ABCD drabble os by lovelylavender

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Heyya guys!!

This is a neutral os so u can place any couple in it.. its exactly of 499 words..

I used all the three words yipppeee!!

Renegade, jealous, everything

The concept is... let it be,, ull understand it as u read.. so here it goes.. I hope u all like..

Plz if time permits do comment,, it matters a lot!!

Thanks

shanaya

She was dancing with someone else... the love of his life was dancing with someone else's hand on her waist and her hand around someone else's neck.. he felt like his right.. his possession was being taken away.. but he culdnt do anything... because she and the whole crowd in the ball room claimed him to be a renegade... they thought he has ditched his country and his job of being a CBI agent.. they thot he was bribed and he let out all their secrets... even she believed these rumours...

That thing broke him.

He was looking at the girl in a golden saari and suddenly a pang of jealousy shot in him went tht sumone else started playing with the dori of her blouse.. she was ofcouse uncomfortable.. he smirked seeing this as he realized that she had not given this right to anyoneelse but him.. she excused herself but wen she stepped back she met the eyes she loved.. the eyes of the one who betrayed her.. the eyes she longed to see.. his eyes..

She pulled out a gun from beneath her saari and shot him at his heart... her eyes stsrted streming but this was wat she was supposed to do.. kill a renegade.. he smiled at the irony that even today his heart bleeded for her.. today it actually did..but the last thing he saw was her eyes crying and pleading him to wipe her tears.. and before he fainted he could just manage to say...

I love you

She lost her everything in that one moment.. her life.. her heart.. herself.. because she lost him...

He opened his eyes slowly and tried to get up.. but his heart pained.. physically also.. but as he moved his head he saw the most beautiful sight.. his love.. on the small hospital bed on which he was.. was clinging to him like a baby to a teddy.. he smiled at her childishness as he saw her hands around his plastered torso and her legs around his.. not letting him go.. he smiled lovingly as he realized that she got to know the truth that their boss had given him a secret task of pretending to be with the gang and get their plans.. he understood she was guilty.. but he loved the fact that she did not lose hope,, she brought him back.. for her.. for him... for them...

She slowly opened her eyes which wer now red due to continuous crying.. he managed to say..

hey love'

sorry'.. she just said this as she knew he must hav understood heer.. he always does.. and that's y she loved him..

He smiled as he snuggled her closer.. he knew she was feeling guilty but he was mend to make her feel better.. so changing the topic he asked.

how is my shot heart still beating?'

She smiled and merged their lips and replied..

"coz it beats for me..."

And she got back her everything.. HIM...❤️


so it ends here..

i hope it was tolerable..

sorry pehli baar tried a challenge os..

do leeave ur feedback.. thanks😊😊

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luv_arsha thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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its super awesome ...loved it
-vaishnavimural thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awesome os..

sweet n cute.. u penned d emotions brilliantly ...

i loved d way he managed to tel love u n d way she was clutching him like a teddy .. d end was awesome... finally she got to know d truth that he was impersonating to b d gang member to collect d information n ve not turned a traitor n was guilty of it for shooting him..

amazing os..
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Posted: 12 years ago
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fabulous👏
loved d way u used d words😊

fantastic one⭐️

loved ittt❤️
Edited by aishu3003 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Fantastic os
Really loved the way u used the words
Great work
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Posted: 12 years ago
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res
unres..

shan this is really awsum OS..

loved it to every bit..

nd u used ah-mazingly all three word

keep it up dear..

lots of love,
carino.😳
Edited by Abhilashaarsha - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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I loved ur OS dear...U used d three words very nicely...
Well written!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Lovely os i like the dialoge ki how my shot heart is beating n krias replay bcoz it beats for me love it
arsha_simran thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awesome os dear!!!
very nice and different...
loved it and the lines sooo beautifully written!!!
very nice!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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it was sweet and simple...loved it

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