new fan fic-- Bawri Piya Ki (imp note) - Page 3

Created

Last reply

Replies

63

Views

21.7k

Users

12

Likes

58

Frequent Posters

shruthiR thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 15 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: kaasshh

yaaa he he he😆😆

well still if they have any prblm i cn change pratigya's character...bt that wud nt convey my message 😔

I'd say tht right now,it's best if you go ahead.If there is some sort of a problem later on you can adjust it.And since the theme has a message I don't think it'll offend anyone.
kasturika_kashu thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 15 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: shruthiR

I'd say tht right now,it's best if you go ahead.If there is some sort of a problem later on you can adjust it.And since the theme has a message I don't think it'll offend anyone.

shruti see i have edited pratigya's character a bit...u will like it😳
shruthiR thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 15 years ago
#23

Originally posted by: kaasshh

shruti see i have edited pratigya's character a bit...u will like it😳

I'll check it out😊
shruthiR thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 15 years ago
#24
Hmmm........i definitely like the improved version of Pratigya's sketch.Now I'd say,GO FOR IT!!👍🏼
kasturika_kashu thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 15 years ago
#25

Originally posted by: shruthiR

Hmmm........i definitely like the improved version of Pratigya's sketch.Now I'd say,GO FOR IT!!👍🏼

thnx😃 so am writing down the frst chapter...it will be updated soon😊
by the way u dint push the like button😆😆
shruthiR thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 15 years ago
#26

Originally posted by: kaasshh

thnx😃 so am writing down the frst chapter...it will be updated soon😊

by the way u dint push the like button😆😆

gr8!!oops,sorry I forgot😳.abhi press kar deti hoon😊
kasturika_kashu thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 15 years ago
#27
agen edited frst page😆 and added more characters😆
..CountingStars thumbnail
16th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 15 years ago
#28
Omg That Song Made Me Cry!! :( Ive Seen The Film Nd Its Amazing!! Looking Forward To This FF =)
parvs thumbnail
18th Anniversary Thumbnail Visit Streak 180 Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 15 years ago
#29
hey nice fan fic... please continue soon and send me a pm when you do
kasturika_kashu thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 15 years ago
#30
chapter----1
nhi,ye nhi ho sakta!!!!-----krishna dropped down on the stairs,head in hands.. he refused to belive wat his dai said-----nhi.....hum ye kabhi nhi maan sakte...dadi aap istarah suni sunayi baat par bharosa nhi kar sakte.....woh aisa nhi kar sakti hamare saath......nhi kar sakti....
his dadi sat down beside him,and put her hand on his shoulder,her eyes were glistening with tears-----baba hamara bharosa kar...hum sach keh rahe hain......kanya....uske bauji ne.....usko....... she cudnt say anymore and burst into tears.....
krishna raised his head,his jaws tightened------dadi..ye galat hain.....woh aisa kaise kar sakte hain.....usne...usne apni beti ko bech diya? chang rupaiyo ke liye? apne aapko us thakur se bachane ke liye apni beti ko bech diya.....ye baap to kya insaan kehlane ke bhi layak nhi hain......
he turned to his dadi and said------dadi...kya aap janti hain..ki woh thakur kahan rehta hain? kaha le gaya usne humri kanya ko?
dadi----nhi baba...hume woh sab kuch nhi pata...pure gaon ne dekha hain use kanya ko shaadi karke le jate hue par koi kuch nhi janta ki woh use kahaan le gaya hain.......aur...aur....woh kaisi halat mein hogi....humri bacchi......!!!!
although his own heart was burning in agony and pain..he tried to console his dadi.. he was vry happy while returning back to his town...after 3 long years he wud see his kanya's face agen..,her beautiful smile,her lovely ways..he wud hear her cheerful laughter..see her dancing around in joy through the meadows.. he had been dreaming abt her through the whole journey frm delhi to uttranchal.... bt all his dreams shattered down into a zillion pieces as he got this news frm his dadi.... kanya's father had taken a huge sum of money as a loan frm a thakur whu wasnt evn frm their town... and unable to return it evn in the last moment,he got his only daughter,kanya..married off to that notorious thakur..to save himself frm his anger.......
krishna's whole body shook in anger....he felt like ripping the wrld apart....------how cud he do this?---he thot----that also with his own daughter? i will nt forgive him for this....NVR......
.............................................................................
vishal rao(kanya's father) was sitting on a comfortable string cot...and enjoying the warm sun of december...wen krishna pushed open the gate and stormed inside....he was fuming in hatred and anger.....
vishal sat up quickly to see him...this face became pale for a moment bt he brushed it off-------are tum? tum wapas aa gaye?
krishna-----haan....aur ate hi aapka ghatia aur gandi harkato ke bare mein pata chal gaya......
an evil smile spread across vishal's face....krishna's interiors burned to notice that...he felt like crushing his neck....
vishal-----oh to tum yahaan humri ashirvaad lene nhi aye ho...humse jhagra karne aye ho kyun?
krishna dint reply.....
vishal waited for few seconds and said-----dekho krishna...hum mante hain ki tumre saath humne acche nhi kiya..lekin zaara socho...hum ek beti ke baap hain....kya hume itna bhi haq nhi hain ki apni beti ke baare mein kuch accha soche kyun? aab dekho...manta hun ki tum ek pada likha accha ladka ho....lekin ek thakurayen bankar to humri beti zyaada khush rahegi na?
krishna found it vry hard to swallow his evilness.....he gulped....
vishal cntinued to say-----aab woh shakti singh use jo khushiya de payega...kya tum use de pate? bolo?nhi na? isiliye humne wohi kiya jo humne thk samjha apni beti ke liye.......
krishna walked towards him...his hands clenched into fists... vishal rao looked panicked-----beta.....dekho.....tum....humri baat ko samjho..aur use bhul jao..manta hun bht mushkil hain..lekin plzz use apni nayi zindagi mein khush rahne do....aur hume hamare haal par chod do.....
krishna stopped near his cot and said in a whispering tone------saale buddhe.....tu hume ye samjha raha hain ki tune aisa kyun kiya? ka hum nhi jante tere niyat ke bare mein? saala sharabi.....loafar hain tu....sara paisa apne aayiashon mein dubakar aoniu beti ko qurban kar diya apne aap ko bachane ke liye...huh? tu kya samajhta hain hum aise hi bhul jayenge sabkuch? nhi......hum iska badla leke rahenge........aur tu bas dekhta ja...ki hum ka karte hain.......
he turned and was abt to leave wen suddenly he remembered somethng and looked back... he put his hand inside his pocket and took out a small bundle of hundrd bucks... he had saved this amnt frm his pocket money in delhi and wanted to spend it in buying somethng for his beloved kanya..... he gazed at the money.....and tried to keep himself strong.... then he threw it on vishal's face....and said-------ee le saala.......aish kar........
he left............................
............................................................................................

Related Topics

Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".