SECOND CHANCE OR SHADOW OF PAST (Pt 1A) - Page 2

Originally posted by: ksfan2

loved it sarah a wonderful update as usual...loved the consequenes too ...eagerly waiting for both of them😃

Originally posted by: MelodiousDreams

Sarah, this is such a wonderful start! Please do continue as soon as you can manage, because I am really looking forward to this! 😃

Quoting a few of my favorite passages:

AARTI SHARMA!!. Holy crap! His new heroine was in his math class?. She must be completely beautiful and full of life. Smirking, he made a mental note...he'd have his chance to introduce himself after class. He slowly turned, watching openly, who was the girl with the beautiful name.

He blinked as he saw a tall, slightly overweight girl stand up next to him. She kept her head down, avoiding eye contact with anyone. He recognized her as the girl with the best test scores in the eleventh grade. He'd thought about trying to beat her test scores, which always came very close to hers but never crossed.

Several things to say about the beginning. One, loved the essay that caught Yash's attention! Aarti's passion for helping others and inspiring them clearly shows...and she speaks from the heart, it seems. Such a lovely girl, I think she's adorable already! Two, "his new heroine" was the cutest reaction ever, haha...But "the girl with the beautiful name" was an even sweeter reaction! Awww. Three, the irony of Aarti being the sort of girl that people (especially the popular ones) would hardly give a second glance to because of her appearance and possibly her studious nature as well...And yet, that ended up catching Yash's eye. That sincerity and conviction, the person and personality within the "slightly overweight girl" who had only been nameless until today...

Yash tapped his pencil on his page. Her body size didn't show on her face. Under those terrible glasses that were a few years out of date, she was lovely.

I found this to be extremely sweet. He examines her, assesses her...concludes that she is quite lovely...The "terrible glasses" being a few years out of date is a cute little detail. Aarti isn't the fashion trend type of girl, am I right? 🤔 She seems very simple and very sweet. I love her already.

After class he was going to introduce himself, but his friend, Rakesh, was calling for him for whatever reason. By the time he pulled himself away from that conversation, she was gone.

He passed her in the hallway as she stood at her locker. She glanced his way, but when she noticed he was looking at her, she buried her head deep in her locker.

Okay, Aarti Sharma was painfully shy. That made sense, since no one knew if she had any friends at all. Most of what he knew of her, he had heard from his friends making fun of her. It was hard not to, the way she sat in the library at lunch periods alone.

Awww. I love how Yash wants to meet her and introduce himself...But the last paragraph is so bittersweet. So Yash has noticed her before...? Here, there, around the school, it seems...And his friends typically make fun of her...Why am I not surprised? *sigh* But still, he wants to meet her. And I can't wait to see what happens next! Off to read it again! I might be back later with more thoughts about Yash if I have time - and if you haven't posted another update before then!

Originally posted by: RA17

hey Sarah

i must appreciate your first for your great piece of writing... n the way you take us to each charcter and make us adore them with their plus and minus...

congrats for this again a bautiful piece.. looking forward to your next as its really sound interesting to me... the teenage love and as it begins with childhood so it will take good time to unfold the whole we will be blessed with more of your writings.😃😃😃

thanks for PM😉

Originally posted by: miti16295

wow Sarah interesting start

i love ur writing and i know this is also gona be amazing story just like Consequences so eagerly waiting for the next part .👍🏼

update soon😉

Originally posted by: shalini28

wow great , lovely, mindblowing.

I am again hooked to this ff😳 and the credit goes to u dear😳

btw waiting for the next part😳

Whoa...thanks for such an awesome comment..am loving it 😆

Originally posted by: SarahRam

Gal! You dissected the story very well...hmm, that shows you've hopelessly buried yourself into this story. Awww...I just want to hug you 🤗, you're one of the best supporter ever.

BOLD (black): Yes, he's smitten by her hand writing as well as her personality, inside out! Well, that is good isn't it...rather than liking a person based on their beauty alone.

BOLD (pink): Well, I wouldn't say that she's totally a out of trend kind of girl...it's just that she loved to be left alone and stay low profile. Despite that quality, she managed to attract the most popular guy of school...awesome right? 😉

BOLD (blue): Yeah, he did notice when she scored higher than him in maths and randomly when his friends make fun of her, but never did he realise that behind all that dull soul lies a genius...and that's what attracted the "bee to the flower" 😆

Will definitely continue very soon as part 1B is ready to be posted 😉 and thank you so much once again!

Originally posted by: SarahRam

Whoa...thanks for such an awesome comment..am loving it 😳😆

Sure dear, I'll continue pretty soon...just check this page and I'll PM you as well 😊