sweet off him

The cake was hard😆

And mr perfection spoiled the kitchen🤣

All and all sweet os tha I loved it

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Mahima

@Mahima_13

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#58

Originally posted by: janu1610
Mitwa Ishq pe zor nahi !!!!! AAK baked a cake for his lady love . it feel awesome . isn't it?😆

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PhoenixRadar

@PhoenixRadar

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#59

Hi Mahima,

I enjoyed reading your OS! Even if it is long, you made it entertaining!

And Asad baking a Cake was one thing I had imagined myself! 😉 Wish to see it on screen! Nice title too!😛

Some points to just remember.. Though am not an accomplished writer, myself, but would like to help you out. I mean no offense to you.

First: Please use Punctuations so it helps out the readers to understand how the dialogues are being delivered.

Second: You've got a nice writing style. I like it.

Third: In the dialogues delivered, you could include their actions or small expressions in brackets, indicating how they were speaking, acting, etc..

I would like to read more of your works. Keep writing!

Annie

Edited by PhoenixRadar - 12 years ago

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sehrish

@sizzysehrish

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#60

Originally posted by: MjhtFan_Mahima

<3 ya sis

Was waiting for your comment

I didn't scrap you abt the os cause you had exams

I remember the no thx rule

aww <3 ya 2 sis

i read i when u posted but didnt get time to comment
finallyy i did comment then
ur writng attracts me 😉