WelCoMe to ABHIYA OS Celebration Updated-Page-150 JULY 30th - Page 92

awwsomee writing.b..loved it..it was dark one..b.hope nxt part cmng with happpy ending.

hey i was waiting for a story to update in dis thread... ya its different story... nice work koyel, i wish it to be little more eleborate... lovely work...

Different and Amzing Concept..! Waiting for next n Thanks for the PM!

Awesome OS Koyel an a very different concept.

Note: hey guys this time I am back sooner with Nafi, our sweet n naughty writer. 😉 Well I was amazed when she submitted it the day she told me about it.😊 She wrote it real fast!😊 It's a science fiction. I loved it & hope you all will enjoy it too. 😳 So please welcome her! 😃

--Indu

Nafi aka flora:-

This story is totally inspired from the story Visit to small planet' written by Gore Vidal...but I changed it into love-story!!! 😛Hope u all like it ...I don't know what crap I wrote!! 😆 Please ignore mistakes and don't forget to comment...😊

OS: THE VISITOR

The sun is shining bright...it's a beautiful morning!!! But something is coming...no, no seems like something is falling from sky!!! What is it!!

Slowly a luminous object arcs into view...looks like a giant car like structure!!!!

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Mr Dobrial sitting lazily on coach along with his only daughter Piya Dobrial watching tv...

Piya is busy in putting nail polish on her nails not caring what's going in TV!

It's interview of Dobrail on tv about his latest discovery about Mars... "Mr dobrail is famous scientist in America!!! He is very much conscious about things going outside the earth and try to discover them!!! According to him a space ship is going to land on earth full of alien to attack earth people!! And people are very frightened about it...General Spellding an army officer , Dobrial friend is informed about security around the country !!! Especially of him and his family...as he thinks the aliens will be attacking him first as he is a very good scientist!!! The interview in tv of him was telecasted live yesterday...today its repeat telecast!!

Mr Dobrial to his daughter- sweetheart!! Did u like the interview??

Piya replies- yeap I love it daddy!

My dobrial happily- what did I say!!

Piya pouts- that's not fair daddy!!

Mr dobrail angrily- it's not very appreciating when one's daughter won't listen to what one says while millions of people do!!

Piya rolls eyes- u know daddy...i always do listen to you!! It's that your interviews are always boring and useless that's why they always fly off my head!!

Mr Dobrail angrily- piyaaa!!!

From nowhere Mrs Dobrail appeared - ah darling!!! Don't shout too much!!! Not good for your health!!! We loved your interview!!

Piya took out her smart phone- ah I forgot!!!

Mr dobrail frowns- what!! To chat with that dumb Kabir!

Piya angrily- daddy he is not dumb!!! He is intelligent and hardworking!!!

Dobrail rolls eyes- huh intelligent!!! My foot...

Piya proudly- pls dad don't insult him!!! He is the perfect man ever I have seen...

Mr dobrail- oh yea of course he is quite gentle man!! But he has no proper get ups!!

Piya precisely - he don't need any get up!! He got what he wanted, a perfect farm where I am going to live with him after my marriage!!

Dobrail seriously- and you think I am going to allow that!!

Piya pissed off - I know where r u heading!!! U want me to marry a rich man!!

Dobrail shrugs -well there is nothing bad marrying a rich man other than a farmer growing potatoes!!!

Piya correcting- sweet potatoes daddy!!

Dobarail pissed off- will you stop correcting me!!

Piya argued- but he grows sweet potatoes daddy!

Mrs Dobrail- oh pls don't start quarrelling again!! It gives me severe headache!!

Mr dobrail- I am not quarrelling ...I was just giving some mind to Miss all- knowing here!

Arnab gave a glance to piya!!

Piya again got back to her nail polish work!

Suddenly kabir rushes in their house...

Kabir panics- oh...hhh...the..y are...cc...o...ming!!

Piya looks at him- who!!!?

Kabir takes a deep breath- those ghosts flying on a meteor!!

Dobrail rolls eyes- I think u didnt hear my interview!!! They are aliens in spaceships!!

Kabir replies- no its meteor and I am sure about it!!

Kabir pulls piya along with him and goes out...and Mr and Mrs. Dobrail following them!

Kabir shouts- loookkk...here it is!!! Gosh we are going to die anytime soon!!! It's falling right here...

Dobrail sighs- I was so right you r indeed dumb!! It's not meteor ...

Kabir - it is ...

Dobrail sternly- it is not!! Its space ship...

Piya pissed- enough u both!!! Its spaceship kabir!!!

Dobrail taking his mobile- need to call general for our protection!!

Kabir thoughtfully- I think it's a balloon...

Piya glares at him- why u have to prove each time that you r stupid!!! Don't u know how much dad is against you...

Suddenly a crushing sound heard...and there both spaceship finally lands!!!!

Piya shocked- wowww!!!! It's big...

Kabir rans to it- I am going to welcome them...

Piya screams- no kabir don't go darling!!! It can be dangerous...

Just then they saw a tall man wearing black coat ...totally fair walking towards them...

The man must be nearly 6 feet...

And when he came near them ...standing little far- have I mistaken???

