Rescued- A Kittya_Cullen FF. Note: Pg 85 - Page 6

Originally posted by: jojo1986

wow loved it update soon👏

Originally posted by: elanpremi

Awesome update. It is really sooting to see Yash is there to support her. Can feel Aarti's pain n Yash's concern. Keep up the good work yaar👍🏼

Originally posted by: freya123

superb part

Originally posted by: errrm

😲 WOW! Kittiya, this is amazingly beautiful! 👏

Right from the beginning, I was completely hooked, and could visualise every single bit - the dupatta, the strands of hair, the water. Such a brilliantly evocative description of her about to drown... first the blank resignation, then the realisation of what was happening and the fight for life, then her giving up because it was too late. Goosebumps, man! It felt so real. Very very powerful writing! I absolutely loved the whole story so far, but really, the beginning took the cake! ⭐️

Then the Yash bit. I loved the symbolism in him having decided to finally let go of Arpita's ashes on that very day, just before he would meet Arti. His jumping to the river was akin to his choosing life over death, and fighting to rescue that life. And the beauty of him noticing the sunset after so long... dramatic irony much? 😉

And here too,

"Yash could still feel the blood on his clothes, and a surge of dark pain rushed through him as he remembered something. He shut it off, and hurried after the nurses."

He shut it off, whatever memory that was.

Brilliant first part. I loved the descriptions, and I loved the subtle foreshadowing that you weave into the story so effortlessly 👏

Then, in the second part, a lovely symbolism yet again: the mangalsutra strangling her.

And even this: "the feel of his cold skin being warmed by the life draining out of her, staining them both deep red, lingered in his mind."

... as though, even in the life-threatening stage she was in, somehow she provided that warmth of life to him, which he needs so desperately!

And the rose incident would be another beautiful example of your artistry with words! At first the rose reminds him of Arpita, then almost unconsciously his thoughts flit over to Arti, as he wonders if she would like the rose. And finally when the thorn pricks him - we get a foreshadowing that the transition from Arpita to Arti is bound to be painful, and laced with the anger he would feel then, towards himself and towards Arti.

I am in awe of the way you have portrayed Yash's internal conflicts. It's not easy to translate into words, but you do it very well! Even though he is inconsistent (and needs to be, given his state of mind), you make it seem natural and comprehensible. One can't help but empathise.

I like how Arti breaks off her mangalsutra that was holding her back, strangling her. Finally, she too, lets go, realising that what she was holding on to was hollow and meaningless after all. It's incredibly sad, but then Yash is there. I'm glad you have him offering that verbal reassurance that he'll be there for her. So touching! 😳

It's heartbreaking that she lost one of her children. I can imagine the guilt she would be feeling.

But, like a hero, Yash steps in again! Love it! I love that he himself is in so much pain, but finds in himself enough strength to take on the responsibility of a complete stranger. That really typifies the character of Yash even in the show, and you depict it wonderfully!

Give yourself several huge pats on the back, Kittiya! This really is fantastic writing! 👏 👏 👏

Thank you for sending me the link!! Can't wait for your next update! 😃

The words highlighted in blue actually represent something that I try not to do. Add too blatant a sign when I write. I like it when my readers are given the chance to think things through for themselves, as such, I tend to prefer more foreshadowing and insinuations, rather than outright statements.😆 So the fact that you don't mind me sticking that in there so obviously is reassuring🥳. I would have preferred something more along the lines of him absorbing it, then in future parts mention it out of the blue😆😆. The sentences in pink represent the ideas that you've brought closer to the forefront of my mind, so thank you!! As for yellow, I'll be mellow and give nary a bellow😆, i.e. not a hint nor a pip of information.

Originally posted by: 16021983

Awesome update dude/dudet😛 hpe u update soon😊

Originally posted by: Kittya_Cullen

When I saw your name appear on the page, I will admit, I was a bit nervous. I didn't quite know what you were going to say, would it confirm what I secretly feared, or emphasise what I attempt to coerce myself into believing.😆 It's just that when I write, there is so much that I want to share with my readers. I have this strong desire for them to be there, right beside my characters, as they travel whatever path I send them on. So when I saw your words of praise, I will admit, I was this (--->") close to tears (of joy of course 😆).

Aww, you deserve every bit of it! Your work truly is brilliant! ⭐️

I think the humility, bordering on self-doubt, that you have, is partly what makes you such a good writer... because it makes you put in a lot of effort and thought in what you write. And really, it shows, and how! 😃

The words highlighted in blue actually represent something that I try not to do. Add too blatant a sign when I write. I like it when my readers are given the chance to think things through for themselves, as such, I tend to prefer more foreshadowing and insinuations, rather than outright statements.😆

Haha, no, no, it's not that you're blatant at all! Your hints and signs are very subtle... in no way, does it seem like they've been forced into the narrative in order to make a point. Everything fits in very naturally and flows smoothly. It's just that I tend to over-read into things 😆

So the fact that you don't mind me sticking that in there so obviously is reassuring🥳. I would have preferred something more along the lines of him absorbing it, then in future parts mention it out of the blue😆😆.

Actually, yes, when I find that these little signs have been carelessly dropped in here and there in the story, to me, it shows that the writer has a vision at the back of his/her mind. And I think that's very important. That underlying vision that holds the different events of the narrative together, adds in a lot more interest and intrigue to the story - a third dimension, so to speak. It makes everything much more meaningful, and I love that!

The sentences in pink represent the ideas that you've brought closer to the forefront of my mind, so thank you!! As for yellow, I'll be mellow and give nary a bellow😆, i.e. not a hint nor a pip of information😳.

Hehe.. I understand 😉

Dear old green points to me dancing crazily in the background, overjoyed

I'm glad my comment made you so happy! 😳

THANK YOU ERRRM!!!!!!!

My name's Anu, but you can call me whatever you like - you'd make it sound cute, whatever it is!

Originally posted by: errrm

Originally posted by: Kittya_Cullen

It's a dudette😆, and thank you! For a moment, you reminded me of my bestie 😲😆

Originally posted by: 16021983

k I'm gonna call u dudette frm now on k😆 n I'm gonna take tht as a compliment depending on the kinda person ur bestie is😊