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Nabakov_Musings

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Posted: 13 years ago

#331

Originally posted by: ..tora.tangled.
omg this update!!the best in this story till nw...!!!u have turned me literally speechless with this update koyel!!the way u describd abhay reminded me of the lines.."people who r too cruel once cared too much"and piya's part was painful too..omg..her father used to beat her??????she understands abhay soo well.,and the last bit was a shocker...brendn..omg he really???oh dear..pri..omg..

yay i am so glad you liked it. 😳 ya Kishor is just oh well..he will do anything for her but he can also do anything to her......ya Pri..oh well..

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Posted: 13 years ago

#332

Brilliant update Koel...👏👏

u know I've already read it twice...

The title was really nice..

The first part was really well written...😳

There comes a notion within the small, flowing tides of time where a creature can only cry out his misery , his loss and the manipulation around his life to an extent that it seems to be a peculiar , crude joke made by nature , fate and all the weapons of the cosmos..there is a point up to which one can mourn and break down for feeling the shatter of his heart , his soul and his body. As one fine day..these tears , these mornings and devastations seize and become numb to a point where your heart , soul and body seize to function and become engines of drawing out blood and devastation.

Abhay's condition was described perfectly..

And Pia is hopelessly being attracted to Abhay...She can see the pain in Abhay's eyes..and I hope she is able to change Abhay from the monster he has become to the old 18 yrs boy..I know that wont be soon .. and for now it really seems impossible ..

"Leave it , Alvi..it's not like I am not used to it."..Piya grew paler as she realized what she had said..

and OMG...Kishor used to hit Pia😭..she has been thru a lot in life..and she still has hopes for him and loves him..That shows how pure hearted she is..

atleast Pia has Alvi and Pri in her life.. I liked the way Alvi gave that lecture to Pia showing her concern for her friend..😊

and coming to the last part the way Pri made Brandon shut his mouth was amazing..

"Because more than any of us , it is you who is the most afraid and insecure out of all of us..you are standing within tons of people but you are still alone...making someone miserable just wso that you do not feel miserable anymore. Avash is alone , but not lonely. You are not alone , but you are lonely every minute of your life."

and I hope Abhay comes fast to Pri's rescue..It is only Abhay who can control Brandon ..and this would make Pia even more attracted to attracted to Abhay as she would get to see the better side of him..😳

Continue soon Koel

and thanks 4 d pm...🤗

Edited by _Sonu_ - 13 years ago

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Alicia thelwell

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Posted: 13 years ago

#333

wow great story plz update soon
I'm really looking forward to your next part of your story
thanks for the pm

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Nabakov_Musings

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Posted: 13 years ago

#334

Originally posted by: Alicia2001
wow great story plz update soon
I'm really looking forward to your next part of your story
thanks for the pm

glad you liked it. 😳

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---Priya---

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Posted: 13 years ago

#335

finally i caught p with all the updates koyel..

mind blowing.. love your writing style 😊

felt really bad for piya... her father used to beat her...

now what is gona happen to pri...

continue soon & thnx for the pm 😳

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Nabakov_Musings

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Posted: 13 years ago

#336

Originally posted by: ---Priya---
finally i caught p with all the updates koyel..
mind blowing.. love your writing style 😊
felt really bad for piya... her father used to beat her...
now what is gona happen to pri...
continue soon & thnx for the pm 😳

Glad you liked it 😳

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Resh

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Posted: 13 years ago

#337

Y no PM?

Anyway is last scene b/w pri & brand is cause 4 a storm b/w thm & their lives as u mention in ur CS?And will Abhay save her?

Oh so Abhay reminds pia of her father while Pia reminds abhay of mary.I jst wanna c how they both gel wid each other in future?And wht abt Pia was born 2 die 4 Abhay ?I mean kya connection hai?I personally adore dark men but they shuld b gud wid me😆😆Anyway cont...😳

Edited by cuteshrishti - 13 years ago

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Nabakov_Musings

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Posted: 13 years ago

#338

Originally posted by: cuteshrishti
Y no PM?
Anyway is last scene b/w pri & brand is cause 4 a storm b/w thm & their lives as u mention in ur CS?And will Abhay save her?

Oh so Abhay reminds pia of her father while Pia reminds abhay of mary.I jst wanna c how they both gel wid each other in future?And wht abt Pia was born 2 die 4 Abhay ?I mean kya connection hai?I personally adore dark men but they shuld b gud wid me😆😆Anyway cont...😳

arey?!?! tum meri buddy list se gul ho gayi and i realised that while giving joined pms to everyone in my buddylist and i don't know how tum kaha kho gayi! aur maine socha tum mujhse gussa ho!..maine buddy list check kiya phir se..and i was like "srish kahaan hai!?!?" ..buddy req phir se bhej rahi hoon...accept karlo 😛😆...Oh , Sirsh ..you are a smart cookie! 😆 tumne guess kar liya kya hoga..damn! 😆 yes he will save her..no point denying now 😛..yeah..see what i meant by that was no matter what Piya even goes through in her life..it is designed to be sacrificed for Abhay..cause destiny wants her to know about hi , to understand him..and there is this pull from the very beginning...to fall in love with a statutory warning..you need a lot more than undying love...cause sometimes..just loving isn't enough. and so problems become bigger and you need to put yourself at stake..lol i love dark men too 😆

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Posted: 13 years ago

#339

wow superb update!!!!👏

liked the first part where you described abhay and his pain...so touching.😭
😳pia is already feeling some connection with abhay😍...she likes dark heroes😆 ...alvi was so right when she said that abhay reminds her of kishore...pia is seeing the hope in abhay who represent the darkness himself😒...poor girl...will have to suffer a lot.
n that brandon😡...i can understand that word "retard" scratched his old wounds but then also...what he did to pri was very bad...hope nothing will happen to pri.

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Nabakov_Musings

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Posted: 13 years ago

#340

Originally posted by: anjali0111
wow superb update!!!!👏

liked the first part where you described abhay and his pain...so touching.😭
😳pia is already feeling some connection with abhay😍...she likes dark heroes😆 ...alvi was so right when she said that abhay reminds her of kishore...pia is seeing the hope in abhay who represent the darkness himself😒...poor girl...will have to suffer a lot.
n that brandon😡...i can understand that word "retard" scratched his old wounds but then also...what he did to pri was very bad...hope nothing will happen to pri.

Piya will suffer A LOT. Pri ko kuch nahi hoga. 😳 Brandon thodha sudhaar jayegaa , don't worry. 😆