Piya was shocked to see him so near...he was breath takingly handsome...

Piya little loud- oh man!!!

The man turns to her - what??

Mr Dobrail came front and looked at him shocked- he looks human!!! I mean beautiful one...

The visitor- I think I have mistaken...sorry !! I am going back...

The visitor was about to go when Dobrail shouted- wait!!! Who r u?

The visitor raise his eye brow- is it planet earth???

Dobrail surprised- of course it is!!!

The visitor grins- ah finally!!!

Piya was busy drooling in his beautiful dark blue eyes...

Dobrail confused- what finally!!!

The visitor- oh I was studying about earth!!! And wanted to come here always!!! And finally I did!!

Dobrail asks- r u alien???

The visitor- nope!!

Dobrail- nope???

The visitor- nah!! I am Abhay...

Dobrail confused- Abhay???

Abhay smirks- my name sir!!

Dobrail - but you r alien right???

Abhay pissed- that's not my introduction!!! I am Abhay...came to have a visit in this planet!!

Dobrail little angry- but from where u came?? Mars???

Abhay looking around- not exactly!!

Dobrail- moon???

Abhay going and sitting on bench- no one lives there!!

Dobrail comes to him- who r u???

Abhay ignoring question- is my costume right???

Dobrail confused- yea!! What u mean??

Abhay thoughtfully- I was right!! U guys r old fashioned..

Mrs Dobrail loudly- he is wonderful...completely outstanding!!

Abhay smiles- thank you!!!

Kabir came running- that ship...gosh it's weird!!!

Piya came out of blue eyed trance hearing Kabir's voice...

Kabir looked at Abhay- you r the guest???

Abhay smirks- ahaaan...

Abhay then turns to piya- hello miss!!! Dreaming about me??

Piya embarrassed being caught red handed- err sorry!!

Abhay grins- its ok!!! So you???

Piya confused- me??

Abhay sheepishly- yea your introduction I mean???

Piya smiles- I am piya...

Dobrail interrupted- my daughter!!! You tell me why u came here??? What u want???

Before Abhay could answer Dobrail realized something and horror struck him!!!

Dobrail screamed- oh my god!!! U...u came to destroy us!! Oh no god save us!! Generall!!! Call the genral...seize him!! Wait where is your fellows!!?

Abhay confused- fellows!!! I came alone...no one is interested in my planet other than me to study you guys!!!!

Dobrail felt relief that means he came alone...then he can't harm us alone!!

Dorail- ah soo...

Suddenly idea strikes him...

Dobrail- why don't u give me your interview??? People will be glad to know about you!!

Abhay excited- sure!!

In the mean time Kabir informed General spelding!!

Dobrail- come in then...

Abhay and Dobrail went inside while the other three followed him...

Mrs Dobrail- I like him!!

Piya dreamily- me tooo...

This didn't go well with Kabir- what u mean Piya??

Piya ignored - nothing!!

Kabir- isn't he weird???

Piya rolls eyes- of course not like you!!

Kabir didn't like that at all...

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Abhay sat down along with Dobrail!

Dobrail - so let's start!!!

Abhay - sure...

Dobrail taking a notebook- whats your name??

Abhay- Abhay...

Dobrail- full name???

Abhay - that's not important!!

Dobrail- so why u came here???

Abhay -to have visit around ur planet!! By the way u have great home but old fashioned !!(looks around house)

Dobrail - why you r so interested in us??

Abhay smirks- u guys r interesting n rather funny!! I love doing reading about you and your place!!

Dobrail- what about your people!!?

Abhay rolls eyes- they don't give a hoot about you!!

Suddenly a group army came...

General spelding- search them!!!

And all the army got scattered around the house...

Abhay got up- hello Mr spelding!!

Spelding shocked hearing him- who r u?? never seen u before!! How u know me??

Dobrail- he is the alien I guess name Abhay!!!

Spelding frightend- catch him!!

Before the army rushes to him Dobrail stopped them- let me over with my interview!!! And don't worry he came alone...

Piya came with tray of sweets and tea...

Piya blushing- here Mr.Abhay !! it's for u...

Abhay smiles- awww...that's so sweet!! Piya...

Abhay takes a bite- u made it awesome...

Piya shocked- how u know I made it!!

Abhay - I can read minds!!

Dobrail excited-woww...what more u can do??

Abhay smirks- well I can tell ur future!! Past...everything!!

Dobrail shocked- tell me what am I thinking??

Abhay - u r thinking that u want to be the greatest scientist!! your daughter thinking if she could get me ( winks at piya) your wife thinking if I could stay here for few more days...and Kabir thinking if he could rip of my head!!

Dobrail claps - bravo!!! You are amazing dude...

Spelding whispers to Dobrail- did u ask him why he is here?? He seems to be too much sweet!! I suspect him he is up to something...

Dobrail - whatever!! He is great...

Spelding whispers again- u r not doing in right!!

Kabir hears the talk between Dobrail and Spelding and he thought to take its advantage as he seriously wants to kick this man...

Kabir - well I think he has some purpose behind this!!

Pia frowns- what u mean??

Kabir laughs - oh come on why he will be so interested in us if he has no purpose!!

Dobrail thoughtfully- that's too right!!

Spelding angrily- I think he came here to dominate us...I bet he will bring his people here later!! Or maybe already informed them!!

Dobrail glares at Abhay- is it??

Abhay pissed off- didn't I tell u my people aren't interested in you!!

Dobrail grinned- then you r not going to dominate us!!

Abhay smirks- oh yes!!

Dobrail shocked- but you said your people are not interested in us!!

Abhay winks- don't you think I am alone is enough!!

Spelding shocked and terrified- I told you...he is not right!! Seize him...

All the army approaches to him but suddenly they can't move...

Abhay smirks- don't u dare!! You can't touch me...

Abhay gets up and yawns- ah I am tired!!! Give me a good room I will be living here!! Mr Dobrail I will complete my interview tomorrow...and don't worry u will be the greatest scientist!!

Abhay then looks at Piya and winks- yes darling you r not dreaming...i am actually living here!!

Piya smiles happily...as well as Mrs. Spelding!

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Abhay lying on the bed thinking how to make improvement in this planet!! He is going to be a king soon here...

Piya enters - hi!!

Abhay gets up- hello miss!!

Piya blushes- call me Piya!!

Abhay grins- ok!!

Abhay continues- u know u r beautiful!!

Piya blushes...

Abhay rubs his hand on Piya's cheek- ah I love that colour on you!!

Piya grins- u know I like you...

Abhay smiles- I think u have fallen in love with me!!

Piya shocked- how u know??

Abhay winks- forgot?? I can read minds!!

Piya blushes...

Abhay comes near her as like he will kiss her- by the way I like you too...

Piya smiles- errr...do you have girlfriends??

Abhay- yeap!!

Piya - how many??

Abhay- many many...I have girlfriends from my childhood!!

Piya shocked- what!!!

Suddenly Kabir enters- you bloody nonsense!! Get the hell out of here...

Piya shouts- shut up and you get lost!!

Kabir hold Piya's hand and angrily said- how can u forget me and come to this man!!

Suddenly he felt flying in air and landed on floor with a thud!!

Kabir looked at Abhay- how u do that!!

Abhay smirks- just like it should be done!

Kabir angrily- stay away from her!!

Abhay arrogantly- she doesn't love you anymore!! She loves me...

Kabir shocked- Piya!!!

Piya rudely- my dad was right!! I am not supposed to marry a dumb like you...

Abhay grins - now get lost!!

Saying this Abhay slams his lips on Piya making her eyes go wide!! But she also kept on kissing him...Kabir stood there shocked...

Kabir shouts- what r u doing??

Abhay between kissing- can't u see!!

After a while they parted...to gain breath...

Kabir disgusted- I can't believe you both did that in front of me!!

Abhay proudly- in our world that's nothing...

Kabir trying to make him understand- u know she used to kiss me too!!

Abhay frowns- so what??

Kabir- she is second handed...

Abhay pissed off- and I am 100^th handed!!

Piya frowns- and I don't care!!

Kabir angrily- she did everything with me!!!

Abhay - except sleeping...

Kabir disgusted- piya u can't do this!!! What have I done!!?

Piya blankly- u r stupid...now get out!! I love him...he is smart, advanced, hot and what not!!

Kabir- u will regret it!!

Piya smirks- I would have been regretting if I had to marry a farmer...

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Abhay standing with Piya holding her from waist...

Mr Dobrail grins- I am so proud of u Piya u took correct decision!!! So u both love each other...

Abhay smiles- ahaann!!!

Mr Dobrail- good !! take her to a visit to ur planet!! Till then we will prepare for the marriage!!

Abhay smirks- the marriage will be twice...

Mr Dobrail looks confused- first in Venus then in urs...

Kabir cried out- that means u guys hv to go to the nearest planet to the sun!! the most hottest planet...u will be fried!!! Better cut this off and make Pia marry me...

Dobrail calmly- again wrong mercury is closest planet not Venus!!!

Abhay sheepishly- never saw such nuts!!

Mrs Dobrail- ok u guys get off...see u soon!!

Mr Spelding- u r not doing it right Dobrail!! Making you daughter marry an alien!!

Abhay angrily- I don't like to be called with such names!!

Spelding- but u can't deny u r an alien...

Piya rolls eyes- much better than u stupid's!!

Kabir begs - reconsider your decision!!

Abhay and piya ignored him and got into spaceship...

Abhay shouts- I will be coming back in three days...i mean telling time of ur place!!! Don't think I don't remember about ruling ur planet!

Abhay looks at piya at crookedly- I knew it...

Piya shocked- know what??

The door of spaceship closed...

Inside the ship Abhay winks at Piya- I came here as a visitor and I am taking along with me a visitor!!

Piya - means???

Abhay slamming his lips on her kissing her passionately and says in between- I knew about u from long time!!! You r my true mate...

********************THE END*********************

Thank you for reading n please don't forget to give your views.😳

P.S. there's a good news guys! Koyel will be back shortly with another part of her OS. 😉

---Indu

Great work dear ... i loved it ;):)